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雨&彩虹UID: 132532

240"Much of the information that people assume is 'factual' actually turns out to be inaccurate. Thus, any piece of information referred to as a 'fact' should be mistrusted since it may well be proven false in the future."

The speaker asserts that since that much of the information that people assume as factual ones actually turns out to be inaccurate, any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted for the sake of its possible fallibility in the future. While I agree that hold certain critical thinking towards information provided might be reasonable, it might be too presumptuous to claim that all facts should be held in doubt and suspicion since it may well be proven false in the future.

It is true that in our daily empirical observation, some factual information as they claim serve not as an authentic reflection of what actually occurs but a distortion about the facts. For example, the radical advertising campaign provide customers countless information labeled with such slogans “ trust us, we are conferring the most truthful information”. Later, when customers really inquire into the product’s function and usage, they surprisingly discovered that those advertisements are mere mirage of a sweet dream, which disappeared as soon as the people open their eyes and find what is the underlying truth out of the deceptive claim. Turning to the political realm, we find compelling evidence to prove that the elegant speech delivered by politicians and the information carried out in their speech are actually diplomatic rhetoric which tell us no more than a balmy lullaby to cheat electorate, defeat opponent, satiate personal ambition and gain power and dominance. Even in the scientific field where information can only be attested by empirical trial-and –error process and repeated examination, information fall sometimes as a result as outside influence such as political power and religious pressure or deficiency in some scientific methodology. Consider the case of people’s stubborn insistence on that the earth is the center of the universe or that the space and time are linear in essence, although reluctant to admit, we have to realize that once factual information accepted by public might turn out to have litter value attached.

But what I could not accept the speaker’s contention is that he goes too cynical to claim that since all information will finally be proved false, it is not necessary to credit any information as factual. This goes against the psychological and cognitive development of human being and will surely lead to a detrimental influence on those people who are discredit of all information provided. As rational individuals, we should realize that factual and false information are coexisted and sometimes interchangeable, but no matter how complicated this process is, factual information will finally stand up as truth through survival during the testing and retesting period. For example, we still hold number theory and some research result of outer space as the true mirror of facts. We still accolade the convincing information delivered in Martin Luther King’s speech that black people are discriminated and prejudiced and the end of the struggle should be that whatever the races, humans were born equal. We still credit archeologists’ work as valuable and revolutionary, although we have no exact idea of what the true scenario of past is really alike. We still buy Microsoft software and wear Levis because we believe that these prominent enterprise are fundamentally responsible for their customers as well their own reputation by revealing to the customers authentic information.

To sum up, although I agree that certain degree of skepticism and critical thinking will definitely aid people in making sensible choices and judgment, we should not go too far to claim that we should discredit all information since in the near future, al that we once believe will turn out to be false and deceiving. For if this skepticism runs wild, we will lose faith in everything we encounter and finally get the wrong way of how the cognitive process functions.

happyman2000UID: 136936

240"Much of the information that people assume is 'factual' actually turns out to be inaccurate. Thus, any piece of information referred to as a 'fact' should be mistrusted since it may well be proven false in the future."

The speaker asserts that since that much of the information that people assume as factual ones (one) actually turns out to be inaccurate, any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted for the sake of its possible fallibility in the future. While I agree that (to) hold certain critical thinking towards information provided might be reasonable, it might be too presumptuous to claim that all facts should be held in doubt and suspicion since it may well be proven false in the future. (since 后面接的东西好像可以去掉)

It is true that in our daily empirical observation, some factual information as they claim serve not as an authentic reflection of what actually occurs but a distortion about the facts. For example, the radical advertising campaign provide customers countless information labeled with such slogans “ trust us, we are conferring the most truthful information”. （how many people assume advertisements to be “factual”?）Later, when customers really inquire into the product’s function and usage, they surprisingly discovered that those advertisements are mere mirage of a sweet dream, which disappeared as soon as the people open their eyes and find what is the underlying truth out of the deceptive claim. Turning to the political realm, we find compelling evidence to prove that the elegant speech delivered by politicians and the information carried out in their speech are actually diplomatic rhetoric which tell us no more than a balmy lullaby to cheat electorate, defeat opponent, satiate personal ambition and gain power and dominance.(rhetoric, balmy, lullaby, satiate, 这么多好词，我可写不出来！佩服！) Even in the scientific field where information can only be attested by empirical trial-and –error process and repeated examination, information fall（s） sometimes as a result as outside influence such as political power and religious pressure or deficiency in some scientific methodology. Consider the case of people’s stubborn insistence on that the earth is the center of the universe or that the space and time are linear in essence, although reluctant to admit, we have to realize that once factual information accepted by public might turn out to have litter value attached. 政治家和广告的例子举得不大好。并没有多少人认为它们“factual”。另外，你多多少少还是应该说点理由，不能全是例子呀！

But what I could not accept the speaker’s contention is that he goes too cynical to claim(go too cynical to claim是好东西，我记住了！下次再我的文章里看到类似的句型不要见怪哟！) that since all information will finally be proved false, it is not necessary to credit any information as factual. This goes against the psychological and cognitive development of human being and will surely lead to a detrimental influence on those people who are discredit of all information provided. As rational individuals（beings）, we should realize that factual and false information are coexisted and sometimes interchangeable(你想要说互相转换吧，interchangeable是互相交换的意思，interconvertible才是互换的意思，刚查的字典！哈哈！), but no matter how complicated this process is, factual information will finally stand up as truth through survival during the testing and retesting period. For example, we still hold number theory and some research result of outer space as the true mirror of facts. We still accolade the convincing information delivered in Martin Luther King’s speech that black people are discriminated and prejudiced and the end of the struggle should be that whatever the races, humans were born equal. We still credit archeologists’ work as valuable and revolutionary, although we have no exact idea of what the true scenario of past is really alike. We still buy Microsoft software and wear Levis because we believe that these prominent enterprise are fundamentally responsible for their customers as well their own reputation by revealing to the customers authentic information. 这段写得非常好！

To sum up, although I agree that certain degree of skepticism and critical thinking will definitely aid people in making sensible choices and judgment, we should not go too far to claim（我又记住了一个好句型）that we should discredit all information since in the near future, al that we once believe will turn out to be false and deceiving. For if this skepticism runs wild, we will lose faith in everything we encounter and finally get the wrong way of how the cognitive process functions.

这是我第一次完整地看你的文章，真后悔以前没多看些！写得非常好了，语言无可挑剔，据说你还是在45分钟内完成的。了不起呀！这么短的时间里，打死我也写不出这种质量的文章来！
我提一些内容和结构上的意见，从这个题目的要求来看，重点似乎应该放在第二部分，即any piece of information referred to as a 'fact' should be mistrusted since it may well be proven false in the future。第一部分不是说不需要论述，但字数最好不要太多，点到为止。而你两部分平均用力，第一部分显得有些罗索，第二部分虽然写得很好，但是内容不够深入，总感觉没展开！
以你的语言功底，我觉得你应该往6分奔的，如果你再想办法在内容和结构提高一点点的话！
说得不对，请批评！

雨&彩虹UID: 132532

猪猪:)

你的悄悄话看到了,谢谢你的修改,呵呵,看完你的评语很有压力的:)不过我会努力的, 其实看你每天那么努力也会激励我了,虽然我懒散了一点:)

这几天天气热,所以我心脏不太好,一直在休息,等好点了,我会继续写点东西.

你也保重哦.

ken0405UID: 124994

240"Much of the information that people assume is 'factual' actually turns out to be inaccurate. Thus, any piece of information referred to as a 'fact' should be mistrusted since it may well be proven false in the future."

The speaker asserts that since that much of the information that people assume as factual ones (one) actually turns out to be inaccurate, any piece of information referred to as a fact should be mistrusted for the sake of its possible fallibility in the future. While I agree that (to) hold certain critical thinking towards information provided might be reasonable, it might be too presumptuous to claim that all facts should be held in doubt and suspicion since it may well be proven false in the future. 本文观点。开头简洁明了，和我的味道差不多。呵呵。即使最后这个since给人感觉不怎么好，是不是有点问题，这个since应该是对it might be（也就是支持自己观点），而你这里的since是支持原来观点。

It is true that in our daily empirical observation（s？？）, some factual information as they claim （does not）serve not as an authentic reflection of what actually occurs but a distortion about the facts. （分论点，先让步，好句子）（举例，没有废话，好！）For example, the radical advertising campaign provide customers countless information labeled with such slogans “ trust us, we are conferring the most truthful information”. Later, when customers really inquire into the product’s function and usage, they surprisingly discovered that those advertisements are mere mirage of a sweet dream, which disappeared as soon as the people open their eyes and find what is the underlying truth out of the deceptive claim. （这个生活上的例子我觉得有问题，I think, the key of this point is that the information people assume as being factual turns out to be inaccurate. 要支持你的观点应该是消费者认为是factual的后来又变成inaccurate的了，你没有提到，只是说卖方的意见）（前后用first，second，finally分开会跟好）Turning to the political realm, we find （another）compelling（多余） evidence to prove that the elegant speech delivered by politicians and the information carried out in their speech are actually diplomatic rhetoric which tell us no more than a balmy lullaby to cheat electorate, defeat opponent, satiate personal ambition and gain power and dominance.(rhetoric, balmy, lullaby, satiate, 这么多好词，我也佩服ing) Even in the scientific field where information can only be attested by empirical trial-and –error process and repeated examination, information fall（s） sometimes as a result as outside influence such as political power and religious pressure or deficiency in some scientific methodology. Consider the case of people’s stubborn insistence on that the earth is the center of the universe or that the space and time are linear in essence, although reluctant to admit, we have to realize that once factual information accepted by public might turn out to have litter value attached.不能全是例子呀！我赞成全是例子，多有代表性啊，daily life， politics， and science。好！就是前两个例子不太切你这段的题。最后应该集中一下的！再来一句你这段的point的。

But what I could not accept the speaker’s contention is that he goes too cynical to claim(go too cynical to claim是好东西，可以表示盲目，极端吗？如果可以以后我也用，呵呵。) that since all information will finally be proved false, it is not necessary to credit any information as factual. （抓住了the complexity of the issue，我认为）This goes against the psychological and cognitive development of human being and will surely lead to a detrimental influence on those people who are discredit of all information provided. As rational individuals（beings）, we should realize that factual and false information are coexisted and sometimes interchangeable(你想要说互相转换吧，interchangeable是互相交换的意思，interconvertible才是互换的意思，刚查的字典！哈哈！), but no matter how complicated this process is, factual information will finally stand up as truth through survival during the testing and retesting period. （你是想说，有些东西是不会变的吧？如果是我就会在humanity下手的）For example, we still hold number theory and some research result of outer space as the true mirror of facts. We still accolade the convincing information delivered in Martin Luther King’s speech that black people are discriminated and prejudiced and the end of the struggle should be that whatever the races, humans were born equal. We still credit archeologists’ work as valuable and revolutionary, although we have no exact idea of what the true scenario of past is really alike. We still buy Microsoft software and wear Levis because we believe that these prominent enterprise are fundamentally responsible for their customers as well their own reputation by revealing to the customers authentic information. 这段写得非常好！（我认为，这是你的主题段，全文的中心，分开说会更好的，比如，1，说有些东东是永远不会变的。可以举人性的例子，反面的可以discrimination, war，poverty，hungry， homeless, crime, which stem from human nature, such as self-interest, and greedy. 。2，说如果什么都不相信的后果，齐人悠天可以用。科学的例子。前一段太多，可能是因为比较好写的缘故，可是这才是你的中心啊，自己看看吧。

To sum up, although I agree that certain degree of skepticism and critical thinking will definitely aid people in making sensible choices and judgment, we should not go too far to claim（我又记住了一个好句型，me too）that we should discredit all information since in the near future, al that we once believe will turn out to be false and deceiving. For if this skepticism runs wild, we will lose faith in everything we encounter and finally get the wrong way of how the cognitive process functions.

45分钟，我还没试过，不过以前看过你的孙的分析，很好的东东，互相学习。文章很clear。观点也很鲜明。好呀。向你学习。呵呵。继续加油前进！
多注意身体，心脏不好？？
好好休息，以后你的文章我都看看，当然，我说话不留情面，即使对牛人，呵呵。好东东

一起飞翔UID: 131321

感觉上这篇文章再短些就好了。