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发表于 2003-7-28 18:35:31 |显示全部楼层
issue:no amount of information can eliminate prejudices because prejudice is rooted in emotion not reason in emotion, not reason

Here comes two questions: What is the base of prejudices and can information eliminate it? The title apparently support emotion rather than reason as the foundation and the root of prejudices and believe it is impossible to be eliminated. The idea has some merit, for after all, the stubborn and serious racial and sexual prejudices based on emotion live for such a long time unreasonably. But I still insist on a case-by-case study on prejudices, I strongly agree that obdurate prejudices indeed are suitable for the description made in the title, while to those everyday prejudices based on some small misapprehension rather than complete emotion will finally be eliminated by more information.

In daily life when getting along with our relatives, friends, companions and other familiar people, most of small prejudices are caused by scant information resulting misapprehension, which will be easily cleared off if we communicate with each other honestly. For example, while we deeply love our parents, the different attitudes on the same problem between parents and us often cultivate such bias among us that parents all preferred to retreat behind unreasonable authority, and corresponding prejudices in parents’ minds that we are always so ignorant and impolite. If one day parents become open-minded and we become more considerate, through pure-hearted discussion on problems where our main controversy lie, given that we express out our real feeling including complaint and admiration on parents and parents disclose their deep love they usually reluctant to speak out, I believe those prejudices will eliminate immediately for there is such great love between the two generations. Gladly, in reality, many television programs have held such emotional discussion and they have reached big success.

However, racial prejudices especially on Blacks and sexual prejudices and likewise with stubborn root and base of emotion, may be too difficult to diminish. Completely coming from a kind of instinctive emotion and ignoring the general principle of equality in human beings, these prejudices are never ready to change themselves because of facts strongly tending to suppress them. Everyone has witnessed Blacks’ greatness------their surprising tenuous resolution displayed on sport grounds, their special talents on music displayed by distinguished black’s ballads, and their genius on literature having acquired admitted praise, but everything remains as before. Prejudices on blacks still exist in large extension. On the other hand, women, although have shown much outstanding capability more than just knowing how to manage housework, still encounter unjustified treat, even in this civilized country after years of feminists’ struggles.

Although there seems to be a trend of eliminating such prejudices and our society seems to be making great progress on justice, for so many blacks and women have taken important position in different areas and even become personalities, still, serious prejudices are widespread. Someone may argue on the example of Michael Jordan to emphasize the disappearance of racial prejudices, but with close scrutiny on empirical evidences, we will find that Jordan’s talents in fact never eliminate prejudices in America, for people’s appreciation on his skill on playing basketball does not equal to acceptability on his color of skin. To penetrate prejudices on women, we just need to take a glance on people who gain Nobel Prize, of which women takes such small proportion, but it has been asserted by authorities that at least 40 percent of the prizes should have gone to women.

To sum up, the sweeping conclusion made by the title deserve further delve. Prejudices cannot be simplified to be based on just reason or emotion, or be imposed a broad genralization in terms of whether they can be eliminated by information. On balance, I insist a case-by-case study on the two problems proposed by the title.
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发表于 2003-7-29 14:15:11 |显示全部楼层
写得挺好, 只是有些小问题, 例如 racial prejudice 的地点,比如在非洲黑人就不受歧视. 还有,us 指代不明,, 第二段论证的有些重复,
有些词用的太好了,从哪儿学来的? 例如:case- by- case study
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发表于 2003-7-30 12:50:35 |显示全部楼层
写的不错,语句和语法都挺出色的

第3段的论证有力,不过我觉得相比之下第2段就不是那么出色了,论证的比较少,也不是很有理


开头是不是有写繁了,而且speaker的观点给的有点突兀
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发表于 2003-7-30 13:33:54 |显示全部楼层
谢谢大家的意见. 其实我个人也觉得第二段的问题挺大, 大家可否再具体讲讲怎么改? 或者这个题目应该怎么写?
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发表于 2003-7-30 13:33:55 |显示全部楼层
谢谢大家的意见. 其实我个人也觉得第二段的问题挺大, 大家可否再具体讲讲怎么改? 或者这个题目应该怎么写?
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发表于 2003-8-2 19:27:31 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2003-8-2 20:03:28 |显示全部楼层
句法和用词上你做的很好!
英语系的吗?
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发表于 2003-8-2 20:46:27 |显示全部楼层
第二段是不是可以讲:由于历史的原因, 比如说说黑奴等等
可以吗》
还有你写文章写了多久?什么时候考试?
我觉得我现在的思路很乱的,写的乱七八糟的
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发表于 2003-8-2 21:52:31 |显示全部楼层
insightful and frequently

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发表于 2003-8-2 23:29:15 |显示全部楼层
值得学习
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我发给你的帖子
你没看到吗??
奇怪??
我是对你前几天的那个帖子里你说有问题的issue发的呀
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发表于 2003-8-3 00:03:36 |显示全部楼层
to 荧荧,
题库里没有这一题啊?但是好像有点眼熟,是不是被删掉了?
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发表于 2003-8-3 10:57:21 |显示全部楼层
好象没删啊
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发表于 2003-8-3 11:02:05 |显示全部楼层
to glidingsh: 可是我下一段已经写过黑奴问题了,再写合适吗
大家还有没有别的主意
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发表于 2003-8-3 13:35:51 |显示全部楼层
咦,我怎么查找了半天没有找到这道题啊?奇怪?
荧荧,题号是多少(旧的and 新的)?
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发表于 2003-8-3 13:52:15 |显示全部楼层
我觉得再写写没有关系,只要是不同的侧重方面
我看范文有时候也是说:这如前面的例子……
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