我的作文贴

theflyfishUID：2101420

45# cherrycarrie

非常感谢修改啊。
重复用词问题，主要是没什么积累，一时之间想不到什么替换词。要开始被单词了。
时态是和memoir相关的，我用的过去时。文章作者和lecturer提到的用现在时。我再想想。

theflyfishUID：2101420

7月21日综合

pengdegaoUID：2908139

43# theflyfish
我不能上传附件，群里留言了，你来找我要吧。

theflyfishUID：2101420

7月21日独立

cherrycarrieUID：2943359

7.20独立修改。
不好意思晚了这么多
综合的话可能还要再一会儿= =因为我还没做，，，，，，
好吧我尽快。。。真是不好意思

cherrycarrieUID：2943359

这是pengdegao修改的。
她好像没有添加附件的功能，所以代传一下~~~

cherrycarrieUID：2943359

7.20 综合修改。
真是晚了，对不起。。。

wendy316UID：2566643

快马加鞭的帮你改完了，嘎嘎。今天要早起，睡去了。

theflyfishUID：2101420

感谢楼上的各位。等会慢慢看

jennifersoUID：3132548

7.21已改好。不能上传附件，群里给你。

jennifersoUID：3132548

It is undeniable that most classic and well-accepted movies are inspirable and can teach people something about real life. However, except for this kind of movie, other types of movies also have values because they meet people’s various requirements.

The reason why people come into cinema (the reason of going into cinema is vary from people by people)is diverse from people to people, and(这个and多余，thus已经是连词了) thus different kinds of films are required to adapt all kinds of tastes, some of which（them） are even quirky. For instance, comedy might be treated as ridiculous and superficial by some pundits, but it is indisputable fact that comedy can make people laugh and cheer up depressed people. Every person needs relax occasionally. If their purpose is(单复数) just to relieve from(删除)（releasing stress） and (decreasing tiredness), they can watch Stephen Chow’s movies to devote themselves to the delightful environment for a moment. For those who desire to gain courage to overcome difficulties in front of their lives, comedies, such as One Piece or Naruto are still a good choice.（单复数一致）

Another type of film, science fiction, is also beneficial and can entertain audiences. Science fiction movies reflect sparks of human beings’ intelligence and widens（单复数一致） people’s horizon of imagination. James Cameron, one of the most successful directors of Hollywood, is a good example to illustrate this point. Cameron was a big fun of science fiction movies since he was young. He was always interested in those quirky, fantastic stories about outer space and dreamed to have an opportunity to seek the worlds filled with strange creatures. 举一些他的科幻作品来说明他的想象力。The romantic film Titanic actually comes from his dream of diving and searching the relic of this prominent gigantic ship. （泰坦尼克是真人真事，卡梅伦有其他非常多的好科幻作品可以引用更合适）

In sum, it is hard to decide what kind of movie is worth watching, because people have different requires when they watch movies. A good movie is not necessary to teach us something about real life. （这句话想表达的意思是？？）As long as we can get what we want from a movie, it can be categorized as a good movie.

theflyfishUID：2101420

56# jenniferso
非常感谢帮我改作文有几个地方稍微回应一下
1 thus是副词。
2 some of which是非限定性从句的用法，好像可以。不太确定
3 their purpose。google了一下，这种用法挺多的。他们的目的，指单一目的可以用单数吧。下面的a good choice同
4 relieve from 好像用错了。relieve stress
5 泰坦尼克的例子的本意是science fiction movie stirs him to search some strange thing.
6 最后一句没什么歧义吧。

theflyfishUID：2101420

7月22日独立

幕阳素素UID：3025800

我确实改了，只是发现的毛病少嘿嘿

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

你不要那么谦虚好吧>< 你写的很好了，我打分24分！
没有上25的原因是，字数有一点少。逻辑有一点点单一。语言流畅但没有很惊艳。
继续加油~~