我的作文贴

theflyfishUID: 2101420

7月23日独立

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

字数更少了><

theflyfishUID: 2101420

62# 冰雪蜂鸟
呵呵。越到周末，越松懈啊。

jackchen823UID: 2767008

看了你的作文强烈建议分段啊！！！

超级猴子UID: 3023123

7.23

theflyfishUID: 2101420

7月25日独立

冰雪蜂鸟UID: 2754485

我的在这里62楼：
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1279272-7-1.html

theflyfishUID: 2101420

68# 冰雪蜂鸟

谢谢修改。建议很中肯。只是有一点，我始终不认为toefl的文章必须有结尾。。。。虽然我发现几乎所有人都觉得没有结尾的文章不完整。

after90sundaeUID: 3132327

Do you agree with the following statement? If child want to do well in school. parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies.
How to make sure children to do well in school? It is always a spiny problem (spiny用的很好)for parents. From my view, the easiest way is to constrain or even forbid children to watch TV, since it can assure children to spend more time doing their homework and make their to focus on study.

The chief advantage of limiting TV hours of children is that they will spend more time finishing their homework and practicing what they learn at school, and therefore they can do better than those who spend less time in study. A widespread misunderstanding about study is that intelligence is the determinant factor of academic performance. However, it is not the intelligence, but diligence which hugely affects children’s test scores. This fact has been revealed by a group of American psychologists. According to them, children who perform best in class often spend three or four extra hours doing homework, whereas other children usually choose to watch TV during this time. As a result, if parents can reduce the time children spend in front of television and elongate the time they spend studying, children will do better at school.

Another reason to restrict the hours of watching TV is that children lack self-control and they are prone to turn their attentions from study to those interesting things casted on TV. Actually, it seems to be less contentious that television has some negative effects on the society, especially on children. Observers blame TV to plummeting levels of everyday socializing. Children spend more time watching TV shows and less time participating activities or discussing their classes. Owing to the pervasive exist of TV commercials, children present much more interests on materials and brands and they seem to be less concentrated on study compared with earlier generations. This trend is true, at least in America. In terms of a nationwide investigation, conducted since 1960s, 74% of contemporary American teens and tweens endorse “being very well-off financially” is the most important value. Back to 1967, the percent is 44%. In contrast, the value which shows the most compelling decline in endorsement is “developing a meaningful philosophy life.” Sociologists attribute the transition to TV. Consequently, to enhance children’s performance at school, parents should not allow their children to spend much time watching TV.
蓝色字体，我其实不太喜欢。。。听新东方的时候，说写写具体数字没关系，但是我一直没用过

个人角度不是太喜欢你的理由，好像不让看电视就是为了学习好，可能是因为刚考完g，思维停留在“好人是不坏的”这个阶段，所以我还是认为，要想有力的说明，限制看电视是对的，就得说明，不限制看电视是错的。 或者说我还是觉得你的证明方向不太妥当。

超级猴子UID: 3023123

好了

theflyfishUID: 2101420

7月27日独立

应小呆UID: 3109940

我回来了~改好了~

theflyfishUID: 2101420

73# 应小呆
回来了。终于考完了，羡慕。。。

chair020928UID: 2956418

对不起lz，0725作文直到现在才修改好，害得被群给踢了。
偶是在职考，前几天一直加班，没时间，请见谅~

theflyfishUID: 2101420

谢谢帮我改作文。

PS: forbid sb+to do