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We live in the best of time, we live in the worst of time. The sentence Dickenson wrote in his novel Two Cities can best describe contemporary world we live in. We enjoy more liberty because we have more choices and chances to achieve our potentials. However, we also feel lost and confused for the uncertainty of life.个人认为有一大段都是不必要的。。。最好开门见山吧。。。或者可以说，因为practical plans可以很有效率的达到目标，时间才不至于浪费。。。Thus we need plans to guide us toward future. The question now is what kind of plans we need, challenging ones or practical ones? From my perspective, practical plans about future can benefit people more because they are more feasible and flexible and thus can help people to achieve their goals more swiftly and smoothly.

Psychologists have studied why people hardly fulfill their plans and the result is that most people tend to overestimate their capabilities and underestimate the difficulty they will confront in the process. After several times of failures to complete plans, many people become frustrated and go to another extreme that they seriously doubt their ability and believe they are doing an impossible job and give up their plans finally. 厄，好多“and” To resolve this problem, psychologists put forward an easy solution which is to make plans more realistic. The best way is to separate plans as several clear steps and every step has definite and achievable goals. 这段真强，虽然我们三个写的都是一样的观点，为啥我觉得我这么幼稚= =
词汇也用的好。。（可以的话求解用词提高的方法。。。）Besides, plans should be adjustable to adapt to the change of one’s ability. Since people can finish their plans at first, they will build up confidence gradually and they are more likely to continue for a long time. Once what they do according to plans become to built-in habits, their goals are achieved successfully.

Another advantage of practical plans is that they are more flexible and people can adjust their goals in the process of exercising their plans. One problem people face when they make plans is that they are not very clear about what they really want and what they really interest in. You can recognize the very fact simply by seeing how many people loathe their major after four years’ experience in college even they claimed how they loved it before they enter college. 这是= =？As a result, compared to an unrealistic challenging plan, a pragmatic changeable plan is more beneficial.

In sum, people should make practical plans about future because they can benefit more.
后面逻辑不清，我觉得第二段你说了两个观点。可以吧besides那句移到下面来，结构更加清楚。例子少，说理多。

啊，写的用词和语句看起来很厉害诶~

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31# cherrycarrie
谢谢帮我修改啊。这篇确实是没思路。我看了几篇赞成practical plan的，也还是没想到更好的写法。
而且我发觉我和你对challenging plan的理解不同。你的理解好像是计划安排的比较紧，内容比较多，比一个人能正常完成的量要多。我理解成了plan最终要达成的目标比较challenging了。感觉你的理解能准确一些。

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Which is better, challenging plans about one's future or practical plans about one's future?

We live in the best of time, we live in the worst of time. The sentence Dickenson wrote in his novel Two Cities can best describe contemporary world we live in. We enjoy more liberty because we have more choices and chances to achieve our potentials. However, we also feel lost and confused for the uncertainty of life. Thus we need plans to guide us toward future. The question now is what kind of plans we need, challenging ones or practical ones? From my perspective, practical plans about future can benefit people more because they are more feasible and flexible and thus can help people to achieve their goals more swiftly and smoothly.

Psychologists have studied why people hardly fulfill their plans and the result is that most people tend to overestimate their capabilities and underestimate the difficulty they will confront in the process. After several times of failures to complete plans, many people become frustrated and go to another extreme that they seriously doubt their ability and believe they are doing an impossible job and give up their plans finally. To resolve this problem, psychologists put forward an easy solution which is to make plans more realistic. The best way is to separate plans as several clear steps and every step has definite and achievable goals. Besides, plans should be adjustable to adapt to the change of one’s ability. Since people can finish their plans at first, they will build up confidence gradually and they are more likely to continue for a long time. Once what they do according to plans become to built-in habits, their goals are achieved successfully.

Another advantage of practical plans is that they are more flexible and people can adjust their goals in the process of exercising their plans. One problem people face when they make plans is that they are not very clear about what they really want and what they really interest in. You can recognize the very fact simply by seeing how many people loathe their major after four years’ experience in college even they claimed how they loved it before they enter college. As a result, compared to an unrealistic challenging plan, a pragmatic changeable plan is more beneficial. （我觉得flexible举得那个例子不是特别合适，因为就算选了一个practical的专业，在四年里也没办法自由地变化吖？）

In sum, people should make practical plans about future because they can benefit more.

我觉得写得很好吖，就是后面那个例子举得不太好，但开头很不错，很有层层递进的严密范儿~

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The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries.

I agree that the best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers’ salaries.

First, increasing teachers’ salary can make sure teachers to focus on school education. One problem of school education（我觉得这个问题不是学校教育的问题，而是学校教育面临的问题） is that teachers’ pay is often under the average level of labors‘, and therefore they have to do some part-time jobs to support their families. The heavy burdens of family might distract teachers and force them to earn extra money. As a result, they cannot spend much time to prepare courses and to assist their students to solve problems. It might lead to severe results and stunt the development of children.

Additionally, more salary means teacher’s position is more competitive and more intelligent and qualified people can be attracted to devote themselves in educational fields. One reason that leads to the exacerbation of the quality of education is that smart arduous people tend to choose high-salary jobs instead of being teachers（whose pay is so low不然的话，being teachers作为一个动作跟high-salary jobs是没有关系的吖）. One example of America can illustrate this point. Around 1910s to 1920s, because of the prejudice to women, American female cannot find jobs other than teaching children and adolescents. This period is treated as the most successful time of elementary education.
With the rise of feminism, women have more options, and high-intelligent and qualified women are inclined to work in banks or companies. And since then, American elementary education gradually declined. If the salary increases, more qualified people might choose to be a teacher, which will ameliorate（学习了~） the quality of education.

Finally（这个理由和前面的理由是递进关系，用finally让我觉得前后是并列关系）, because of the competition which can be predicted, teachers will have to spend more time to enhance their teaching abilities and enrich their knowledge to keep their positions. Because of the incentive, namely money, more people will attend this field, and former teachers have to study hard to make sure that they will not lose jobs in the competition. More teachers might choose to attend training classes to enhance their teaching skills and read more books about education. They will attain experience from observing of others’ classes as well. （最后加一句话点明这会提高教育质量就更好了）

In sum, it will be beneficial to the whole education system if teachers’ salary increases.

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35# fyxloveu

非常感谢。看过修改之后，猛然发现语法不过关啊

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很流畅啊。。我是挑不出什么毛病啦，学习了不少。

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It is true that humans makemistakes, some of which will definitely barricade their way toward success.However, from my perspective, this obvious phenomenon cannot be extended to anabsolute assertion that people who refuse to accept criticism would not besuccessful.

The first reason actually （是不是应该加base 或depend之类的）on the same assumption I mentioned above that people make mistakes allthe time and thus people who criticize some others might be wrong and those whoare criticized might be right. Sometimes, the most difficult thing, in anorganization, is not to accept others’ view but to insist one’s own opinion, especially theopposite voice comes from some influential people. The risk is that the personwho refuse to respond to other’s criticism might be treated as arrogant or even be isolated by othercooperators. However, if his opinion turns out to be correct, he may berespected for his wisdom and since he prevent potential loss of his team, hehas a much better chance to get promoted. Thus compared to accepting other teamworker’s view undistinguishedly( indistinguishably), it is better to reconsider the whole point thoroughly and deeply again.

Another possibility is that, undercertain circumstances, people who put forward criticism hold obviouslymalevolence, either because they are on a competing position or just becausethey want to acquit responsibility after a failure. In this situation,acknowledging and accepting criticism might be not the cleverest thing to do,because if they do so, they might have to delay their pace toward success oreven lose their careers. Thus, instead of accepting criticism, a wiser way might be to fight back.

In sum, under most circumstances,accepting criticism might be a virtue and people should listen to criticismwhich while ameliorate their work. However, accepting criticismundiscriminatingly is kind of weakness and ineptitude. To attain success,people should know when should（should改为to，不太确定） refuse and fight back to criticismeither.
写的太好了，我改不了了。

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tpo8综合写作

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38# theflyfish
改好了

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cherrycarrieUID：2943359

不好意思，修改的晚了。