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题目：every generation of people is different in important ways.How is your generation different from your parents' generation?Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
开始：With the development of society,young generation are becoming more and more different form their parents' generation.I believe that three most different aspect are to spend a long time to accept a senior education,to face more competitive job pressure,to find a new living style.
Education is so focused by people today,for many,our generation used more than 20 years to accept a completely educational system.Going to college means attending career is later than the older generation.Therefor we have more knowledge than our parents.
        Comparing with older generation,young people could have not only enough knowledge as they need,but also widely experience,they know that job market is becoming competitive.Because of increasing population all over the world,our generation are expected to need a large workface in coming years.Every morning you could see people runing for their career.In this period, pressure has filled up people's life.
        Furthermore people is looking for a fresh experence of life as a new generation.With the development of transportation, world is becoming smaller.Most of young people could speak a second language.For foreign culture,we have views different from our parents.
        To sum up,high technology has changed our life in various ways,such as knowledge,experience,life custom.But whatever happened,as we can predict, new generation will enable better than every generation before it.

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