专业雅思老师作文批改实例

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Studying in astudy group is more effective than studying alone. To what extent do you agreeor disagree?


Studying in a study group is a greatway to make study become effective and easy. However, sometimes itdoes this not make study effective, but alsowastes time.


The first One benefit of studying in a study group ispeople would always have share their ideascome out with each other and can help to solvesproblems they may have because different people have different ideas. SecondlyAlso, people can help each other if they studyin a group. People are strong at different aspects(What does this mean?). For example, thestudents who do not well at face difficulties whenstudying physics can get helpsfrom students who always get high mark in physics understand it better. Peopleare pushed to talk when they study in a group. The corporation needs talking.(This doesn’t read at all well)
When learning with others, students will needto speak up and therefore this Since, the other important thing inlife, social skill would be improved during studying in a study groupthe study time.


However, it is wasting time to studying in group can also bringproblems, as it can waste time. An article from The New York Times indicated that 47% of high school students weretaking often talked about games, sports or somethingelse other things when they were supposed to be studying in a group. Therefore, whether or not studying in a group is effective ornot depends on the numbers in the group. If some members do not want tostudy in the group, studying in group it wouldbe much harder thanstudying alone.


To sum up, if all members in the a group want to study, studying in a group then it is a perfect way to make study effective. However,if the members in of the group do notwant to study, just and only involve themselves in want to “socialtalking”, thisway of studying in a group is not a good way.

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Many thanks for youressay.
This question is in three parts:studying alone, studying in a group, and whether or not you agree and you wouldbe expected to write about each part equally.
However, you have written very little about studying alone and alsoabout your own thoughts.
This would loseyou marks.
Your writing is veryrepetitive as you have consistently used the phrase studying in a study group and you need to be able to show theexaminer that you are able to use substitution.
You could have also used groupstudy; learning with others etc.
There are some areas that cause a little confusion and I am not quitesure what you are trying to say.
Errorsin cohesion also make your writing flow less smoothly than it should.



Task Response: 5

• partially addresses the question but uses an appropriate format
• presents a position that is directly related to the question,     but some conclusions are not clear
• puts forward some ideas but does not develop them well enough

Cohesion & Coherence: 6

• arranges information and ideas in a (fairly) coherent way
• uses cohesive devices to some good effect although there are     inaccuracies in cohesion between sentences
• makes errors in reference
• organizes paragraphs fairly well

Lexical Resource: 5

• uses a limited, but minimally adequate resource for the task
• uses some simple vocabulary with accuracy, but there is not     much expression in the writing
• frequently uses inappropriate wording and repetition is very     noticeable
• controls spelling well

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6

• uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms with limited     flexibility
• uses complex structures but with less accuracy than when using     simple structures
• makes errors in grammar but these do not have an effect on     communication
• manages punctuation fairly well

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