【NINE小组】第二次作业——橙子（我晚了，不好意思啊。。。）

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85. Some people believe that in order to
thrive,a society must put its own overall success before the well-being of itsindividual citizens. Others believe that the well-being ofa society can only be measured by the general welfare of all its people.

Write a response in which you discuss whichview more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning forthe position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you shouldaddress both of the views presented.


The issue what makes a society thriving hascaused wide public concern for a long time. Headed by John Rawls, one of the greatestphilosophers in 20th century, and John Dewey, an American philosopher,psychologist and educational reformer, the social welfare advocates firmlybelieve that the well-being of people is the only value; while the others holdthe view that the overall success of a society owns a higher status. For my part,I agree with the latter opinion with my reservation.

In the view of the former, serving as a regulatorof social conflicts, people’s general welfare ensures the social harmony, whichis of the essence to the well-being of the nation. That is to say, universal associal welfare is, it is in the service of the entire citizens. By drawing upor revising the treaty of welfare, the government tackles the problems emergingamong different classes of people, to make the society more equal and peaceful.Further, in due course, the nation increases its people’s living quality, throughraising the standard of welfare. For example, medical insurance, the primarywelfare, guarantees that staff members can get certain financial compensationfor the treatment and daily expenditure, when they are sick and unable to work,thus, the public will not feel like being at the end of their rope, but bethankful to the society. In this way, the higher the general welfare is, thehappier the society will be.

However, the favorer of the former fails torealize that a society’s overall success, say comprehensive national power isthe determinant factor of social prosperity. The power of national defense,included in the criterion of national power, ensures the security of society.Only when your country is powerful enough to defend from aggression in allaspect, can the society own an equal time to develop. Take The Great SocialistPeople’s Libyan Arab Jamahiriya as an example. Although the country has tolerablepublic welfare, it is not figured as a powerful country. As a consequence,turmoil and clash destroy the safety of the society, not mention to thewell-being of it.

What is more, even assuming a society isaway from war, if it is weak in technological power, one of the national powers,it can hardly thrive as technology determines the living level. It is widelyaccepted that the competition in 21st century is competing intechnology. For instance, in the field of medical treatment, advancement intechnology means increase in medical service, which may heal more people. Inthe field of digital products, great technological power provides people withmore convenience. And in the field of building projects, high technology protectsresidents from disasters, like earth quake. All of these are the factors of socialwell-being.

Admittedly,we can never put too much emphasizes on the social whole success. Former SovietUnion, which stressed the national power too much, ignoring people’snecessities of life, headed for die out finally. To sum up, overall success is thekey to thrive, but we can never put it to acme.

写这篇好纠结啊。。。没感觉。。。

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之前我给别人改文章的时候，往往都能改出很多东西。可是，额，实在抱歉，以我的水平，这篇文章我改不出什么东西。
我觉得这篇文章的逻辑还是很严谨的，作者的态度很鲜明，并且论证也充分说明了这一点。而且你对词汇的掌握真的很好，用的很灵活~
可真正出彩的地方是，文章里引用的例子的确很恰当，可以很好的支持文章的观点。看来你有很好的积累。希望有机会能跟你交流学习一下~
在我看来，如果说有问题的话，那也只是一些拼写错误之类的小毛病，完全可以忽略的~还有就是倒数第二段有个小总结就更好了~

会飞的橙子UID: 3012240

The issue what makes a society thriving hascaused wide public concern for a long time. Headed by John Rawls, one of the greatestphilosophers in 20th century, and John Dewey, an American philosopher,psychologist and educational reformer, the social welfare advocates firmlybelieve that the well-being of people is the only value; while the others holdthe view that the overall success of a society owns a higher status. For my part,I agree with the latter opinion with my reservation.


In the view of the former, serving as aregulator of social conflicts, people’s general welfare ensures the socialharmony, which is of the essence to the well-being of the nation. That is tosay, universal as social welfare is, it is in the service of the entirecitizens. By drawing up or revising the treaty of welfare, the governmenttackles the problems emerging among different classes of people, to make thesociety more equal and peaceful. Further, in due course, the nation increasesits people’s living quality, through raising the standard of welfare. Forexample, medical insurance, the primary welfare, guarantees that staff memberscan get certain financial compensation for the treatment and daily expenditure,when they are sick and unable to work, thus, the public will not feel likebeing at the end of their rope, but be thankful to the society. In this way,the higher the general welfare is, the happier the society will be.


However, the favorers of the former fail torealize that a society’s overall success, say comprehensive national power isthe primary and determinant factor of social prosperity. The power of nationaldefense, included in the criterion of national power, ensures the security ofsociety. Only when your country is powerful enough to defend from aggression inall aspect, can the society own an equal time to develop. Take The GreatSocialist People’s Libyan Arab Jamahiriya as an example. Although the countryhas tolerable public welfare, it is not figured as a powerful country. As aconsequence, turmoil and clash destroy the safety of the society, not mentionto the well-being of it.


What is more, even assuming a society isaway from war, if it is weak in technological power, one of the nationalpowers, it can hardly thrive as technology determines the living level. It iswidely accepted that the competition in 21st century is competing intechnology. For instance, in the field of medical treatment, advancement intechnology means increase in medical service, which may heal more people. Inthe field of digital products, great technological power provides people withmore convenience. And in the field of building projects, high technologyprotects residents from disasters, like earth quake. All of these are thefactors of social well-being.



In addition, we can never put too muchemphasizes on the social whole success, ignoring welfare completely. FormerSoviet Union, which stressed the national power too much, ignoring people’snecessities of life, headed for die out finally. In short, regarding the overallsuccess as the foundation of prosperity with welfare being accord with thelevel of social development is the better choice.




没有改太多，昨天ymxjtu姐姐提的建议很好，结尾处比较欠。。最近在看大神们的帖子，觉得这样的类似八股文的写法好像还是没有什么太大的前途。。纠结中整个文章的逻辑更重要点，就是各段之间的起承转合，感觉还是很欠啊。。。。