:【NINE小组】【作业集】---by 夜猫 (更新到第15次作业 I)

m7catsueUID: 3040890

谢谢BEN老师指导~
我也想举例子，举不出来呀。。。所以才干巴巴的说。。
例子积累不足，而且有些平时不怎么接触的领域更少。。
要背例子了！！。。

panmingming2008UID: 2535351

谢谢BEN老师指导~
我也想举例子，举不出来呀。。。所以才干巴巴的说。。
例子积累不足，而且有些平时不怎么接触的领域更少。。
要背例子了！！。。
m7catsue 发表于 2011-9-17 14:02

不要“背”，
要做research，
当你搜索几个例子，并且评估（判断）哪个更切合自己的论点（想要表达的思想）后，
这个例子就记住了。（先评估-理解，有助于记忆）

不要逐字记例子的词句，记住大概内容即可-- 你可以用自己的词句来表达。
（结合论点来适当改写，使例子能恰当地把论点解释清楚）

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举例：比如前两天的保护濒危物种issue，大家可用英文（ENGLISH!!!）关键词“endangered species”（其他相关词也可以的），就搜出(google)相关内容，然后从中选择几个reliable sites(比如世界野生动物保护组织网站)，了解一下保护现状及存在问题--然后决定论点，及选择合适的例子。

【没有人什么都懂，有些陌生的议题要花点时间做re-search,做一次都会长见识。】

m7catsueUID: 3040890

当时想了半天，居然没有想到google一下。。太弱了。。
谢谢老师，嗯，搜集材料然后用自己的话表达。

panmingming2008UID: 2535351

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m7catsueUID: 3040890

78 People'sattitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings thanby society as a whole.

Compared with the claim, I am inclinedto support the idea that it is true sometimes we hold opinions that are oftenfierce in response to immediate situations, but eventually and substantively our attitudes are most influenced bythe society as a whole in the long run.

There is no doubtthat our attitudes are often determined by immediate situations, but this kindof attitudes is relatively transitory though rather fierce perhaps at first. Whenconfronted with a sudden event which may be contrary to our interests orvalues, we often tend to form attitudes in response like a conditioned reflex. Forinstance, when the tainted milk scandal broke out in 2008, most Chinese peoplewith extreme anger claimed that they would never buy Chinese powdered milkagain. This attitude is fierce enough but relatively transitory. After a seriesof strict measures taken by the government, people rebuilt their faith in thepowdered milk made in China, though not completely. So, sometimes we indeedform our attitudes based on immediate situations, but their influence does notlast long.

However,essentially people’s attitudes are shaped by the value system they hold whichis eventually influenced by culture, economic conditions and accepted values ofthe society. Maybe radical or fierce when first faced with some suddensituations, people’s attitudes toward a certain object tend to the values acceptedby the society in the long run. After all we are social animals, we act in certainway expecting approval of other people and the society. For instance,influenced by rock music or maybe the punk culture, some adolescentsoften hold radical opinions on politics or other public issues. But with theprocess of aging, their views become more conservative or more similar to theopinions that are accepted by the society. It is true that stimulators orimmediate situations play an important role in the formation of our attitudes,but eventually our attitudes are more likely to be shaped by the values of thesociety which we accept in the long run.

To sum up, when confronted with animmediate situation without preparation physically or psychologically, peoplemay form their attitudes immediately based on what they saw or what they heard,but eventually and substantively people’s attitudes are more influenced by thesociety as a whole. When we calm down to consider a certain object, ourattitudes are largely shaped by the values we hold which is being influenced bythe society all the time.


悲催地写了两个小时，举不出来例子。。

amber_cUID: 3131341

Compared with the claim, I am inclined to support the idea that it is true sometimes we hold opinions that are often fierce in response to immediate situations, but eventually and substantively our attitudes are most influenced by the society as a whole in the long run.
从immediate & in the long run 讨论，社会更决定attitudes.
There is no doubt that our attitudes are often determined by immediate situations, but this kind of attitudes is relatively transitory though rather fierce perhaps at first. When confronted with a sudden event which may be contrary to our interests or values, we often tend to form attitudes in response like a conditioned reflex. For instance, when the tainted milk scandal broke out in 2008, most Chinese people with extreme anger claimed that they would never buy Chinese powdered milk again. This attitude is fierce enough but relatively transitory. After a series of strict measures taken by the government, people rebuilt their faith in the powdered milk made in China, though not completely. So, sometimes we indeed form our attitudes based on immediate situations, but their influence does not last long.
承认immediate situation的作用，但强调是暂时的。
However, essentially people’s attitudes are shaped by the value system they hold which is eventually influenced by culture, economic conditions and accepted values of the society. Maybe radical or fierce when first faced with some sudden situations, people’s attitudes toward a certain object tend to the values accepted by the society in the long run. After all we are social animals, we act in certain way expecting approval of other people and the society. For instance, influenced by rock music or maybe the punk culture, some adolescents often hold radical opinions on politics or other public issues. But with the process of aging, their views become more conservative or more similar to the opinions that are accepted by the society. It is true that stimulators or immediate situations play an important role in the formation of our attitudes, but eventually our attitudes are more likely to be shaped by the values of the society which we accept in the long run.
例子不知道算不算恰当。不过个人理解，本段应该是要说明某些态度长期来说是由社会决定的。不过貌似没说是哪些态度。本文是想从短期和长期来论证immediate situations 和 整体社会对attitudes的影响，但这一段貌似说得不太清楚。
To sum up, when confronted with an immediate situation without preparation physically or psychologically, people may form their attitudes immediately based on what they saw or what they heard, but eventually and substantively people’s attitudes are more influenced by the society as a whole. When we calm down to consider a certain object, our attitudes are largely shaped by the values we hold which is being influenced by the society all the time.
本文的观点很明确。
论证说理上有点欠缺。总感觉有点言犹未尽。

panmingming2008UID: 2535351

36# amber_c
夜猫同学分论点的topic sentence(s)写得越来越好啦。各个分论点形成对中心论点的阐释与支持，层次蛮清楚。

amber同学用下划线标注TS（主题句），然后再提出批改建议，看着很清晰。

认真写作与用心批改的同学，你们有福了。你们在进步！

--BEN