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玲珑女UID: 142984

131"The arts (painting, music, literature, etc.) reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."(社会类)

Artists, producers of art, generally have some eccentric perspectives beyond the ideas of normal people. For those eccentric ideas, they mostly will be regarded as the vanguard in society whose perspective may be the delegate of radical thinking. From their arts, which may be regard as the symbol of emotions and thinking, some problems and scarcity in development of society will be represented. Moreover, those arts can reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of society.

First of all, the arts include painting, music and literature represent the new pulse of a society which express the thinking and emotion of that society and embody those people's desire and fondness. For instance, Da Vinci, the famous artist in Renaissance, produced many arts to express the thinking in that epoch. Monalisa, one famous artwork of his, much more express the idea that the focus is the human not other things. From the artwork, there are none words but a painting that the looker can understand the main emotion what the author will express to. In other words, the art establish one bridge for communicating between the author and the looker although it has none words or sentences.

Furthermore, some critical opinions which may be hardly accepted to express overtly can be expressed through some arts, such as literature. As we know, Mark Twain, a well-known writer in American who was looked as the representation of American critical realism wrote many critical literatures to insinuate the social problems in that age. Through the literature, one kind of art, many ideas which can hardly express in public will be understood by reader. So, people will be able to realize more social problems which may hardly be known by the formal education. In this way, the literature will be the method which it can help people to reveal more hidden problems and ideas of a society.     

Admittedly, those arts expressing many people's thinking and criticizing the problems of community can reveal many otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of society. The arts, however, which represent many radical ideas are not the only method to reveal the pulse of society. Science, the other method to help us to reveal the pulse of society, also will give us more information about the hidden ideas and impulse of society. With the more invention of science, more and more technology can be applied to promote the living level of people's and impulse the development of society. The science is also an indispensable method which can reveal many otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of society.

In conclusion, the point of view about the arts' infection in revealing the hidden ideas and impulses of society is convincing although there are many approach to find those hidden ideas and impulses. The arts, such as painting, music and literature, which are realized impersonally may give more benefit to the development of society.

blake_wangUID: 9871

1, a good command of the language.
2, paragraph 1's is logcially unconvincing. pardon my omitted reasons.
3, you have a good comprehension of the topic in terms of "the hidden ideas" and "impulses" of a society.
4,

玲珑女UID: 142984

呵呵，谢谢blake的意见，不过我现在还处于练习阶段，9。25考试，上面这篇文章是在别人的中文提纲＋金山糍粑＋1。5小时完成的，感觉自己想的时候很难能够想的那么全面，且有些单词如果不查一查怕用的不准，唉，痛苦，各位不知是否也有经历这个阶段，给小妹一点意见和指导，感谢先！

木耳UID: 123036

1 前十五天到二十天时间，精写十五到三十篇文章，能写多好就写多好，时间在所不惜，工具想用什么就用什么，例子越贴切充分越好，能改十遍就不该八遍。同时把所有的提纲看一遍，列出提纲。这一阶段是打基础的时期，重点训练思路文笔，论证的方法和力度。这一段会很辛苦，但一定会受益匪浅。

2 后面的时间，每天都重点把前面写过的一篇或几篇有代表性的文章温习一遍，你会发现里面的例子观点词语足资会反复用到。然后就是模考练速度，每天一到两次。这时候开始看argument,看一些范文，写个六到十篇就够了。打字不行还得练打字。同时上网看一些讨论，再次修改自己的文章，直到考试。

以上纯属个人观点，具体操作还有更具个人情况。

imongUID: 140258

看得出来的确是个性化建议，因为和我的practice相去甚远的。

blake_wangUID: 9871

to 玲珑女:给你来段中文评论
1，选词丰富，句式符合英文习惯，语言通顺，虽然略有缺点。
2，逻辑不足，论证无力，有待强化英文推理方式。
其实大家都一样，这篇文章水平已经可以了。

玲珑女UID: 142984

to 木耳：非常感谢你的建议，你的方法不错噢，可以考虑考虑：）
to blake：你的评论很好，我会继续努力的，希望小妹后面的文章能继续得到各位的帮助！

这里真是一个融洽的集体，初来咋到就感到一股温暖的气氛，呵呵，谢谢各位^_^

blake_wangUID: 9871

啊！快要考试乐，不敢肯定有时间帮你评改，还是先原谅我哦：）

selfayUID: 136846

最初由 木耳 发布
[B]1 前十五天到二十天时间，精写十五到三十篇文章，能写多好就写多好，时间在所不惜，工具想用什么就用什么，例子越贴切充分越好，能改十遍就不该八遍。同时把所有的提纲看一..

以下省略...... [/B]

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