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发表于 2012-2-13 19:49:15 |只看该作者
2.13独立加综合

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发表于 2012-2-14 00:25:04 |只看该作者
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发表于 2012-2-14 16:54:01 |只看该作者
2.13 独立修改~~

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发表于 2012-2-14 18:12:32 |只看该作者
When confronted with difficult problems in schoolwork, many students tend to ask their classmates because it's convenient and help them exempt potential embarrassment(instead of turning to the tutor). But what if the solution given by other students is wrong? What if you want to get the answer as well as expanding your relative knowledge? What if you are not accustomed to the tutor’s teaching method?(这里不适应教学方式导致的困难可以再表达更清楚些) These problems, which may even influence your future study, can only be solved by a professional tutor(with the help of a professional tutor). So, I recommend that students who have met with problems should seek the professional tutor for help.

First, students at the same study stage always possess similar knowledge background and comprehension ability, resulting in their almost equal capability in solving problems. So, one student's question is also not easy for another. Even if an answer is given, with no valid guarantee(valid和guarantee会不会重复了?) of correctness, one would still be easily misled(LZ可将为什么会被误导描述地清晰些). However, a professional tutor, owning a fairly complete cover of relative knowledge, is able to give the best answer. He could also point out the prevalent misunderstanding of the problem, which will surely contribute to the students' better comprehension of it.

Furthermore, the solution to the problem is not the only thing you obtain through insulting a professional tutor. By further discussing, you will be amazed to find an expansion in your knowledge. Once I had a question with my biology class in that "why we should protect pandas". After talking with the professional tutor, besides the answer, I also gained a basic knowledge about pandas' habitats and their mating and reproducing process(个人感觉将besides the amswer放在这里会合适些). Through these, I learnt the decrease in their habitats and low productivity rate make them endangered, and(两个and连在一个,可将前一个换一个表述) we should take action to protect them at once. This additional knowledge is sometimes hard to acquire from classmates.

Apart from these, finding a professional tutor for help with schoolwork has another advantage in helping the tutor improve his teaching ability. Students' positive feedback motivates the tutor to better modify his teaching method, which in turn, benefits students.

In a word, interaction between teachers and students is indispensible in the teaching process. (Meanwhile,)Students will also benefit a lot from the discussion with their tutor. Therefore, when faced with a difficulty(difficulty是n.) problem in schoolwork, I think a professional tutor should be the first consideration.
LZ文章写得好顺畅~多谢LZ给我的建议~

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发表于 2012-2-14 19:01:13 |只看该作者
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发表于 2012-2-15 09:20:19 |只看该作者
谢谢修改~~~
1.as well as 我之前一直以为as介词后面加动词的时候就应该加doing,今天查了一下,才发现有不同的用法呢~~
     a) as well as 通常被视为介词,所以后接动词时,一般用动名词形式。
         e.g. She is a talented musician as well as being a photographer.
      b) 如果主句谓语为复合时态(即其中含有情态动词或助动词),则as well as 后的动词通常要与情态动词或助动词后的动词形式保持一致。
         e.g.Students should pursue their own interests, as well as do their school work.
      c) 如果as well as 是连接两个不定式,则其后用不带to的不定式。
         e.g.A museum should aim to entertain as well as educate.
      d) as well as 用于句首时,其后习惯上要接动名词。
         e.g.As well as walking, he likes fishing and shooting.
2.one the topic 和about the topic我大概查了一下,好像on the topic后面可以直接加topic的内容,而about the topic相关例句中我没有找到直接加topic内容的。不知道准不准确。。。
谢谢指出这些问题~~~


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发表于 2012-2-15 11:59:01 |只看该作者
不好意思,昨天怠工了一天,今天才帮你改好,实在抱歉哈!

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发表于 2012-2-15 20:12:44 |只看该作者
已改~

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发表于 2012-2-16 13:51:27 |只看该作者
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发表于 2012-2-16 20:19:49 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 美蓝 于 2012-2-16 20:23 编辑

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发表于 2012-2-17 17:04:11 |只看该作者
说是改,还不如说是向LZ学习。先占座,不知道怎么传附件,囧。。。

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发表于 2012-2-17 19:29:44 |只看该作者
这个。。。要不你直接把改好的给我贴上来好了。。。呵呵 26# yangwanggauss

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发表于 2012-2-17 21:37:43 |只看该作者
已经改好了哦~

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发表于 2012-2-27 19:19:13 |只看该作者
间隔了好多天后写的作文啊。。。好粗糙的说。。。我都不好意思了。。。。

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