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发表于 2012-3-3 23:47:11 |显示全部楼层

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发表于 2012-3-4 12:53:23 |显示全部楼层

已改~ 3.3 美蓝机经独立

3月3日
110422 which kinds of university do you prefer universities whose graduates can find good jobs or universities where there are famous professors?

The extremely low employment for graduates at the career fairs in recent years leads to students' preference for universities that provide graduates good jobs rather than those with famous professors. An online survey, conducted by China's largest website Sina.com, shows that among the 5000 students facing the choice, 80 percents of them would choose the former one. However, after a serious pondering, I hold that when choosing a university, one with famous professors should always be our first consideration. The reasons are as follows.

First, the time spent in university is the very period when students complete their self-recognition and build up their value system. [url=]These developments can only been achieved with the help of good professors.[/url][f1] Before university, I had no clear idea on money since all my focus then was on study and my parents would arrange everything for me. On the first class in university, one of my favorite professors said that money was important, however, it served as, and only as a tool for us to pursue a meaningful life; that those who saw money as everything would finally[url=] lose [/url][f2] their directions. This dramatically impressed me and from then on I realized there were so many valuable things to seek for other than money.

Furthermore, compared with people who merely aimed at finding a good job after graduating, those who choose a university for its famous professors always have better promotions in their career. Though the former kind of universities can equip the students with practical skills needed in the future, giving them the preponderance over others at the career fairs. However, their jobs have been narrowed down and limited by such skills and many of them find it next to impossible to change to another area they are interested in. On the contrary, the students, cultivated by the famous professors and free from such constraints, have a wide range of choices and are able to find their favorite work. Therefore they will fully devote to their jobs and embark on the load to a dramatically successful career.

Moreover, [url=]sometimes a famous professor can do a lot of help on students' careers.[/url][f3] One of my best friends is appreciated by one of her professors, who owns a great prestige in his research area and also has cooperative relations with many famous companies. After my friend graduated, the professor directly recommended her to one of the companies and she is quite satisfied with her job.

In a word, a university is, after all, different from the vocational schools. When choosing a university, the famous professors are much more important than other factors, and should be put in the first place of consideration.

总体上我觉得思路、逻辑都很清晰，比我好多了，= =。
不过问题就是语言上偏口语化了一点哦。

[f1]这个似乎说得太绝对了。。。

[f2] 时态不一致~ 跟前面的saw

[f3]
改成：a student can benefit a lot from an famous professor in term of the pursuit of career. 比较没那么口语化

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