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发表于 2012-2-17 17:40:33 |显示全部楼层
Questions:

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
perhaps no issue in this world as significant to university in education finance.Despite various reponses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at.I,given the chance,perfer to endorse that  sports and social activities should have as important as classes and library in equal financement supports.

not only does colleges come from the experience of the equal financement supports in american,but also evidence of emerging the education development subsequently prove this issue.likewise,American's equal education now have been named their most important developing two years in row.according to the report ,as 11.9 percent of the thai, 9.8 percent of the chinese, and an overwhelming 27.0 percent of japenese expressed their preference for american's equal education,toppling cities like britan, canada,and austrilia in the survey.

Part of the joy of learning is the fun of discovery felt when faceing a completely new class.learning with fun compounds that feel of wonder and fast.for example,one person who have talent on basketball areas.since the second year of his high school, he has been focus on training basketball with school financement support.therefore,he become the NBA all stars.he called kobe.had he not focus on basketball without school financement support,we would not have seen it,and missed part of the basketball star.

Finally,if there is anyone out there who still doubts that university should supports in class and library is a essential where all things are possible,who still wonder if the dream of our colleges should support in sports and social activities is fundamental in out time, who still question the power of our college should have in sports and social activities as important as in classes and library with equal finance support.

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发表于 2012-2-17 17:41:24 |显示全部楼层
望大家指导···小弟谢过

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发表于 2012-2-17 18:22:09 |显示全部楼层
望批评指导····十分感谢

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发表于 2012-2-18 16:32:28 |显示全部楼层
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发表于 2012-2-19 21:35:05 |显示全部楼层
perhaps no issue in this world as significant to university in education finance.Despite various reponses people may have on the topic concerning the issue regarding which thing should the education aim at.(这个句子太啰嗦和有问题) I,given the chance,perfer to endorse that  sports and social activities should have as important as classes and library in equal financement(financial) supports.

not only does colleges come from the experience of the equal financement supports in american,but also evidence of emerging the education development subsequently prove this issue.likewise,American's equal education now have been named their most important developing two years in row.according to the report ,as 11.9 percent of the thai, 9.8 percent of the chinese, and an overwhelming 27.0 percent of japenese expressed their preference for american's equal education,toppling cities like britan, canada,and austrilia in the survey.

Part of the joy of learning is the fun of discovery felt when faceing a completely new class.learning with fun compounds that feel of wonder and fast.for example,one person who have talent on basketball areas. since the second year of his high school, he has been focus on training basketball with school financement support.therefore,he become the NBA all stars.he called kobe.had he not focus on basketball without school financement support,we would not have seen it,and missed part of the basketball star.

Finally,if there is anyone out there who still doubts that university should supports in class and library is a essential where all things are possible,who still wonder if the dream of our colleges should support in sports and social activities is fundamental in out time, who still question the power of our college should have in sports and social activities as important as in classes and library with equal finance support.(这段看不明,觉得很多语法错误)

文章总体一般,很多语法错误和论述与主题结合不够,纯属个人意见

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