issue136 选择机会的多少？请大家斧正！

feier521UID: 109747

136. "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

Admittedly being limited by the resources and natural rules, the chance of choice is also limited in a small cycle. However, with the improvement of people's abilities and the development of technology and politics, the chance to choose can be accordingly increased to some extent. Therefore, I fundamentally agree with the speaker on the assertion that the absence of choice is a circumstance is very rare.

As social animals, people are unable to do anything arbitrarily outstepping the limit of their physical abilities, the laws of nature and social rules and regulations. For instance, no matter how high people can jump, they can not fly freely like a bird for the reason that any species, mankind included, can not escaped the rules of gravity; And no matter how fast people run, they can not surmount the speed of the light due to people's physical limitation. People's life process is also lacking the choice. We can not choose our parents. Children have to select the schools based on the previous performance in the junior schools. Within the restriction of social laws and regulations, it is illegal for a man to marry with two or more women. Even when we choose our career, our professional knowledge and skills and the potential roles that the society provides restrict our choices. All these examples demonstrate that human can not make a random choice outstripping the limitation of the natural disciplines and the established laws and rules of our society.

However, it does not follow that people are deprived of all chances to make a choice and therefore turn out to be pessimistic and even cynical. On the one hand, although both the physical and natural limitations hinder people making arbitrary choices, people can augment their chances of choice by self-improvement. For example, through rigid and scientific trains and exercise, athletes can hugely improve their potentials and break the previous records they made. Those job-hunters can enrich their faculties by digesting and assimilating an amount of special knowledge to make themselves qualified to as many fields as possible which provide them more working choice. Therefore, people themselves can to some extent increase the chances of choice by their own efforts.  

On the other hand, with the development of economy and politics, the scale and the chance that people can make a choice are expanded accordingly. Nowadays people can safely live in almost any circumstance, no matter how hot or cold, by equipping with the air-conditioners in their homes which was only unrealized dream for our ancestors. And the advanced traffic vehicles make people travel almost every corner all over the world while those in the ancient periods can seldom walk out of their nation. As for political field, more and more people can take part in policy-making nowadays, while it is impossible for our forefathers who were deprived of almost all political rights in the autocratic nations. From these changes, we can safely draw a conclusion that the range for choosing are coordinately inclining with the development of the economy and democracy.

In conclusion, although people can only make choices within the limitation of their own abilities and the laws of the nature, they can change it by self-improvement or personal efforts, and meanwhile the advanced technology and the opening democracy can also grant them various chances of choice.

果酱面包UID: 142490

我怎么觉得题目的意思是我们的不选择的时候很少很少，就是说我们时时刻刻都在做出选择？

angle123UID: 105697

太棒了，读不知道从哪儿改起， 我有个小问题：观点是不是太绝对了， 因为第一段接下来就有一个让步， 我觉得语气最好弱一点，你觉得呢

blake_wangUID: 9871

good.
two questions:
1,traffic vehicles ?
2,walk out of their nation ?

feier521UID: 109747

真的是过奖了，惭愧 :)
是啊，我有这毛病，一让步就让大了，使后面的反驳也苍白无力了。

feier521UID: 109747

to blake_wang ：）thanks
我改
直接用vehicles or transportation tools
walk outside their nations
如何？

blake_wangUID: 9871

to feier521,不好意思啊，
我的意思是，nation确实又国家的意思，但是作为地理概念上的国家是不是应该用country比较好啊？walk out of their country 应该比较好吧！我的英文用法很破poor,你查证一下吧。

xbdebbUID: 142129

Admittedly being limited by the resources and natural rules, the chance of choice is also limited in a small cycle. However, with the improvement of people's abilities and the development of technology and politics, the chance to choose can be accordingly increased to some extent. Therefore, I fundamentally agree with the speaker on the assertion that the absence of choice is a circumstance is very rare.

As social animals, people are unable to do anything arbitrarily outstepping the limit of their physical abilities, the laws of nature and social rules and regulations. For instance, no matter how high people can jump, they can not fly freely like a bird for the reason that any species, mankind included, can not escaped the rules of gravity; And no matter how fast people run, they can not surmount the speed of the light due to people's physical limitation. People's life process is also lacking the choice. We can not choose our parents. Children have to select the schools based on the previous performance in the junior schools. Within the restriction of social laws and regulations, it is illegal for a man to marry with two or more women. Even when we choose our career, our professional knowledge and skills and the potential roles that the society provides restrict our choices. All these examples demonstrate that human can not make a random choice outstripping the limitation of the natural disciplines and the established laws and rules of our society.?(当你写完这段时，　也许你已经忘了你真正的论点，　也许时间还有１５分钟，　我很反对，admittedly的做法尤其你这种那么长的)

However, it这一句来个although如何， does not follow that people are deprived of all chances to make a choice and therefore turn out to be pessimistic and even cynical. On the one hand, although both the physical and natural limitations hinder people making arbitrary choices, people can augment their chances of choice by self-improvement. For example, through rigid and scientific trains and exercise, athletes can hugely improve their potentials and break the previous records they made. Those job-hunters can enrich their faculties by digesting and assimilating an amount of special knowledge to make themselves qualified（别扭适合fields） to as many fields as possible which provide them more working choice. Therefore, people themselves can to some extent increase the chances of choice by their own efforts. （这点本可以论证的更深刻写的，可是．．）

On the other hand, with the development of economy and politics, the scale and the chance that people can make a choice are expanded accordingly. Nowadays people can safely live in almost any circumstance, no matter how hot or cold, by equipping with the air-conditioners in their homes which was only（an） unrealized dream for our ancestors. And the advanced traffic vehicles make people travel almost every corner all over the world while those in the ancient periods can seldom walk out of their nation. As for political field, more and more people can take part in policy-making nowadays, while it is impossible for our forefathers who were deprived of almost all political rights in the autocratic nations. From these changes, we can safely draw a conclusion that the range for choosing are coordinately inclining with the development of the economy and democracy.（象在堆砌事实，缺少论证）

In conclusion, although people can only make choices within the limitation of their own abilities and the laws of the nature, they can change it by self-improvement or personal efforts, and meanwhile the advanced technology and the opening democracy can also grant them various chances of choice.

ken0405UID: 124994

加油！！！！！！！

glidingshUID: 110700

给feier521 DD  加油哦
还有ken0405近来好吗?

feier521UID: 109747

谢谢 xbdebb 的批改（cute angel）

可是第二段写的应该也算是我的观点之一吧，我怎么觉的它和后两段不是绝对冲突的？

谢谢ken 的鼓励，好久不见了，甚是想念啊。

happyman，imong， paisley 及各位网友们.....看看是不是象我第二段那样（让步一整段）写法不好啊？我都习惯这种结构了，怎么办？......

feier521UID: 109747

谢谢 glidingsh

怎么谁都赚我便宜啊？
你怎么知道我一定比你小啊，快叫GG吧。：）

glidingshUID: 110700

我就是觉得你是小男生,呵呵,
拍拍你的头(大姐姐我弯下腰来)说,好好干, 有前途的

GcanadaUID: 118286

第二段我也感觉你让步让的太重了,
后面好象显的没什么力气,
不过你的逻辑还是很不错的,
AW就是分析,逻辑嘛,体现出来就可以了,
不过我自己写的也很烂,
随便写的,见笑了!

imongUID: 140258

不知道
我正在试验相反的写法
就是把写得最多的放在最前
这么写肯定有好有坏，如果已经非常成熟那倒还是不要改了