issue136 选择机会的多少？请大家斧正！

果酱面包UID: 142490

hehe 我觉得这么写挺好的，多严谨！！不过不知道老美觉得怎么样，刚才我请教半天这个体的意思，发现我又理解错了，真郁闷，这种状态怎么考试！！！

dreamflyerUID: 21967

136. "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

Admittedly being limited by the resources and natural rules, the chance of choice is also limited in a small cycle. However, with the improvement of people's abilities and the development of technology and politics, the chance to choose can be accordingly increased to some extent. Therefore, I fundamentally agree with the speaker on the assertion that the absence of choice is a circumstance is very rare.

As social animals, people are unable to do anything arbitrarily outstepping（out stepping） the limit（s） of their physical abilities, the laws of nature and social rules and regulations. For instance, no matter how high people can jump, they can not fly freely like a bird for the reason that any species, mankind included, can not  escape the rules of gravity; And no matter how fast people run, they can not surmount the speed of the light due to people's physical limitation. People's life process is also lacking the choice. (For example,)We can not choose our parents. Children have to select the schools based on the previous performance in the junior schools. Within the restriction of social laws and regulations, it is illegal for a man to marry with two or more women. Even when we choose our career, our professional knowledge and skills and the potential roles that the society provides restrict our choices. All these examples demonstrate that human can not make a random choice outstripping the limitation of the natural disciplines and the established laws and rules of our society.

However, it does not follow that people are deprived of all chances to make a choice and therefore turn out to be pessimistic and even cynical. On the one hand, although both the physical and natural limitations hinder people making arbitrary choices, people can augment their chances of choice by self-improvement. For example, through rigid and scientific trains and exercise, athletes can hugely improve their potentials and break the previous records they(men) made. Those job-hunters can enrich their faculties by digesting and assimilating an amount of special knowledge to make themselves(them) qualified to as many fields as possible which provide them more working choice(s). Therefore, people themselves can to some extent increase the chances of choice by their own efforts.

On the other hand, with the development of economy and politics, the scale and the chance that people can make a choice are expanded accordingly. Nowadays people can safely live in almost any circumstance, no matter how hot or cold, by equipping with the air-conditioners in their homes which was only unrealized dream for our ancestors. And the advanced traffic vehicles make people travel almost every corner all over the world while those in the ancient periods can seldom walk out of their nation. As for political field, more and more people can take part in policy-making nowadays, while it is impossible for our forefathers who were deprived of almost all political rights in the autocratic nations. From these changes, we can safely draw a conclusion that the range for choosing are coordinately inclining with the development of the economy and democracy.

In conclusion, although people can only make choices within the limitation of their own abilities and the laws of the nature, they can change it by self-improvement or personal efforts, and meanwhile the advanced technology and the opening democracy can also grant them various chances of choice.

真不错：P 怪不得这么多人愿意给你改作文了：）
语言问题不多，逻辑也比较严谨。不过我觉得结尾太一般了，虽然很多文章，包括老美的例文也是这样的结尾，但觉得跟整篇的风格有点不协调，有点草草收场的味道。反正俺是没想出更好的点子，盼着楼长给咱个惊喜了：）

feier521UID: 109747

谢谢dreamflyer 这么晚了，还帮我改，感动ing
惊喜？？我的结尾都是重复前文的，很难有出采的结尾的，唉
努力....

木耳UID: 123036

该把主要内容方前面吧？而且既然是同意，第一段是不是太长了？
长度上都有些像balance了。
我有另外一种看法：
136. "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
题目是说没有选择的情况是很少的，如果是我，我就会把重点放在对这种现象的解释上，分析为什么会有很多选择。而你的文章觉得是在说随着自我和社会的进步，科技的发展，选择会越来越多。
1 augment their chances of choice by self-improvement
2 the scale and the chance that people can make a choice are expanded accordingly.
这是你的两个分论点。
对应你的文章，题目似乎该是这样： Nowadays，there are more choices than ever before.
而且我觉得该更深入的讨论一下另一种情况：看似没有选择的时候其实选择很多。我列过这个题的提纲，但没写过：
同意。
1 现象一及解释：事实告诉我们，每天每个人都在做着各种选择。因为人会思考有自主性，会根据不同的情况作出适合自己的选择。
2 现象二及解释：有些看似没有选择的情况。因为a 当事人没有发现隐藏的选择b 或不愿放弃某些即得的利益去冒更大的风险而取得更大的成功。
3 转折：我们的选择不能逾越法律，不能违背自然规律。

还有，我有一篇和一一样的文章，就是现实糟糕又不愿回到过去那个根在你帖子后面，还烦F兄看一下，先谢过！