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2月29日 11211NA do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes

We always say "Failure is the mother of success", however, when it comes to parents,（When it comes to XXX的意思好像主要是说“当谈及到……的时候”，用在这里后面接“父母”似乎不是你想表达的意思了） they have to confess that it is really hard to watch their children struggling with a certain thing and making mistakes. An online survey conducted by China's biggest website, Sina.com, shows that in such situations, more than 80% of the parents admit that they would offer a help for fear that their children would be hurt by the potential mistakes. However, after a serious pondering, I hold that, parents should allow their children to make mistakes and learn from them, but only to some extent. There reasons are as follows.

First, it is various kinds of mistakes that make a child grow up. You can never imagine a baby to walk on his own if supported by parents all the time.
（Imagine sb doing sth,换个动词可能好点，比如用expect sb to do sth）At the beginning, even standing up would be a suffering. But bear in mind that no baby can learn to walk without falling to the ground for hundreds or even thousands of times. In this very moment(和moment搭的介词应该是at), all parents need to do is allowing him to make mistakes, to fall to the ground, although it may sometimes seem cruel; however, this will definitely benefit （差宾语）a lot in the long run. From these mistakes, the baby will learn to stand up, to keep a balance, to walk stably forward, to depend on his own when encounter（改成confronted,或者是encountering） with difficulties in his future life.

Furthermore, parents' support may sometimes lead to counterproductive results although they have rather good incentives. For one thing, this will result in children's reliance on parents, since they fail to acquire the ability to learn from their own mistakes and work out a better way to deal with problems. Therefore, once confronted with difficulties, their first reaction is to seek for parents' help. Also, a child who has never made any kind of mistakes would, inevitably, have a wrong self cognition that he could handle anything in the world. How can you count on such blindly arrogant one to have a bright future and even make a notable contribution to our society?（这句话似乎有点过了，换下语气能好点）

However, before setting mind to let a child learn from their own mistakes, parents must make sure that these mistakes are endurable, that is to say, they will not have serious or even fatal results. Some mistakes, once committed, one will never get a chance back, such as murder and drug obsession. The pay is too high for a child to sustain. Therefore, parents should interfere, immediately, when their children tend to make such "mistakes".

In a word, it is beneficial to let children make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes, as long as no severe damage will be resulted.

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灰常不好意思啊。。。晚了晚了。。。