issue 174 argument18 AWPj计时30min。二战新G的求大神给面子

happyturtleUID: 2891952

实在是水平不济，小弟二战如此苦逼。。。
另送AWP计时器一个，界面仿真不错，没有的G友可以留下邮箱来我尽量发，这里不知如何上传附件。。。有的话请大家指导
请诸位大神重拍，除了字数不够还有什么大的问题，大家一起讨论，以后每天上传一套I&A，望大众监督，3.31就要上刑场了。共勉
TOPIC: ISSUE174 - "Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places."
WORDS: 336          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2012-3-6 23:18:10
   Contrasting against the moral principals, formal laws and legislations, are obviously sustained by the national violence. As a result, the flexibility of laws should be seriously considered because once the laws is settled, it not only work as textbooks to guid citizens but also guards to punish rebellions. I partially agree with the assertion that the flexibility should be enough to maintain the social order and democracy while not too slack to prevent crimes.
  Actually a simple word of flexibility contains a mixture of different situations. Different government should choose a law systerm which could fit their political pursuits and their social condition. And as a result, different flexibility is difined in different circumstances. The poession of a gun is illegal in China while is permitted in American legislation. In this case, the "enough flexibility" is clearly explained for Chinese population is so great that controlling so many people who would protentially take a lethal weapen in public area is not realistic for the government. But based on years of discussion and experiment, the gun has adopted peacefully in American culture. That result in the flexibility should match the social reality.
An other reason that the flexibility should be valued indifferent groups of people. We just have mentioned that the law is not solely a guard to ptotect public safety  but a combination of textbooks and bars. It is especially prominent while dealing with adolescent and femal crime. Sometimes those crime are close connected with bully or discrimination which the suspect are not intentially commit the crime. In these cases, law should be fully aware of the detail situation in order to be judicious and conductive.
Given the situation above, the law should be strict in severl situation as well.
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To conclude the all situation of "enough flexibility" is not realistic both in this artical or in the real society. But what we should bear in mind for both the executives and embracer is the balance between too a strict and too flexible law.
   

TOPIC: ARGUMENT18 - The following appeared in an editorial in a Prunty County newspaper.
"In an attempt to improve highway safety, Prunty County recently lowered its speed limit from 55 miles per hour to 45 on all major county roads. But the 55 mph limit should be restored, because this safety effort has failed. Most drivers are exceeding the new speed limit and the accident rate throughout Prunty County has decreased only slightly. If we want to improve the safety of our roads, we should instead undertake the same kind of road improvement project that Butler County completed five years ago: increasing lane widths and resurfacing rough roads. Today, major Butler County roads still have a 55 mph speed limit, yet there were 25 percent fewer reported accidents in Butler County this past year than there were five years ago."
WORDS: 311          TIME: 00:30:00          DATE: 2012-3-6 23:18:10
  The argument above provide us with a successful example in reduction of highway trafic accidents in Butler Country and  suggest that the same measures are also effective in Prunty Country's case. This analogy seems to be appropriate, however, are in lack of a series of specific evidence to support the logic relationship, the author's attempt to hastily bridge those aspects of information together is not convincing for serious underlying fallacies.
  The key evidence the author fails to provide is that the three steps of promote the highway security which is useful in Butler Country are also applicable in Prunty Country.  Given the assumptions that the lane width could not be increased because of the local landform, the highways are often covered by snow and ice, and there is no dangerous intersections in Prunty Country's high ways, those methods would be inevitability usless. Since the evidence about the difference between two region is not provided, the analogy could hardly be considered to be adequate.
  Even though the analogy is suitable, the argument are still in the lack of evidence in another section of this dedication.  As we all could conclud from the passage that the speed limit in Butler County has not declined from 55mph while the Prunty County has already made this reduction. If the evidence provided identify that it is the fastidious speed limit that annoy the drivers in Prunty which result in adverse reaction as a demonstration to surpass the limit, the whole argument would be meaningless from the very beginning for the ultimate cause of such a danger is caused by inappropriate traffic polic.
To conclude the crucial evidences the argument fails to provide, it is not diffcult to recognize that both of the cause of those accidents and the analogy is not clearely identified. These fallacies result in that certain reasonable evidence could weaken the argument significantly.

ZTreeUID: 3165682

错别字/用词不当过多

论点问题：
- 不同的国家立不同的法律这根本就不是flexibility！flexibility更多指同一部法是否应该在特定问题上留有余地或者设定例外。你那个gun的论点完全失败。
- 女性/青少年的问题：成年男子就不会被bully/不会激情犯罪吗？女人/少年就没有本身恶性极强的人吗？少年犯罪人从轻处罚的理由是因为她们更容易被欺负/激情犯罪吗？你对这个观点/论据的把握至少还是能站得住脚的，最起码这正是flexibility的一部分应有之义，但是离严谨充分还有很大的距离。

这个issue总体上说还没有达到适合上考场的水平……

happyturtleUID: 2891952

2# ZTree
多谢大神指教，flexibility的确定义有问题，有空能帮忙看一下argument么？今天还重写写新的，多谢指导了。

shinian1987UID: 2797009

The argument above provide us with a successful example in reduction of highway trafic accidents in Butler Country and suggest that the same measures are also effective in Prunty Country's case. This analogy seems to be appropriate, however, are in lack of a series of specific evidence to support the logic relationship, the author's attempt to hastily bridge those aspects of information together is not convincing for serious underlying fallacies.
  The key evidence the author fails to provide is that the three steps of promote the highway security which is useful in Butler Country are also applicable in Prunty Country.  Given the assumptions that the lane width could not be increased because of the local landform, the highways are often covered by snow and ice, and there is no dangerous intersections in Prunty Country's high ways, those methods would be inevitability usless. Since the evidence about the difference between two region is not provided, the analogy could hardly be considered to be adequate.
  Even though the analogy is suitable, the argument are still in the lack of evidence in another section of this dedication.  As we all could conclud from the passage that the speed limit in Butler County has not declined from 55mph while the Prunty County has already made this reduction. If the evidence provided identify that it is the fastidious speed limit that annoy the drivers in Prunty which result in adverse reaction as a demonstration to surpass the limit, the whole argument would be meaningless from the very beginning for the ultimate cause of such a danger is caused by inappropriate traffic polic.
To conclude the crucial evidences the argument fails to provide, it is not diffcult to recognize that both of the cause of those accidents and the analogy is not clearely identified. These fallacies result in that certain reasonable evidence could weaken the argument significantly.


1.建议LZ写完自己先检查一下基本的语法，单复数错误很严重。
2.建议LZ熟悉一下标点符号的用法，文章的断句很糟糕，看起来很费劲。
3.如果驾驭不了长句的话，就不要用长句，文章最好能让人一目了然，把意思表达清楚最重要，你的句子给人的感觉就是很难明白你想说明什么。

PS: 希望LZ能找个人互改，版主时间有限，一般不太可能一一改到。

happyturtleUID: 2891952

4# shinian1987
多谢版主，下次发文一定先查word基本语法。。。

chasedream2012UID: 3238888

楼主加油！！！！！！！！！！！

happyturtleUID: 2891952

Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, times, and places."



Deriving from those most fundamental moral principals and social conventions, laws have been trying to work as a relentless guard to maintain the social balance and penetrating prophet to guide the masses. However what is inevitable is that even though courts and judges have already worked as a compensation for its fixed form, flexibility is always in lack, for the bifurcations between literal documents and realistic standards always exist. Given the precondition that the law is strict enough to control the outlaws, the more the flexibility is, the better the social order is maintained

Considering those mundane legal affairs, reasons for people to commit crimes varies. However, it is implausible to conclude all this motivation into limited legal documents.
Suppose that the court and judge are judicious enough to take all those unpredictable factors into account, the law itself, indispensably, requires fairly more space for flexibility. For example, an assassin who once murdered Lincoln ought not to be sentenced as the same as the one murdered John Kennedy though they committed the same crime to kill a president. The previous crime would be more closely connected to racial policy while the next has nothing to do with it, which results in a different judgment for broader social effect.

What's more about the law is its limitation on immediateness. Based on the situation that the whole world are shifting rapidly everyday, various kinds of conflicts have to be brought to end immediate through adequate standards. However, laws could only be adjusted periodically because the congresses which shift laws are held periodically. During these periods, the realistic circumstances such as economics conditions, social trends, scientific technology transmute except those regulations. Here result in the contradiction between the reality and the temporarily outdated laws as long as the flexibility of development fails to be taken into consideration. Given the assumption that a fairly flexible space has been left for this contradiction, laws would be more adaptable to this fast shifting society.

However, all those flexibilities submit to the preciseness and justice of laws. Laws have to obtain the most fundamental objectivity and dispassion in all sorts of situation. On the other hand, when a change of a law is appropriate to a individual case, it would also cause discriminated judgment violates the justice of the law. Based on the principal that laws should not only be considerable but also applicable, legislations are trying to take all those factors into consideration, but practically, impossible. In such a dilemma flexibilities yield to dispassion of law for the sake of sustain the social balance.

Ideally, we are expecting laws to act as a considerate parent who could both protect us away from outlaws and comprehend our individual situations, but the reality is not so comforting. The parent has so many kids to take care of so that there is not so much space for any individuals. Even though, we never give up the faith to build a legal system flexible and stable.

专程昨天重新写了WORD矫正。。求G友指教。。