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发表于 2012-3-10 00:10:40 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
39 110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems affecting our society today could be solved within our lifetime.

With the development of the advanced technology, without question, great changes have taken place in our society and solved many problems. However, I don’t believe any of the most important problems will be solved in our lifetime. Because the fact is we always put our own benefits and preference in the first place, and thus we could not abandon differences to solve world’s problems
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Throughout history war is a big problem that has devastated the world with death and destruction for centuries and continues to be one of the worldwide problems. There are many reasons of incapable of living together in harmony such as fighting for power, resources and religious differences. People used to believe that the Second World War was “the war to end all wars”, but many wars have happened. So it dose not seen that the world peach will be achieved in our lifetime, if ever.


Meanwhile, many people are awakening to the problems that climate change will cause them. And the WHO says different areas of the world will experience different problems from climate change. The main reason of climate change is the increased greenhouse gases, so what we should solve immediately is how to decrease carbon dioxide emission, but as yet no real progress has been made. We are not prepared to give up using our cars, or to useless electricity or gas. We are also unwilling to pay extra costs or suffer the inconvenient of renewable energy. Nations are also unwilling to show the responsibility, although there have been numerous conferences and meeting to talk about the method of resolve the question, very little has really been achieved.

Nowadays, overpopulation has become a serious problem we have to face because the more people are on the planet, the more waste and pollution is produced. Never before in history has the issue of overpopulation been more evident than now. The growing population is straining the world’s resources to the point where the scientists are unsure if we will be able to feed the population in the future. In order to tackle the problem, china introduced the policy of birth control, which helped to reduce the growth of the population. Despite the population fell, however, the policy create another problem – an aging population where there are not enough young people to support the old. As yet there is no effective solution to solve this problem.


In summary, the most impotent problems will
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发表于 2012-3-10 18:43:35 |只看该作者
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3月10日 101203NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently.
It is difficulty for a parent to sit back and allow his or her child to make a mistake. Most parents go out of their way to protect their children from harm, which could range from bumps and bruises to emotional upset. However, I consider that to some extent being a good parent is letting go and watching them move through unfamiliar territory, no matter how much we want to help our kids. Children need space to make mistakes and learn from them.

Develop success from failures. Discouragement and failure are two of the surest stepping stones to success. Children are more likely to do stupid things because of the lack of experience, but they can learn that making poor decisions leads to some unwanted consequence for themselves. These experiences will tend to leave a lasting impression on children and they will know the importance of making a right decision. When I was five years old, one day I watched a diving competition on TV and dreamed that I could do these just like the divers did, and thus I was taken to hospital after jumping down from father’s desk. Since then I understand a stupid decision will be able to bring such a bad consequence and should learn diving in swimming poor, not a desk.

In addition, just like the great inventor Albert Einstein once said: anyone who has never made a mistake has never tried anything new. Perhaps the best way to cultivate children’s creativity is letting go and stopping being afraid of making mistakes. Mistakes always offer children an opportunity to explore unfamiliar world, and then they could truly know what the world is. So when a son comes to father with an apparently unpractical science project, just let him do instead of warming him against the risk of making mistakes, because it is a chance that a failure may lead to creative young scientist eventually.

In conclusion, parents should let go and allow children make mistakes, only in this way can children to make good choices and become more daring and creative. Parents, after all, could not help their children all the time.
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发表于 2012-3-11 18:04:46 |只看该作者
3月10日 101203NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently.  Q0 Q* _' Y* u% }; v7 n4 P2 Q$

It is difficulty for a parent to sit back and allow his or her child to make a mistake. Most parents go out of their way to protect their children from harm, which could range from bumps and bruises 好词汇,学习了to emotional upset. However, I consider that to some extent being a good parent is letting go and watching them move through unfamiliar territory, no matter how much we want to help our kids. Children need space to make mistakes and learn from them. ; g1 F8 s* i* i0 V; r/ m. K
开头段挺好,但稍微长句多了一些。
Develop success from failures. 这里如果能够阐述一下为什么父母帮助就能导致成功就好了,我感觉逻辑关系有些跳跃,虽然我能理解。Discouragement and failure are two of the surest stepping stones to success. Children are more likely to do stupid things because of the lack of experience, but they can learn that making poor decisions leads to some unwanted consequence for themselves. These experiences will tend to leave a lasting impression on children and they will know the importance of making a right decision. When I was five years old, one day I watched a diving competition on TV and dreamed that I could do these just like the divers did, and thus I was taken to hospital after jumping down from father’s desk. Since then I understand a stupid decision will be able to bring such a bad consequence and should learn diving in swimming poor, not a desk.
本段说服力有点弱的原因就在于父母帮助为什么会成功上,我觉得最好能写出来父母怎样成功帮助你的过程。语言上,我发现楼主是长句高手阿,惭愧中。。。。
in addition, just like the great inventor Albert Einstein once said: anyone who has never made a mistake has never tried anything new. 同上一段一样这里最好写一下为什么没有父母的帮助就会犯错?Perhaps the best way to cultivate children’s creativity is letting go and stopping being afraid of making mistakes. Mistakes always offer children an opportunity to explore unfamiliar world, and then they could truly know what the world is. So when a son comes to father with an apparently unpractical science project, just let him do instead of warming him against the risk of making mistakes, because it is a chance that a failure may lead to creative young scientist eventually.
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In conclusion, parents should let go and allow children make mistakes, only in this way can children to make good choices and become more daring and creative. Parents, after all, could not help their children all the time.
楼主语言很流畅,这点值得学习,但是就逻辑关系上还有待加强,加油哦。

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发表于 2012-3-13 18:32:52 |只看该作者
3月12日110422 which kinds of university do you prefer universities whose graduates can find good jobs or universities where there are famous professors?

With the increasing pressure on finding a job, to choose what kind of university becomes a popular topic among students and even any part of society. Some prefer the university whose graduates can find good jobs while others tend to choose the university where there are famous professors. However, for me, a university with famous professors will be the fist choice.

It is undeniable that students graduated from a university of high employment rate appeal to the need of market itself. That’s because that such kind of universities provide courses which are practical, and therefore, graduates trained through such kind of practical courses will fit into the real occupations quickly. But such kind of universities have a flaw in common that graduates room for growth is limited, because a university is so highlighted the ability of practice that will ignore the importance of the basic knowledge. Relativity speaking, universities with famous professors usually have a superior education qualities, which place more emphasis on basic theoretical knowledge.

In addition, famous professions can provide graduations more opportunities and recommendation when seeking jobs. That’s because that famous professors have great reputation in the academic area, therefore, such a reputation become stepping stone for graduations. For instance, graduates recommended by a famous professor are more likely to get a job compared with other job seekers who look jobs in common ways, such as delivering resumes through the internet and even visiting employers. Besides, if students would like to pursue higher education after graduation, not to enter job markets, sound education can increase the possibilities to continue their educations. For example, graduates graduated from the university with famous professors are accepted easily by school.

In conclusion, comparing the universities where there are famous professors and the universities whose graduates can get good jobs, I tend to choose the former type, because the famous professors can ensure excellent education qualities and increase opportunities on matter you choose to find jobs or pursue higher education.
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你的作文改好了,加油!

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