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题目为：
The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns.
It’s undoubtedly that earning money from your job is very important for we must survive with money. However, I think it is not the most important just to earn money from your job (主观点). Everything we are doing is to pursue happiness, never excluding(对某些人来说属于被动动汇) job （进一步阐释主观点）. Happiness is not represented just by money, but in many aspects like self-realization, self-enriched, satisfaction in mind, peace and quietness in life, sense of
achievement/ accomplishment, social identity and self – Redemption(被动词汇).

The greatest difference between human and animal lies in human’s spiritual pursuit.（分观点1） Animal needs also survival, but it has no superior pursuit except physical satisfaction. Sometimes physical happiness can be realized by money, but in many situations supreme pursuit, which is the higher level of happiness, cannot be carried out by earning just money （论据） . For example, many stars don’t feel happy though they have much money. Zhang Guorong, a superior bright star in entertainment
circles suicided (被动词汇)
（died from self-
murder主动词汇）for depression. He owned much money like many other stars in entertainment circles, but money cannot give him self-salvation and save him from depression. Bill Gates has also earned much money and become a trillionaire, but he didn’t regard money as the most important thing and devoted most of his money in charity business, because this can help others. His happiness can be gained from helping the poor or patients in the world(长句), rather than from money. Another example is David, Thoreau, who volunteered to live beside Walden Lake without much money, has got experience in happiness from conversation with the nature. He even found that the less the money you have earned is, the more you can get pacification in your mind. He found that the point of life was not present in material wealth, but in simple quietness. Marina Tsvetaeva had lived in poverty almost in her whole life, but she persisted to write greatest poems to enrich the world and had been memorized by her offspring and the people in the world for ever.
However, indeed many people deem money which they earn from job is the most important when they are looking for a job. Actually they are not interested in such field, but they chose it because it is high-paid. Long time past, they found it so boring and difficult to get true achievement. They feel they are restricted by their mechanical work for it is not innovative and creative, and they became more and more passive without initiative spirit. They become more and more stressed and negative in life. They cannot find meaning of their job and life. Although they have gained wealth like luxury houses, famous-branded car, they lost ego and mental pursuit and they are not still satisfied in his life and status. They even lead an empty life without ideal in their whole life. They cannot feel happiness even until he dies at last, when he regretted that he hadn’t live a life that he wanted most.
As for me, who have much experience in choosing lifestyle, would like to find a job from which I can meet my ideal of becoming an integral person. I can enjoy the truth and wonder of a great life. I can get achievement and meaning from helping others by means of my hard work in fulfilling the task.