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Argument关于Nature's Way在P开店的那题！没怎么限时，用了四五十分钟吧貌似。求指导，求方向。先写了个比较简单的
题目：NW，a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products,is opening its next franchise in the town of P.The store should prove to be very successful:NW franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives,and clearly P is such an area.P merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs.The local health club has more members than ever,and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full.Finally,P's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers:these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program,which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.

In the memo,a chain of stores which are called Nature's Way which is opening the next store in the Plainsville.The author assert that this store should be very successful because of the threefold:(1)Plainsville's residents leading healthy lives which matches the Nature Way considering.(2)The sales of exercise stuffs are sold at a high profitable rate all the time in the Plainsville.(3)Plainsville's schoolchildren are the Nature's Way's potential customers because they are required to attend to the healthy program.Deeper considering of each of these facts,however,reveals that none of them supports credible evidence to the recommendation.
Firstly,individuals in P leading healthy lives does not mean they want to buy the products from Nature's Way,perhaps they just get up early and run around the city,or they all have even-tempered minds and submit healthy diets.In short,without ruling out strong connection of purchasing Nature's Way's products and the lifestyles of the residents,the author could not convince me on the basis of them that in the inhabitants where promoting healthy lives would make Nature's Way's profit maximized.
Secondly,the strong sales of exercise stuffs in P do not necessarily indicate that Nature's Way's products are sold well.Perhaps the local residents consider that the exercise clothing and shoes are fashionable enough to present their spirit at that moment,or this kind of clothing is the cheapest one among all kinds which makes this choice more plausible resulting from economic consideration.Yet,lacking of providing strong evidences to support this assumption in this memo which makes me diffident to believe that the residents are willing to purchase products from Nature's Way because of P's sales of exercise stuffs running at a high benefits.
Thirdly,the author asserts that the members increase in the local health clubs and related classes are always full which not presents that the residents are enjoyable about these exercises.Maybe the members increase from 1 to 2,and the classes are always full due to their maximum number is 5 which are all VIP classes and these classes are totally 2 classes.These are not impossible for the readers to indicate from what the author contends.
Finally,the fact that the programs which require the young ones to attend might lead an opposite way.Because the regular exercises might bring them boring feelings at early time and at last they might change their habits and interests which have nothing to do with exercises.At that time, the sales in Nature's Way are hard to indicate.The 'potential' word has various unstable possibilities to take into consideration.
To sum up,the recommendation depends on certain uncredible assumptions that render the convincing aspects as it stands.The author must provide strong and clear connection between the lifestyle in the residents and the sales of Nature's Way to bolster the recommendation,and the exact members and numbers in the clubs and the classes.Besides,the evidence that residents who buy the exercise equipments are also willing to do regular exercises and purchase the products in Nature's Way should be plausible and easy to catch.Otherwise,the informations in the memo are always unconvincing.