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发表于 2012-5-27 23:28:40 |显示全部楼层

憋了一个半小时，才码了300多字，汗。。。感觉内容比较空，句式单一，请大家拿起板砖狠狠拍过来吧，多谢各位啦题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people your age?

From my point of view, it is advisable to chooseadvice from older people rather than from my peer friends. My arguments forthis point are listed as follows.

The main reason for my propensity for olderpeople is that they have more experience and knowledge than me. They often haveexperienced the problem that I am facing to. Before I finish my undergraduate courses from university, I have twochoices in front me: going on work or continuing my graduate study. People thatare same age as me may have the same bother. So I asked advice from my cousinwho is three year older than me. He analyzed both the advantages anddisadvantages of the two choices for me, and at last he said to me "Takeit easy, just follow your heart". Although he didn't give me the finaldecision, but after his analysis I suddenly cleared what I really want in mydeep heart at that time. Thanks for his guiding, I made the proper choice andnow I am pursuiting my Master's degree.

There is another factor that deserves somewords here. People that are older than us, such as our parents and teachers,can give us more advisable and strategically. Grown under their education, they are familiar of the currentcircumstance around us, knowing what is beneficial to us, so they can give usthe valuable advice that we will prove to be right in the future.

Although the peer friends that we study andplay together can also give us some advices, comparing to the older people,their thought are not mature, sometimes they even direct us conversely. Forexample, two students are competing for one thing, such as a scholarship. Onthe way to the final end, one student may tell the other a wrong theory ormethod related to the course they are taking selfishly, which will lead to hissuccess in the competition.

In a word, comparing to the friends in myage, older people can give me more advisable devices. They are more experiencedand involved in our personal view, so the advices they given are more suitablefor us.