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22) According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise. However, Groveton College has successfully reduced student cheating by adopting an honor code, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced a system in which teachers closely monitored students; under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. In the first year the honor code was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey, a majority of Groveton students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. Thus, all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's in order to decrease cheating among students.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.


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In the statement ,the arguer recommend that all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to G's in order to decrease cheating among students.The recommendation is based on the successful adoption of this code in G that  cheating among sudents has dramatically decreased in several years after the enacting of the code.Unfortunately ,i found several obvious fallacies in the analysis and inference.

The arguer infer that all college and universities should adopt the honor code assuming from the assumption that the honor code will help decrease the cheating among students in the other colleges and universities just as like the situation happened in G.But we even did not know whether the sharp decreasing happened in G is truely due to the enaction of honor codes.We are just sure that  the decreasing happened after the enaction of honor codes, but this fact alone cannot result in that the honor codes is the direct and only reason to the sharp decreasing cheating.There can be other reasons ,such as a touching lecture or cheating-against activity, that can also lead to this subsequence.

Although ,as it has stated in the statement, a majority of G students said that they would less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without in a survey.But the survey can be persuasive only when it is appropriately taken among a large group of students, or it  cannot represent the majority of the whole G students.That is to say ,the number of students covered in the survey is not large enough,or  it has just cover a sorrow area of majors.These cases ,if is true, will imply that this survey is not convincing enough that any conclusion made from it will also be not convincing.

However,even we assume that the survey has been fairly taken, the success of honor code in G can not make sure that the code will be valid again in other colleges and universities.Just as we have analyzed before,we are not sure whether  the honor code is the essential reason why cheating decrease.And the students' tradition and methods of dealing with problems are not all the same between different colleges and universities.Thus if the students in one university  do not like to report other classmates' cheating, this code will be invalid too.

In sum,the arguer  infer a conclusion that the cheating decreasing is due to honor code  based on a survey whose validation is unknown ,and  extend to suggest all colleges and universities to adopt this code without consideration about the different background between universities.In order to make a more precise conclusion,we need to take a further survey.
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In the statement ,the arguer recommend that all colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to G's in order to decrease cheating among students.The recommendation is based on the successful adoption of this code in G that cheating among sudents has dramatically decreased in several years after the enacting of the code.Unfortunately ,i (I)found several obvious fallacies in the analysis and inference.

The arguer infer that all college and universities should adopt the honor code assuming from(is based on) the assumption that the honor code will help decrease the cheating among students in the other colleges and universities just as like the situation happened in G.But we even did not know whether the sharp decreasing happened in G is truely(actually) due to the enaction(enactment) of honor codes.We are just(merely) sure that the decreasing happened after the enaction of honor codes, but this fact alone cannot result in(convince us) that the honor codes is the direct and only reason to the sharp decreasing cheating.There can be other reasons ,such as a touching lecture or cheating-against activity, that(which) can also lead to this subsequence.

Although ,as it has stated in the statement, a majority of G students said that they would less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without in a survey.But the survey can be persuasive only when it is appropriately taken among a large group of students, or it cannot represent the majority of the whole G students.That is to say ,the number of students covered in the survey is not(may not be ) large enough,or it has just cover a sorrow area of majors.(这两个分句的意思其实是重的)These cases ,if is true, will imply that this survey is not convincing enough that(,and) any conclusion made(come) from it will also be not convincing.

However,even we assume that the survey has been fairly taken, the success of honor code in G can not make sure that the code will be valid again(alike) in other colleges and universities.Just as we have analyzed before,we are not sure whether the honor code is the essential reason why cheating decrease.(这一段最好是在假设这方法在G有效的前提下,论证在其他学校无效)And the students' tradition and methods of dealing with problems are not all the same between different colleges and universities.Thus if the students in one university do not like to report other classmates' cheating, this code will be invalid too.

In sum,the arguer infers a conclusion that the cheating decreasing is due to honor code based on a survey whose validation is unknown ,and extend to suggest all colleges and universities to adopt this code without consideration about the different background between universities.In order to make a more precise conclusion,we need to take a further survey.
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2# loly_he

感谢~修改成enactment ,merely ,come from,actually...确实是更准确了
那个分句实际上不重复,我没讲清楚,我是想说如果人数够多,但是专业覆盖面少,也不能说明问题~
In sum,thank you very much!

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