616党 ISSUE 20 求拍啊。。泪奔啊。。好急啊。。

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20.some believe that college students shouldconsider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field ofstudy.Others believe that college students base their choice of a field ofstudy on the availability of jobs in that field.

TIME: 2hrs                                            2010.5.29

With the high pace of the development ofsociety, there has always been a host of opinions when it comes to the choicebetween interest and job availability. Some believe that college studentsshould consider only their own talents and interests. Others hold the view thatstudents should base their choice of a field of study on the availability ofjobs in that field. I concede that students will benefit a lot if they basetheir choice on the availability of jobs in their study field. However, theother choice may also lead a way to a meaningful life, for one can alwaysachieve great goals if he devoted himself to his career. As far as I am concerned,the choice should be decided by students personal evaluation of interest andjob. And both choices are reasonable.

In this material world, people tend to putmoney in first priority. It makes sense when people choose their jobs accordingto the amount of salary. However, it doesn't mean that they have abandonedtheir talent and interest. Salary to interest is what love to bread. Sometimepeople have to solve starvation before they can afford to get involved in aromance. What's more, we cannot deny that people's interests change withenvironment. It is easy to develop an interest during their work time. Thismeans they, in this way, gained mentally and physically satisfaction.There are so many famous architects like Zaha Hadid and Ando Tadao who can best prove this point. Both of them are not architecture majored but chose architecture as their career and developed their interestduring their work. And finally won the Prizker Prize of Architecture. From these stories we can conclude that we can develop our interest in our careersif we put out heart into it.

However, some people, overturning theselecting sequence above, choose love before bread. They are born with somekind of talent or interest and continuously developed them during their lifetime. In this case, they tend to  have astronger desire to stick to their talent and interest than other people, evenif they are currently suffer from hunger. Let's take forest rangers as anexample. They made every effort to managed to protect out forest year and year,regardless of the slender wages they gained. It is with this strong belief oftheir innate love for nature that can they insist on their career and made adifference.

Finally, as a matter of fact, only with thedelicate balance of the two choice, which may considered as idealism andrealism, can our society function healthily. In personal terms, the two kindsof pursuit, differ from personal evaluation, may lead to diverse workcontribution. In social terms, it enriches the culture diversity and furthermore,helps to form rational allocation of social resources. Without those idealists,society will lose it animation and will hardly develop; without realists, wemay scarcely have the regular work we need to maintain the function of thesociety done.

To sum up, the choice of interest or jobavailability is based on personal evaluation, which we can hardly criticize.After all, it is with this balance of the two choice can we enjoy the diversityof life.

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1# CallmeE

作为还有两个礼拜就要参考的童鞋，LZ你的耗时太长了，这个阶段要将时间把握住，已经不是追求文章质量的时刻，而是保证文章能够顺利完成，并且不糟糕。

20.some believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students base their choice of a field ofstudy on the availability of jobs in that field.

题目是道discuss，非常的清晰，学生选专业的考虑因素，理性还是感性。

TIME: 2hrs  （i hope you would finish your work in 30min next time）                                          2010.5.29

With the high pace of the development of society, there has always been a host of opinions when it comes to the choice between interest and job availability. Some believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests. Others hold the view that students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability ofjobs in that field. 【太长，且照抄题目，没有意义。how could us students choose a major in college in this era? Some people may say"Just follow your heart!" while others are on the opposite considering that the field which could help you find a decent job is the best. 】I concede that students will benefit a lot if they base their choice on the availability of jobs in their study field. However, the other choice may also lead a way to a meaningful life, for one can always achieve great goals if he devoted himself to his career.【这里不需要过多去解释什么，给出你的position就好了。】 As far as I am concerned,the choice should be decided by students personal evaluation of interest and job. And both choices are reasonable.

In this material world, people tend to put money in first priority. It makes sense when people choose their jobs according to the amount of salary. However, it doesn't mean that they have abandoned their talent and interest. Salary to interest is what love to bread. 【这是....LZ的发明创造？至少要对仗啊，另外这类谚语型的句子不要自己造，不好不好。】Sometime people have to solve starvation before they can afford to get involved in aromance.【这里谈到爱情的问题，但与后文没有任何联系。】 What's more, we cannot deny that people's interests change with environment.【这句话怎么体现？与后文联系不紧密。兴趣随环境变化，关于建筑这个例子，没有表现出两人兴趣变化这一点。】 It is easy to develop an interest during their work time. This means they, in this way, gained mentally and physically satisfaction.There are so many famous architects like Zaha Hadid and Ando Tadao who can best
prove this point. Both of them are not architecture majored but chose architecture as their career and developed their interest during their work. And finally won the Prizker Prize of Architecture. From these stories we can conclude that we can develop our interest in our careers if we put out heart into it.【本段与文章主题的联系如何体现？LZ想表达怎样的一种观点？在大学先选一个好找工作的专业？从本段论证中很难体现出来这一点。你只论证了，兴趣是可以随工作的性质进行改变的，但没有很好表现，还需要修改。其次，这段既然将工作置于兴趣之前，那么就是想突出工作的重要性，也就是想表现学生应该选择一个好找工作的专业，但并没有很好的论述这方面的联系。】

However, some people, overturning theselecting sequence above, choose love before bread. They are born with somekind of talent or interest and continuously developed them during their lifetime. In this case, they tend to  have astronger desire to stick to their talent and interest than other people, evenif they are currently suffer from hunger. Let's take forest rangers as anexample. They made every effort to managed to protect out forest year and year,regardless of the slender wages they gained. It is with this strong belief oftheir innate love for nature that can they insist on their career and made adifference.

Finally, as a matter of fact, only with thedelicate balance of the two choice, which may considered as idealism andrealism, can our society function healthily. In personal terms, the two kindsof pursuit, differ from personal evaluation, may lead to diverse workcontribution. In social terms, it enriches the culture diversity and furthermore,helps to form rational allocation of social resources. Without those idealists,society will lose it animation and will hardly develop; without realists, wemay scarcely have the regular work we need to maintain the function of thesociety done.

To sum up, the choice of interest or jobavailability is based on personal evaluation, which we can hardly criticize.After all, it is with this balance of the two choice can we enjoy the diversityof life.

跑题了。

题目讨论的重点是college student how to choose a major for studying, considering their interest/ talent or easy to find a job in the future. 通篇却没有有效地联系论述这一观点。反而更多的论述career与interest之间的联系。

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2# 咖啡盐
非常感谢版主的指导，实不相瞒，偷懒了。。从其他地方找来的提纲，就开始写了。的确跑题跑远了。。

今天又再写了一次= =。还是有些超时，不过比上次好多了，希望版主再指正一下，不胜感激！

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I agree with the speaker that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. A contrary view revealed that they should base their choice of field of study on the a availability of jobs in that field. Nevertheless, a balance between interests and jobs when choosing a study field, with the help of government's encourage policies, otherwise, it would be a loss of innovation for society and a loss of happiness for students themselves.

Admittedly, choosing a field of study of their own talents and interests is of great benefit. Talents and interests are like an energy source. Motivated by talents and interests, students will exploit their potential and is most likely to make revolutionary progresses in that field. Moreover, talents and interests guide their ways to the most suitable future jobs after they graduated. Thus, the jobs, that usually take to make a living, will no longer be enduring jobs, when combined with students' interests. Let's take Zaha Hadid as an example. The great modern architect, who won the Pritzker Prize, noted as the Nobel Prize in architecture field, was first majored in Mathematics, and chose to be an architect when she found she was fascinated by the beauty of buildings.

However, it is also reasonable to choose one's field of study considering the availability of jobs in that field. Without accounting this, students may find difficulty in finding jobs, when they graduated. Thus, they will have to face the fundamental living pressure of life. On the contrary, limiting one's study field with the job concern would be harmful. In terms of individuals, one would lose his interest of study. In terms of society, we may lose some outstanding talents, hence reduce the ingenuity of society.

To sum up, both interests and jobs are impertinent factors student have to consider when choosing their study field. As for student, one should make a clear evaluation of the two factors and try to strike a balance between them. And for government should make policy to encourage colleges and companies to set fund that can help students to develop their talents and interests without burdening the living pressure.

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I agree with the speaker that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. A contrary view revealed that they should base their choice of field of study on the a availability of jobs in that field. Nevertheless, a balance between interests and jobs when choosing a study field, with the help of government's encourage policies,otherwise, it would be a loss of innovation for society and a loss of happiness for students themselves.你这句话的谓语哪儿去了？

Admittedly, choosing a field of study of their own talents and interests is of great benefit. Talents and interests are like an energy source. Motivated by talents and interests, students will exploit their potential and is删掉 most likely to make revolutionary progresses in that field. Moreover, talents and interests guide their ways to the most suitable future jobs after they graduated. Thus, the jobs, that usually take to make a living, will no longer be enduring jobs, when combined with students' interests. Let's take Zaha Hadid as an example. The great modern architect, who won the Pritzker Prize, noted as the Nobel Prize in architecture field, was first majored in Mathematics, and chose to be an architect when she found she was fascinated by the beauty of buildings.例子可以，但是前面的论述有点儿乱感觉，逻辑感不强。

However, it is also reasonable to choose one's field of study considering the availability of jobs in that field. Without accounting this有这个用法吗？, students may find difficulty in finding jobs, when they graduated. Thus, they will have to face the fundamental living pressure of life. On the contrary, limiting one's study field with the job concern would be harmful. In terms of individuals, one would lose his interest of study. In terms of society, we may lose some outstanding talents, hence reduce the ingenuity of society.

To sum up, both interests and jobs are impertinent factors student have to consider when choosing their study field. As for student, one should make a clear evaluation of the two factors and try to strike a balance between them. And for government should make policy to encourage colleges and companies to set fund that can help students to develop their talents and interests without burdening the living pressure.
字数不多，没有找到更多的可论述的点上，只是泛泛正反地谈了一下，一点儿也没有深入论述。提供一些可以论述的点：
1、谈到压力和兴趣这个对比。在hard working上，兴趣和压力不同，两者都会使人努力，但是结果明显不同。一个积极一个消极，一个主动一个被迫。然后再举个例。
2、jobs的必需性。所有的精神追求都必须建立在填饱肚子的基础上。没有工作，就没有经济保障，谈何兴趣，谈何精神追求？举例（80-90年代美国摇滚乐队的爆炸式增长与发展中国家对比）。找个你熟悉的例子。
我也是6.16，共勉，如有哪个说的不恰当的请指教。

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5# rippersean

同是6.16党

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5# rippersean

我也敲了一篇，字数实在凑不够了。求大侠拍砖

发现一个严重的错误，羞愧

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2# 咖啡盐

仰望版主，求指点......