issue4 完全没用模版效率就是低...已自改

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Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
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很不熟练，很详细的提纲早就列好了，甚至有些句子都想好了。但还是边查单词边写的，写了50分钟。唉。已经自己修改过一遍拼写，替换了几个用得不合适的词。满眼都是低级词汇和句子结构…..　求拍求拍求拍　

In the British teleplay <Black Mirror I>, the director tells an absurd story about a scandal, that the Premier is required to, by the kidnapper of the princess, have sex with a pig on the TV in front of the nation. And people, no matter with commiseration, abhorrence or indifference, wait in front of the TV and watch the whole process. This story, though fictional, reveals that people do love scandals. In one hand, scandals mostly mean facts. On the other hand, psychology study has shown that people love to pry others’ secret. As far as I concerned, scandal do has its value, but should be seen and treated in a rational and justified way.

Admittedly, scandal has a specific use as a kind of information. The first benefit of it is easily attracting attention. Compared to speeches, which is unauthentic for the public because of its characteristic of easily being adorned as a political advertisement, scandals are mostly ugly truth revealed in a shocking way. For instance, people may show apathy when listen to a lecture about bribery given by an office speaker, regard it as a performance. But when the Iraq bribery scandal erupted in 2007, people reacted with anger and blame immediately and began to check the political system in a wary way. And this event also shows another advantage of scandals, that they can disclose the holes in the existent system, by then can people fix it. When the glutin in food is tested out, the food industry set out an examination to verify its product process and people pay more attention to their health.

However, there is no doubt too that paying too much attention on scandals could cause problems. To the individuals involved in scandals, the mistakes they made once, and perhaps exaggerated by the mass medias, might destroy their whole life. Such like the sex photo scandal among Chinese actors several years ago, people berated all the people in the event, humiliated and abandoned them, but did not realize the hurt they throw to those people. And to the society, too much scandals and attention on them might cause passive emotions in the whole society. People might regard the society as a dirty, lack of moral and full of ugly one, and led to prevalence of extreme mood in the society at the end.

Thus, it is significant to treat the scandal with ration. The first thing people should do is judging a person without bias. Watergate scandal made Nexion a shamed president in the United State history, but we cannot ignore his contribute to the relationship between the USA and China. There is no perfect person in the world. And if you admit this, you must also admit that people cannot be judged by a single scandal. What’s more, it is the way we treat the scandal rather that the scandal itself that useful for our refining the society. Bribery scandals show us the holes in the political system, so we should check the operation of the government, fix the problems and perfect the supervise mechanism. Sex scandals debunk the loss of social moral so we should enhance our moral education. Only by resolving questions reflected in scandals could make them meaningful.

To sum up, scandal’s mood is rather irony than entertainment, and its goal is causing introspection in the whole society instead of impeaching several individuals. Under the simply seemed “facts”, the deeper meaning of scandal is being a specific way to show us the flaws of political and moral system. It is the way in which people treat it makes the scandal do or do not useful.

Ace-QiuUID: 3327387

Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

In the British teleplay <Black Mirror I>, the director tells an absurd story about a scandal, that the Premier is required to, by the kidnapper of the princess, have sex with a pig on the TV in front of the nation. And people, no matter with commiseration, abhorrence or indifference, wait in front of the TV and watch the whole process. This story, though fictional, reveals that people do love scandals. On（粗心了）  one hand, scandals mostly mean facts. On the other hand, psychology study has shown that people love to pry others’ secret. As far as I concerned, scandal do has its value, but should be (从丑闻方面来讲感觉和treat差不多)treated and handled in a rational and justified way.

Admittedly, scandal  can be usedas a mean to publicize. . (用one 和你后面的another 相对应) One evidentbenefit of scandals is that it can easily draw the public’s attention. Compared to speeches, like campaign speech(因为你后面提到了political，所以这里提一下比较好) , which are usually（如果不加程度副词就是全盘否定了，但不一定全部都是不真实的）  unauthentic for the public because of its characteristic of being easily adorned as a political advertisement, scandals are mostly ugly truth revealed in a shocking way. For instance, people may show apathy when listen to a lecture about bribery given by an office speaker, regarding it as a performance. But when the Iraq bribery scandal erupted in 2007, people reacted with extreme anger and virulent criticism （怪罪，归咎，放在这不太合适） and began to check the political system in a wary way. And this event also shows another advantage of scandals: the attention it brought to the scandals force the society to contemplate on the problem and call for a solution(这是普遍性的好处). Like in this case,这里是前面的例子好处 they can disclose the holes in the existent system, by then can people fix it. Like When the glutin in food is detected, the food industry set out 不仅仅是一个检验 a new rule to  inspect on (这是证实真实性)the whole food production process and people are now paying more attention to food safety .

However, there is no doubt that paying too much attention on scandals could cause problems. For the individuals involved in scandals, the mistakes that （和后面一致）they made onceand that(这里做主语) are perhaps exaggerated by the mass medias, might destroy their whole life. Such as the sex photo scandal among Chinese actors several years ago, people berated all the people in the event, humiliated and boycott（抛弃不太合适吧）them, but they did not realize the severity of hurt they pose to those people. And for  the public , too much scandals and attention on （这里最好说明是什么或者谁）the dark side might arouse  negative  emotions in the whole society. People might regard the society as a dirty, unmoral and ugly(最好用同样的行驶) one, and lead to prevalence of extreme emotion/ emotional extremes in the society in  the end.

Thus, it is significant to treat （不是特指）scandals with ration. The first thing people should do is to judge a person without bias. Watergate scandal made Nexon a shamed president in the United State history, but we cannot ignore his contribute to the relationship between the USA and China. There is no perfect person in the world. And if you admit this, you must also admit that people cannot be judged by a single scandal. What’s more, it is the way that we treat the scandal rather than the scandal itself that is useful for our refining the society. Bribery scandals show us the holes in the political system, so we should check the operation of the government, fix the problems and perfect the supervising mechanism. Sex scandals debunk the loss of social moral,  whereupon we should enhance our moral education. Only by resolving questions reflected in scandals could we make them meaningful.

To sum up, (scandal’s mood什么意思？) is rather irony than entertainment, and （这不是大多数丑闻的目的吧）   it inspire the whole society to conduct an introspection on ourselves  instead of impeaching several individuals. (Under the simply seemed “facts”这句话似乎是在似乎简单的事实下直译的？)Under the seemingly simple “fact”, the deeper meaning of scandal is to show us the flaws of political and moral system道德体制？？. It is the way in which people treat it decide whether a scandal is useful or not

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啊。。。我用word改的。。。你看不到我改的内容。。。要不发给你吧！！QQ 793927487

下面是我的~~请狠批！

Learning is primarily a matter of personal discipline, students cannot be motivated by school or college alone.

   This statement is comprised of two parts, where the first half accounts personal discipline for a primary impetus for learning, from which it draws a conclusion that school and college alone won’t offer sufficient motivation for students to learn. While I agree with the conclusion , I found the grounds of argument to be partially true, yet still less than unassailable.

Personal discipline is essential for students in the process of learning. The students who have the highest performance at school are usually those who are highly self-disciplined. However, personal discipline is just one of the characteristic that motivate student to learn. There are , according to educational psychology, two types of motivation: intrinsic motivation, which involves student’s intention to study for its own sake or for the sense of accomplishment in learning something new, and the extrinsic motivation, which is provided by external incentive to pull you to act. Ideally, motivation should be intrinsic. Students are willing to learn proactively and their satisfaction with the work is not influenced by external performance indicator such as grades. This is the situation where personal discipline is not needed at all since the student is totally driven by his own interest and passion.

Nonetheless, since many students are not intrinsically motivated, especially the younger ones, external incentive should be introduced. It can be something more materialistic ,like a new car; or something more spiritual , like all the praises or envies we get from our friends,. In most cases, however, these kind of motivators will not provide adequate drive for students and do not last long. They will soon find themselves looking for excuses for not trying harder or even for giving up, that is when personal discipline comes into play. It is a crucial part in the course of learning, given that we all have to learn something that we find not to be intriguing enough from kindergarten through college. We can see that most students with an overall high academic performance are often those are highly self-disciplined.

Thus, school and college could play an important role in both extrinsic motivation, intrinsic motivation. But motivation comes solely from school or college will indeed not suffice. Students needs to be motivated socially , materialistically , mentally, and most importantly, intrinsically. Personal discipline is a essential part of learning, but it is only necessary when student's intrinsic motivation is not enough.

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Ace-Qiu 发表于 2012-6-13 19:28
啊。。。我用word改的。。。你看不到我改的内容。。。要不发给你吧！！QQ 793927487

下面是我的~~请狠批 ...

好的马上加
谢谢！～

我下午在咖啡盐斑竹那个帖里看到你的了　我觉得好厉害　思路句子都好

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Ace-Qiu 发表于 2012-6-13 19:28
啊。。。我用word改的。。。你看不到我改的内容。。。要不发给你吧！！QQ 793927487

下面是我的~~请狠批 ...

不过我有个问题先~

当时看的比较草　我理解是这样的：
学生学习需要刺激，分为外部和内部刺激。
当内部刺激足够的时候不需要personal discipline
当内部刺激不足或外部刺激主要作用时需要personal discipline

是么？
我觉得结构特别好，逻辑和思路都好佩服
不过这个personal discipline　这个概念是怎么理解的呢？
按照自我训练这个　我稍微有点没理解

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派~~ 发表于 2012-6-13 20:35
不过我有个问题先~

当时看的比较草　我理解是这样的：

我觉得好像是 自我约束，自我规范 之类的意思吧???
对啊。。。我的结构就是这样的。。。但是不知道会不会不太充分。。。

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Ace-Qiu 发表于 2012-6-13 22:11
我觉得好像是 自我约束，自我规范 之类的意思吧???
对啊。。。我的结构就是这样的。。。但是不知道会不会 ...

其实写的时候想了好久。。。用了好长时间才写完。。。考试要是这样我就完蛋了。