第二篇习作：issue6 附提纲，求指点（2楼1st修改，3楼2nd 修改）

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A nation shouldrequire all of its students to study the same national curriculum until theyenter college.

[Specific TaskInstruction: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which youagree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for theposition you take. In developing and supporting your position, describespecific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would notbe advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.]

提纲：
Thesis：national curriculum 对整体教育有好处，但是特殊的课程也必不可少，对个人和社会都有好处。
1. TS：national curriculum 可以保证公平性和权威性。
2. TS：national curriculum 可以促进合作和竞争，最终学生受益。
3. TS：大学前是基础教育，没必要设立特殊课程。
4. TS：但是，特殊课程必不可少。（1）基于兴趣的课程有好处，（2）某些地方有特殊的问题化，需要保护其完整性。


一楼是第一次写的，后来经过修改的作文，在二楼。求拍！三楼是第二次修改后的，再求拍！

Should a nation require all of its studentsto study the same national curriculum until they enter college, as the speakerclaim? Although unifying the curriculum has many merits such as assurance forequality and authority, reduction in cost and more convenience for communication,I think that local curriculum is also indispensable for its representation oflocal features.



First, to unify the national curriculum canensure the equality and authority of the education, and at the same time theresearch and development expense can be lowered to a large extent. Under thesame curriculum, every student use the same books and related materials indifferent religions. This policy can assure that everyone's basic skills, suchas the language skill, logic skill and calculation skill, could get necessarilytrained .Besides the equality, to develop the national curriculum, the best andmost authoritative experts will be involved into the ** process. With theprofound teaching experience, they can choose and create the most valuablematerials into the textbook. By means of studying the knowledge, students canget well trained. Moreover, by using national curriculum, the local governmentneed not pay for the research and development cost.



Apart from the equality and authority, usinguniform curriculum contributes to the common process. Because of the samecurriculum, the schools in different schools can often communicate with eachother about the current teaching and studying experience and find theiradvantages and disadvantages. Based on this process, the schools could improvethemselves in order to compete with each other, which usually leads to commonprogress and benefits the students eventually.



In sum, both national and local curriculumhave merits in different aspects. The national curriculum, which constraintsthe basic and necessary content, should be combined with the local curriculum,which improves students' confidence and takes some unique situations intoaccount.

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这是修改后的：

Should a nation require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, as the speaker claim? Although unifying the curriculum has many merits for the whole national education, I think that the specific curriculum is also indispensable for its great benefits for both individuals and society. .

First, national curriculum can ensure the equality and authority of the education Under the same curriculum, every student use the same books and related materials in different religions. This policy can assure that everyone's basic skills, such as the language skill, logic skill and calculation skill, could get necessarily trained, which contributes to the equality of education. Besides the equality, to develop the national curriculum, the most authoritative experts will be involved into the research and development process. With the profound teaching experience, they can choose and the most valuable materials to redact the textbooks, through which the authority can be assured. By means of studying these, students can get well trained.

Apart from the equality and authority, using uniform curriculum contributes to the quality of education. Because of this uniformity (identity), different schools could compare their teaching methods and students’ scores with each other, which leads to cooperation and competition. The teachers from different schools can often communicate with each other about the teaching methods, then find their advantages and disadvantages, and finally, create some more effective teaching methods, which promotes the quality of education. Additionally, through cooperation, the schools could improve themselves for better competing with each other, which usually leads to common progress and benefits the students eventually.

In fact, different from the students in college, who need to choose one field as major, students, who have not yet entered into college, merely need to study the fundamental knowledge and master the basic skills, which the national curriculum can be fully guaranteed. Thence, there is no need to develop specific courses for some students.

However, the specific curriculum is indispensible for its great benefits for the students themselves and the cultural integrity. First of all, one of the most important aims of education is to develop students’ interest to study, so as their desire. A research indicts that when students study under a strong interest, they will be motivated to create more effective inspirations. However, the interest of them varies from language to mathematic to physics to music and so on, so national curriculum can’t satisfy their desire completely. As a result, some specific courses, as elective ones for all students, are beneficial to their study and personality development. Secondly, some religions may include minority and people there need to study their own language and culture. For example, people in Tibet want to study Tibetan and know the Potala Palace better. If they only study the national curriculum, their culture will be in danger of extinction, which is harmful to cultural integrity.

In sum, both national and local curriculum have merits in different aspects. The national curriculum, which constraints the basic and necessary content, should be combined with some specific course as elective ones, which motives students' interest and protect the cultural integrity.

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第二次修改的结果，再求拍 增加了逻辑连接词！

Should a nation require all of itsstudentsto study the same national curriculum until they enter college, as thespeakerclaim? Although unifying the curriculum has many merits for the wholenationaleducation, I think that the specific curriculum is also indispensablefor its great benefits for both individuals and society. By specific curriculum, students’ interests may be motivated anddeveloped, contributing to the education quality, and cultural integrity can beprotected to a certain extent.



Firstly, Nationalcurriculum is beneficial to the whole education in some respects such asequality and authority. On one hand, this policy can assure thateveryone's basic skills, such as the language skill, logicskill and calculationskill, could get necessarily trained, which contributes to the equality ofeducation. On the other hand, to develop thenational curriculum, the most authoritative experts will be involved into theresearchand development process. With the profound teaching experience, theycan select the most valuable course materials to redact the textbooks, throughwhich the authority can be assured. Accordingly by means of studying these, students can get welltrained.



Apart from the equality and authority,usinguniform curriculum contributes to the quality of education. Because ofthis uniformity(identity), different schools could also compare their teachingmethods and students’scores with each other, leading to cooperation andcompetition. Under this circumstance, The teachersfrom different schools can often communicate with each other about theteachingmethods, then find their advantages and disadvantages, and finally, create somemore effective teaching methods, which promotes the quality ofeducation.Additionally, through cooperation, the schools could improvethemselves forbetter competing with each other, which usually leads to commonprogress andbenefits the students eventually.



In fact, different from the studentsincollege, who need to choose one field as major, students, who have notyetentered into college, merely need to study the fundamental knowledge andmasterthe basic skills, which the national curriculum can be fully guaranteed. Thence, as many advocates of national curriculum frequentlyproclaim, there is no need to develop specific courses for somestudents.



However, in contrast with those advocates, I think the specific curriculum is indispensible indeed,for its great benefits for the students themselves and thecultural integrity.First of all, one of the most important aims of educationis to developstudents’ interest to study, so as their desire. A research  indicates that when students study under astrong interest, they will be motivated tocreate more effective inspirations.However, the interest of them varies fromlanguage to mathematic to physics tomusic and so on, so national curriculumcan’t satisfy their desire completely.As a result, some specific courses, aselective ones for all students, are beneficialto their study and personalitydevelopment. Secondly, some religions may includeminority and people thereneed to study their own language and culture. Forexample, people in Tibet wantto study Tibetan and know the Potala Palacebetter. If they only study thenational curriculum, their culture will be indanger of extinction, which isharmful to cultural integrity.



In sum, both national and localcurriculums have merits in different aspects. The national curriculum can constraints thebasic and necessary content. Equally important, some specific courses, aselective ones, can also motivate students’ interest and protect the culturalintegrity. The optimal approach, in my view, is to combine the two and make abalance.

dennis_szsyUID：3133539

唯一一个建议..
既然开头是 Although unifying the curriculum has many merits for the whole national education, I think that the specific curriculum is also indispensable for its great benefits for both individuals and society.  那么开头给人的印象是你这篇重点是不同的课程。但你文章主体给人的感觉实在将统一课程的利更大，虽然有不足之处。建议把这句改一改，然后把主题三段的顺序变一下。

zhouyu123031UID：3181463

普通青年飘过...
可以选择忽略。。

感觉楼主第四段是不是把话说死了= = 和第五段鲜明对比了 这不仅仅是让步肯定了。。

dennis_szsyUID：3133539

然后结尾的Equally important好像把你的开头给否定了...最好开头就说Equally important