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发表于 2012-8-23 20:46:41 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 alexcui 于 2012-12-26 13:18 编辑

10.25作业[ 10.25 children manage money -written by alexcui.doc (29.5 KB, 下载次数: 3)

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发表于 2012-8-24 21:06:52 |显示全部楼层
呼哧改完了,等不到你的17就只能先改20了 不然被秋版发现没及时改别人作业可要处罚的

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发表于 2012-8-24 22:16:08 |显示全部楼层
mengliuqd 发表于 2012-8-24 21:06
呼哧改完了,等不到你的17就只能先改20了 不然被秋版发现没及时改别人作业可要处罚的


tpo 17 综合写作,抱歉我交晚了

The professor in the lecture argues that the growth of human population and agriculture has not caused harm to birds in United States. But, the reading passage goes against the opinion. The lecture casts doubt on the reading passage by using several points.
First, according to the professor in the lecture, the urban development truly provides larger habitats for other types of birds. More and more birds are likely to live in the cities than before. This contradict what the reading passage indicates, because in the reading passage, as human populations and settlements continue to expand, bird’s natural habitats will continue to disappear. There is no information mentioned about the situation in cities.
Second, the professor in the lecture believes that one of new type of corns is introducing into the agricultural activities.  This type of corns can produce more corns for unity land than it was. No more land will be used for agricultural activities. On the contrary, the reading passage contends that the growth of agriculture will result in the further destruction of bird habitats.
Third, in the lecture, the professor says that human are aware of the harmful effect from the using of chemical pesticides. So they try to use new type pesticides that are much less poisons and grow pest resistant crops that have no negative influence on birds , which refutes the points in the reading passage. In the reading passage, the use of chemical pesticides would lead to the population of bird’s decline, since pesticides are poisons and prevent birds from reproducing successfully.

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发表于 2012-8-24 22:30:48 |显示全部楼层
8月24号的独立写作,请大家指正


The best way to learn about a foreign country is to read the newspapers and magazines from that country.

With the development of globalization, people are more likely to learn about a foreign country. So what it the best way to acquire information of foreign countries has been discussed. Someone prefers reading the newspapers and magazines, while others prefer living in foreign countries or watch TV for personal experience. In my opinion, I definitely agree the people who want to live in aboard or watch TV for information about that country. Reasons listed below will firmly support my post.

First of all, living in the country enhances us be familiar with local people, society and culture. As we all know, the reason why people know their hometown deeply is the place is the motherland for people, who was born here and has been here for many years. So if people want to learn about a foreign country, living in that country is one of the greatest choices for them. Under this situation, you can go shopping with local people, and play games with name, even live with them. Take my own as an example, I have been in Australia for two years, I almost do everything with local people, like studying, playing and so on. As a result I formed a clear image about the difference between Australia and my hometown, which is never be obtained from newspapers and magazines.

Second, watching TV is another convenient way to absorb relative information about a foreign country. Since there are so many programs about foreign countries, people are offered huge information can choose. One of the famous programs named Discovery, which broadcasts various areas about a foreign country. In this TV program, it introduces almost every country around the world with the special culture in there or the uncommon events happening there. In general, those who cannot afford the fee for living in a foreign country may divert to this way, which costs little, but still gains as much information as possible for you need.

Last not the least, reading the newspapers and magazines from that country leads to some bias. As it is known to all, the article or the pictures which are in the newspaper and magazines may include writers' own judgments. This would has influence on others, especially the one who eager to learn about this country.

To sum up, considering the reasons mention I imply that instead of reading newspaper and magazines from that country, it is more suitable to go there or watch TV program which provide a attractive sight of foreign countries.


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发表于 2012-8-24 22:32:31 |显示全部楼层
tpo17 综合写作
The professor in the lecture argues that the growth of human population and agriculture has not caused harm to birds in United States. But, the reading passage goes against the opinion. The lecture casts doubt on the reading passage by using several points.
First, according to the professor in the lecture, the urban development truly provides larger habitats for other types of birds. More and more birds are likely to live in the cities than before. This contradict what the reading passage indicates, because in the reading passage, as human populations and settlements continue to expand, bird’s natural habitats will continue to disappear. There is no information mentioned about the situation in cities.
Second, the professor in the lecture believes that one of new type of corns is introducing into the agricultural activities.  This type of corns can produce more corns for unity land than it was. No more land will be used for agricultural activities. On the contrary, the reading passage contends that the growth of agriculture will result in the further destruction of bird habitats.
Third, in the lecture, the professor says that human are aware of the harmful effect from the using of chemical pesticides. So they try to use new type pesticides that are much less poisons and grow pest resistant crops that have no negative influence on birds , which refutes the points in the reading passage. In the reading passage, the use of chemical pesticides would lead to the population of bird’s decline, since pesticides are poisons and prevent birds from reproducing successfully.

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发表于 2012-8-24 22:52:30 |显示全部楼层
mengliuqd 发表于 2012-8-24 21:06
呼哧改完了,等不到你的17就只能先改20了 不然被秋版发现没及时改别人作业可要处罚的

感觉有点问题,自己刚贴的TPO17和独立写作均不见踪影,然后昨天的独立写作也被版主删除

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发表于 2012-8-24 23:36:09 |显示全部楼层

请大家拍砖(同时庆祝我终于可以上传WORD文件了)

8.24作业(系统原因晚了).doc (30 KB, 下载次数: 3)

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alexcui 发表于 2012-8-24 22:52
感觉有点问题,自己刚贴的TPO17和独立写作均不见踪影,然后昨天的独立写作也被版主删除


i'm sry,不是版主删的;P是系统最近老是出问题~

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发表于 2012-8-24 23:54:45 |显示全部楼层
秋雨荆州 发表于 2012-8-24 23:50
i'm sry,不是版主删的是系统最近老是出问题~

没关系,没关系,是我太心急了,妄下判断了, 谢谢你帮我处理了问题,

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发表于 2012-8-25 01:52:23 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 訢宇 于 2012-8-25 01:57 编辑

同学,你的作文我改好了,但是我现在不能发附件,有木有其他方法我把Word文档发给你,全文粘贴看着好奇怪。另:我只改了独立,综合怎么写我都还没怎么看……嗯,我争取周日之前把综合给你改好~哦,还有我的作文被系统吞掉了,发出来马上通知你~

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发表于 2012-8-25 07:25:47 |显示全部楼层
訢宇 发表于 2012-8-25 01:52
同学,你的作文我改好了,但是我现在不能发附件,有木有其他方法我把Word文档发给你,全文粘贴看着好奇怪。 ...

太感谢了,2点了还在改我的作业,系统吃作业找秋雨荆州,我也遇到过这个问题,然后不能出word是因为你是新手上路,多留言一旦变成寄托新兵就可以啦。。我的邮箱654044180@qq.com。。。然后我晚点会修改你的作业,互相学习,互相进步。。谢谢啦

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发表于 2012-8-25 09:27:41 |显示全部楼层
修改已发送~作业依然被吞中TTATT

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发表于 2012-8-25 14:36:35 |显示全部楼层
我的作文终于发出来了,满脸血= =https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... amp;fromuid=3310389[/url]

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发表于 2012-8-25 18:32:57 |显示全部楼层
tpo17 综合写作- alex .doc (28.5 KB, 下载次数: 7) 8.24作业(系统原因晚了).doc (30.5 KB, 下载次数: 2) 已批改。 多交流~ 我的作业贴:https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... =1399644&extra= 另外,因为TPO综合我没做,明儿考试,所以,我主要看了一下楼主文章的框架思路提了点意见。

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发表于 2012-8-26 12:30:57 |显示全部楼层
訢宇 发表于 2012-8-25 14:36
我的作文终于发出来了,满脸血= =【IBT写作小组】訢宇备考帖 https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewt ...

不好意思,昨天去参加托福考试了,回来累坏了,晚上还去加班,没有及时修改,请原谅。 824独立-reviewed by alexcui.doc (28 KB, 下载次数: 1)

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