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Do you agree or disagree: The most important investment of a company is to improve the skills of its employees' “The talents are the most important strategy “is a frequently used saying. However, some people contradicts that other fields in company strategy , such as elaborate financial budget, impressive marketing and comprehensive after-sale service, also have crucial roles. As far as I am concerned, this view is far too simplistic to neglect the efficiency and few errors that are from skillful employees （不知道你表达的是什么意思 ） I strongly stand by the position that improving the skill of company's employee is the most significant investment. Admittedly, the notable companies always boast their excellent financial budget, gorgeous marketing, and powerful after-sale service which enable them to precede. To some extent, all the factors I mentioned are very essential to the company. However, without skillful employee who can integrate them, the company cannot be organised properly. This is common to us, some of the companies are equipped with extreme hardware facilities when they establish. Because of lacking skillful employee to operate those facilities, all the staffs are out of work and a company is going to collapse. 这句话能不能再简练一些呢，比如说， it is a common phenomenon that, even though some companies are initially built up with sophisticated hardware facilities, they eventually failed to collapse because of lacking skillful employee to enable to operate those facilities. One of the benefits from staff training is to improve the efficiency of work. Take my own experience as an example. Three years ago, there was a new accounting information system introducing (introduced) to my job. At the very first beginning, I was totally confused by the system, because I have no idea to operate it accurately. Under this situation, I was required to take part into seven-days (seven-day) training course which was organised by the company. After that, I became familiar with the system, working more efficiently than before. Another benefit that is provided by investing for promoting the skills of employees is fewer errors during work. As we all know, reducing the incidence of error is of great consequence to the success of the company. The best way to achieve this is to give competent and better training to the employees. The more high quality trainings were given to employees, the less likely they will made （errors） in their job. (这句话写的很好哦)What’s more, the less errors made leads to be free of the daily hard work（感觉这句话表达的不是很恰当，你想表达的是工作错误少的话，可以结余时间，那么可不可以说 shorten the time to finish their tasks 之类）. With extra（saved） time, people can specialize in their sections as well as routine ones. Google would be one of the companies who are famous for offering custom training for employee in order to ensure the improvement of their skills. As a result of that, Google specialized in the hi-tech areas due to a myriad of the talents with fewer errors. In a nutshell, considering the reasons I mentioned above, although there is no doubt that instead of （删）others strategy, like marketing, budget, customer service play vital roles in managing a company , investing in the human resource in order to improve the skills of the employee would be the most important decision for the company. 总体感觉你思路清晰，观点明确，用词比我的更为丰富，句子结构也有多样性，写的很好，只是有些地方可能表达的有些不太明确，然后开头 你那个too to 结构我有点晕。
同时，谢谢你帮我修改，哈哈。
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楼主: alexcui
发表于 2012-9-21 23:48:52
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