【独立作文】bangkelin的作业贴

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0917 Your job has greater happiness than you social life.

It cannot be negated that jobs occupy most people’s life and bring us sense of fulfillment and happiness. However, according to my perspective, I would like to say that social life is the one which can bring us greater happiness.

Indeed, people normally can harvest happiness through a finish of a tough task or a reward for a stiff struggle. However, the sense of delight is always transient and a new task or struggle comes quickly. Although this kind of journey is meaningful for both a person and a society, it removes the happiness from my mind. When comparing with the social life, my job cannot satisfy me where the social life can do.

My Job, at the first place, gives me more pressure than gratification. Just take my experience as an example. I am now serving as an intern in a human resource department. Every day, I have to face a huge number of files and data. And I always find myself lost in this massive information; What’s more, the fierce competition in my department is also likely to suffocate me. Everyone is hard-working and tries to overcome others for rewards, promotions as well as not being washing out. On the contrary, in social life, such as go hiking with my friends, I can immerse in a quite relaxing atmosphere. We can choose whichever place we favors, stop to take photos for whichever spots we admire and talk about whatever we enjoy. At this time, I do not need to worry about the deadline of my report or the comments of my boss, so life seems more delightful for me.

Apart from the aspect of pressure, I also find the social life is more able to free my soul than job. I am a girl who is eager to express my inner feeling towards things and people。When I communicate with my friends, I usually can say things without scruple, even some sensitive topics. Even if I hurt some one’s feeling because of my straightforwardness, I can still acquire understanding through communication and apology. However, things cannot be so at will and forgivable. I have to be responsible for every word I say, pay attention not to offend someone unintentionally and keep far away from some interesting but useless topics. So, my soul is trapped by such a lot of restrains and taboos so that cannot be freely released.

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顶你呀~！ 赶快升级吧，有了附件，就不会被防水墙过滤了...哈哈...

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SYNCIA 发表于 2012-9-18 19:58
顶你呀~！ 赶快升级吧，有了附件，就不会被防水墙过滤了...哈哈...

爱死你了

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谢谢

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神探夏洛克 发表于 2012-9-19 07:24
已改好。

谢谢楼主，但是这是我17号的文章啊

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神探夏洛克 发表于 2012-9-19 07:24
已改好。

不好意思，刚才发现是我题目的日期写错了~~~:L

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bangkelin 发表于 2012-9-19 08:51
不好意思，刚才发现是我题目的日期写错了~~~

嘿嘿，没事，加油！

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神探夏洛克 发表于 2012-9-19 09:55
嘿嘿，没事，加油！

这是我9月18号的，你如果有时间可以看一下哈。希望对你有帮助~~:)

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bangkelin 发表于 2012-9-19 12:04
这是我9月18号的，你如果有时间可以看一下哈。希望对你有帮助~~

好的，谢谢！

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9月20日 已改
It is universally accepted that how to improve performance becomes an ever-increasing issue for most companies. Some may argue that investment on employee's skill（加an） should be primary consideration for business executives. However, from my perspectives, some other elements, such as a good welfare and well-developed competitive system are much more important.

Indeed, the success of a company cannot depart from improving skills of its employees, because it is the employees who work on specific tasks and affairs to accomplish the daily operation of a company. In this case, their skills can determine the company's performance. Thus, many current companies provide their employees tutoring(总感觉这个词更像是辅导、小班授课那种意思……) （to）improve their skills and technique. However, tutoring and other actions to improve the skills of their employees cannot solve their problem radically. After all, they are the external forces, and whether employees can have advances depends on themselves to a larger extent.

I believe some other factors, such as offering superior job benefits and setting up an incentive mechanism would be more effective.

First of all, superior job benefits including higher salaries and various staff welfare will surely attract more brilliant candidates. For example, Google, a world-wide searching engine company, is known for its competitive salaries and enviable employee benefits. According to a survey made by PayScale, Google’s employees are paid 23% more than others who are engaged in the same work in other companies. Besides it also offers its staff free nutrient food, variety（various） kinds of games and professional massage service. As a result, Google attracts numerous brilliant employees every year from famous universities like MIT, Stanford and so on, and its performance and market share are out-of-standing. So, comparing with investment on improving its employees' skills, why do not the companies put money into appealing highly-skilled employees?

After from(apart from?) the salaries and welfare, it is also very important that creating an incentive mechanism and positive enterprise culture so that the employees will be incented to work hard in order to keep pace with others. For example, if employee's salaries and rewards are based on their daily performance, most individuals will try to finish things quicker and better and learn from others in different ways. Besides, a company which keeps conveying positive culture and atmosphere will surely own(acquire更合适一些) positive response. So, comparing with just investment in their skills, this let’s（？） employee（加复数？） to enhance themselves automatically.

Taking all my reasoning into consideration, I clearly notice that the kind of investment the statement supports should not be the first and foremost concern of a company owner. We should use more aggressive（这个词好像言重了） and ambitious employees and instruct them to improve skills on their own.
总结：整体思路非常清晰，有些短语用词非常好~单复数的问题还要再注意一下，有的地方感觉像是为了用某个词而用之……

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行者天下 发表于 2012-9-19 12:04
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谢谢

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非常抱歉...昨天网络疯了~~~今天才传上来....
楼主写的很顺啊~~英文底子应该很好...膜拜一下