issue136，请大家拍砖！

qindingsyUID: 140753

136"The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
Choice, choice, choice, just like a covey of flies droning around us every minutes to force us to kill them or disregard of their existence. And I don’t believe that you haven’t confronted this circumstance even if only once. Now please, tell me will fly be exterminated from our planet? So does the choice.

Almost everything, speaking broadly the decision making on your business, and narrowly which bus to take, in daily life needs to make a optation. “Would you like a cup of coffee or tea? ”, the most common saying when you go to your friend’s, for example. Then you must select one of them or a third one you prefer even you could choose nothing for some reason, but you have to make a choice.

If you devote yourself to be one just like who want to invent perpetual motion machine, you may say “ I will throw myself to a forlorn place, and no other people, no bus, no boss, even no bubbles, so in this case nothing force me or lure me to choose ”. But, one thing you must be clear that no choice is just a kind of choice.

Another possible and frequently occurred situation is that some one else makes a decision for you no matter how you prefer when you hesitate or in a swing position. For example, being fired is a result nobody would like to confront. One may choose to change employment but be fired, because it’s a totally different position to employee. But it’s right a selection boss makes for you not your original idea.

Please note that I don’t mean there is no exception that we needn’t to choose. For example, the moment one sleeping or the state one die. Undoubtedly, there is no choice under these conditions, but one must choose to sleep or die. Sounds a little horrifying, but it’s up to you that what is your dream when you are sleeping or which way to die. If you are falling in love, the probability of sweet dream will be greater. And if you disoblige a member of gangsterdom, maybe you will be murdered.

According to what I have discussed above, the circumstance that there is no choice is rather scarce. In short, we live in society full of choices. So, would you like a cup of coffee or tea?

imongUID: 140258

这种写作风格和我们原来习惯看到的不太一样，我不能下断言说孰优孰劣，但是主观语气太强的you建议还是少用。再参考一下范文。

Analytical Writing的analytical体现在你对题干的把握和分析上面。你的文章列举了一些现象，但是缺乏分析，在深度上是不够的。这篇文章不会超过4分。当然，136是比较出名的不好写，也有一定关系。

看来你的语言基础应该还是不错的，属于promising的那一种。我看到了一个frequently occured 应该是frequently occurring，其他的地方似乎都还没有语言上的错误（我看得不太仔细），最近几天以来是第一篇看到语言上比较流畅的了。加以联系，进一步加强用词和句法，同时把主体和构架好好设计，肯定会不错的。

sacrabUID: 140880

写得像一篇演讲稿，风格倾向于informal，而且作者基本是在运用rhetoric而不是logic在说理，是一篇好文章，但不是ETS喜欢的那种逻辑严谨的文章