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Issue100
"The pressure to achieve high grades in school seriously limits the quality of learning. An educational environment without grades would promote more genuine intellectual development."

    Nowadays vicious competetion in the modern society has permeated into the campus.Slightly different,people inthe society are seeking for the fortune and status;while in the students' eyes,grades take the place,which has impressed much pressure on the students.Obviously,no one has any reason to deny that the pressure limits the quality of learning.However,the limitation merely happens in some occasion and extend.If you ignore the positive effects of the pressure exterted on  students by the exams,your opinion will be one-sided.
     Admittedly,the exams might have prompted some negative impact on the sudents.As we all know, the scholarship is assessed with the grades of some special subjects.Thus, many students,who intend to achieve high grades,devide the subjects learned into two categories: one is the subject with an exam at the termination which is called " Exam Needed Subjects" and ENS for short; the other with an abbreviation "UENS" needn't any exam.As the titles,students treat the two kinds of subjects in an utterly different way.Take my college for example,where most compulsive subjects are "ENS" and almost all the alternative ones are "UNES".On account of that, many students prefer to be absent from the alternative subjects' classes.What attract their eyes most are the "ENS", which almost occupy their all time and sipirit.Although most of them study hard, their sights focused on limited subjects,and that their knowledge is restricted in a small region, so they can't even be titled as specialist as a result of the lack for special technics.
      However, competetion for high grades among students also bring on even more positive effect on the students,which could movetivate students to work hard. As the saying goes "Interest is the best teacher for everyone", which is prompted by the movetivation to study.Everyone has a dream in mind, grades can be compared to the right goal in daily life. With a goal in mind, you can place yourself in the right direction and push your study forward step by step.Then, what will hapen without grades?Just have a imagine: the pressure is removed from the students, and a lot of students will feel lackadasical all day, some of whom will probably corrupt into electronic games, novel reading,etc.At that moment,the astomsphere and words among the students will be filled with various kinds of enterainment,and study is dying away.Do you think students will benifit a lot?In that case,most students will have little capacity to deal with any matter except playing,from which the society will suffer a lot.In oder to prevent that case occur, the grades are needed.
      In my opinion, study is a complex process.If you reading the books, listening to the teacher without any practice, I think you can't absolutely absorb the knowledge you have learned.A good prepared exam check your flaws in your study rather merely assess your grades.In preparing for the exams, students can compliment the structure of the lessons they learned. As result, exams with assessing grades shouldn't be elimintated.
     No easy solutiion is at hand to the problem of the exsistence of the grades at school, however,we can find a banlance between the two cases.Grades are needed for students to assess one's ability to study, which can't be placed over-extended importance.As we all know, grades couln't represent everthing.You can use the grades to simulate your study,and remember: never addict to it.

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Issue100
"The pressure to achieve high grades in school seriously limits the quality of learning. An educational environment without grades would promote more genuine intellectual development."

Nowadays vicious competetion(拼写) in the modern society has permeated into the campus.Slightly different,people inthe society are seeking for the fortune and status;while in the students' eyes,grades take the place,which has impressed much pressure on the students.Obviously,no one has any reason to deny that the pressure limits the quality of learning.However,the limitation merely happens in some occasion and extend.If you ignore the positive effects of the pressure exterted on students by the exams,your opinion will be one-sided.这一段引出你的观点是否定题目的

Admittedly,the exams might have prompted some negative impact on the sudents.As we all know, the scholarship is assessed with the grades of some special subjects.Thus, many students,who intend to achieve high grades,devide the subjects learned into two categories: one is the subject with an exam at the termination which is called " Exam Needed Subjects" and ENS for short; the other with an abbreviation "UENS" needn't any exam.As the titles,students treat the two kinds of subjects in an utterly (utter就够了)different way.Take my college for example,where most compulsive subjects are "ENS" and almost all the alternative ones are "UNES".On account of that, many students prefer to be absent from the alternative subjects' classes.What attract their eyes most are the "ENS", which almost occupy their all time and sipirit.(用energy比较好)Although most of them study hard, their sights focused on limited subjects,and that their knowledge is restricted in a small region, so they can't even be titled as specialist as a result of the lack for special technics.好观点!用词用句也不错

However, competetion(同上) for high grades among students also bring on even more positive effect on the students,which could movetivate (motivate)students to work hard. As the saying goes "Interest is the best teacher for everyone", which is prompted by the movetivation ( motivation)to study.这个观点不对,兴趣只是动机之一,而不是推动兴趣Everyone has a dream in mind, grades can be compared to the right goal in daily life. With a goal in mind, you can place yourself in the right direction and push your study forward step by step.Then, what will hapen(拼写错误有点多,建议在word上改过再发上来) without grades?Just have a imagine: the pressure is removed from the students, and a lot of students will feel lackadasical all day, some of whom will probably corrupt into electronic games, novel reading,etc.(不要用etc,不正规,可以用and so forth)At that moment,the astomsphere and words among the students will be filled with various kinds of enterainment,and study is dying away.(这句有待商榷,虽然能让人看懂,但是不符合普通的用法,看英语报纸或杂志的时候可以留意一下)Do you think students will benifit a lot?In that case,most students will have little capacity to deal with any matter except playing,from which the society will suffer a lot.In oder to prevent that case occur, the grades are needed.

In my opinion, study is a complex process.If you reading the books, listening to the teacher without any practice, I think you can't absolutely absorb the knowledge you have learned.A good prepared exam check your flaws in your study rather merely assess your grades.In preparing for the exams, students can compliment(compliment?这是什么意思) the structure of the lessons they learned. As (a)result, exams with assessing grades shouldn't be elimintated.这一段本来应该是你写的重点,但理由不够充分,我的想法是紧承上一段,先写有了考试之后的好处,再进一步写你论述的观点

No easy solutiion is at hand to the problem of the exsistence of the grades at school, however,we can find a banlance between the two cases.Grades are needed for students to assess one's ability to study, which can't be placed over-extended importance.As we all know, grades couln't represent everthing.You can use the grades to simulate your study,and remember: never addict to it整篇文章显得有些单薄,虽然字数不少,其实grade有很多好处,不止是督促学习,还是一种比较公平的衡量方法,尤其是开始阶段,除了这个,试想还有什么方法呢?这是我的一点想法