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发表于 2013-3-8 22:57:34 |显示全部楼层

本帖最后由 taotaole 于 2013-4-8 01:04 编辑

我是曾经在寄托GRE版呆过的老人，当年受益于互助修改服务，现在有意回Gter继续ignite孩子们……

个人情况比较单一：英专+语言学硕士；当年托福裸考，其中写作28~，另外做过些TF辅导，能根据评分标准提供一些中肯客观的意见。

如有需要批改的童鞋们可以在楼下跟帖，综合 or 独立均可，前提是把完整的题目（音频，文本or确定链接）+ DOC(x)附件，我将以附件形式附上comment...如果没有特别要求，可能只是较简单的suggestion (maybe no correction), 或者可以根据 “grammar” or "logic" 等特定要求进行具体点评。

4月7日已截止……。
有空准备写个小结来着，敬请关注！

每日修改记录 (Date- Name- URL- Writing Topic) 共18篇，其中1篇综合。

3.8-iamjerrywang （跳转5L）
"A or D: Young people today are more likely to give time and effort to improving the world than young people were in the past."

3.9-foamfly  (7L)
"A or D:All school teachers should be required to take courses every five years to update their knowledge."

3.10-太阳边界 11L
"A or D: Government should focus on its budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development."

3.11-fsi045662  19L
"A or D:All school teachers should be required to take courses every five years to update their knowledge."

3.12-enid317 23L
"A or D: Nowadays it’s easier to maintain health than the past."

3.13-太阳边界 27L
"A or D: People living in small villages are more satisfied with their life than those who live in cities."

3.14-q9450839 （提供了两篇习作，我就只改那篇新的题目的吧，还有一道govenment budgets的可以参考之前改过的哈） 36L
"A or D: Your job has greater happiness than your social life."

3.15-糖甜甜39L推荐习作
"People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. "

3.16-mhd9876 40L
"Nowadays, neighbors depend on less than people live in the past."

3.17-太阳边界  47L
"Groups are important to people."

3.18-ailin1232 48L
"In order to be successful, people should be more like others than being different from others."

3.19-乳虎  49L
"It's important for the governments to provide money to things that are beautiful and not just for things that are practical."

3.20-ybcmath 50L  推荐语言
"Imagine a friend of yours needs help in a class, and you are one of the best students in that class. Do you think it is better that you help your friend or that he finds a tutor?"

3.29-fsi045662 46L
综合第一篇！： Iraq Vessel for electricity?

3.30-Pigap60L
“Universities spend money on improving facilities (labs and general equipments) better than hiring famous teachers.”

3.31-亚伦先生61L推荐语言
"Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship."

4.1-wobushihaoren2 62L
"People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years than nowadays."

4.7-亚伦先生 64L
”Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.“