第一篇TWE

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101 Some people say that physical exercise should be a required part of every school day. Other people believe that students should spend the whole school day on academic studies. Which opinion do you agree with? Give specific reasons and details to support your answer.

While the belief students should spend the whole day on academic studies is prevailing, I do not stand on the point that students should sacrifice their physical exercises to study. Instead, physical exercise should be a required part of every school day, on the ground of the old-saying "running is the essential in life.”

First, although academic studies are essential for students, it is not all of the students' life. Others, such as playing football, climbing, running, jumping, swimming, etc., are indispensable too. In the case that students study after a whole day, they need the fresh air and warm sunshine to inspire their thoughts. After all, physical exercise gives rise to a robust physique and will eliminate fatigue. It is analogous to a machine will need oiling after operating a long time.

Second, physical exercise will enhance the willpower of students when they practice exercises. One of my friends shares me with his experience after his enduring practice in the healthy club. "You will have to combat with laziness, and whether give up or not". Such spirit is also important for academic study when students confront with challenges in their academic researches, then the experience resulting from physical exercise would infuse energy in their study.

Finally, during the process of physical exercise students will learn something beyond books of their academic fields. Such as communicating skill, getting along well with his/her fellows, complying with his/her tutor’s command and so on, which will indicate students how to get along well with his/her cooperators, advisors, and even how effectively compete with his/her rivals, how to stand in front of ferocious adversity.

Thus, no one should give up physical exercise whether they are busy with academic study or not. Physical exercise will not only raise a robust physique and adamant spirit, but also instruct students certain skills they will not learn from their academic study. The best solution is to take physical exercise into account as well as academic study, both of which would lead students to a well-being condition.

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5.5

ballackxjjUID: 134855

写得很好，高分作文。语言很连贯。

个人的一点看法：

但似乎应该是firstly更好一些吧

还有，书面文章etc.这样的缩写尽量避免

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我觉得一般，给人的感觉就是套用了一个模版，没有什么出彩的地方
而且每个理由给的都太平均了，没有重点突出的感觉

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最初由 xqmelissa 发布
[B]我觉得一般，给人的感觉就是套用了一个模版，没有什么出彩的地方
而且每个理由给的都太平均了，没有重点突出的感觉 [/B]

没看过模版。但我觉得像first,second,finally引导理由段的文章不会出自模版：p

第一篇能写成这样很不错了：）