【phoenixlw的作文互改帖】

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时隔5年，重回T版，感触良多。

我是2008年5月考的T(28+28+22+27=105)，诸多原因，最终木有选择出去。

工作4年了，现决定重新考T，时间是2013年7月14日。特此开一个作文互改帖，想请各位帮忙看看、修改下我的独立写作，非常欢迎各位拍砖。当然，也欢迎各位贴上自己的文章，我有时间一定仔细帮修改。

希望在此大家一起切磋、讨论。

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2013-07-06 我的第一篇

“Some people believe that children nowadays have too much freedom. Others believe that children are protected too much by their parents. Which of these statements do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your decision.”

Currently, the controversial issue whether children have too much freedom or are over-protected by their parents urges great attention from both public and individuals. As far as I am concerned, children should have adequate freedom, and protection from parents should be moderate.  
To begin with, over-protection from parents might eventually undermine independence of children. Independence, which means ability to survive without other's help, is highly valued in the modern society which filled up with endless challenges and fierce competence. Admittedly, ability to survive sounds a kind of cruel, but it is true indeed. For instance, in the wide desert of Africa, a new-born gazelle is struggling on its hooves, whose mother merely stands there showing no mercy. Since the female gazelle clearly knows the leopard might be approaching, only learning to run enables new-born gazelle to live. Thus, parents should encourage children learn to run, rather than offer over-protection, just like the gazelle.

Besides, parents should never confine children's freedom to burdensome assignment and myriad of disciplines. For one thing, children have freedom to choose what they love to do, burdensome assignment such as playing piano or learning mathematics could be difficult to continue with children's reluctance. For another, too much disciplines will weaken children's innate imagination and innocence. Just imagine, children get reproved simply because they stained their shirts or scrawled on the wall, and sadly imagination and innocence of children tends to fade away gradually due to these unnecessary disciplines. Therefore, more freedom should be given to enable a happy childhood.

However, it is admittedly that moderate protection is necessary since children are vulnerable both physically and mentally. Recently research shows that the number of cases involved child molestation keeps rising for years, and how to escape children from these tragedies should be taken into consideration of parents. In addition to the former, mental care from parents also play an important role especially in the single-parent family or foster family. So sometimes, moderate protection from parents should never be ignored.

In sum, although moderate protection from parents is necessary, after weighing pros and cons, yet I still hold the opinion that over-protection from parents should be abandoned and more freedom should be given to children.

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犀利

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xiaoyongnao 发表于 2013-7-6 15:51
犀利

走过路过，帮忙拍个砖？:lol