【作文小组】林有德的作业贴（8月25日）

林有德UID: 3457306

独立作文：
8.8
TPO9 综合写作



8.6
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for the government to spend money on new buildings than to preserve historic or traditional buildings and homes.



8.5
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole society today expect young people to follow are too strict.



8.3
TPO10 综合写作



8.2
Should the government support artists or should artists support themselves?



8.1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If a student is having difficulty studying a course, it is better for the student to turn to a friend who is good at this course than to turn to his/her teacher for help.



7.31
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is much easier for people to achieve success without their family members’ help now than in the past.



7.30
TPO11 综合写作



7.29
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the modern world, we should never be impolite to another person.



7.27
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most business people are only motivated by the desire of money.



7.26
TPO12 综合写作



7.25
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries.

林有德UID: 3457306

综合作文：

月芜UID: 3404851

行文没有出现大的语法错误，可喜可贺~句之间的逻辑关系和一些小小的语法点依然要加强注意。

个人觉得是不是才刚刚开始准备，可以看看各种入门的资料，会帮助很大。加油！

林有德UID: 3457306

月芜 发表于 2013-7-26 00:14
行文没有出现大的语法错误，可喜可贺~句之间的逻辑关系和一些小小的语法点依然要加强注意。

个人觉得是 ...

感谢修改！的确是才开始准备，果然字数是硬伤啊，憋不出来。。

.MaggieUID: 3456903

同学，改好勒。

dongfangbaobeiUID: 3413785

你好，你26号的作业打不开哦

茶园葱绿UID: 3457471

7.26已改！

林有德UID: 3457306

.Maggie 发表于 2013-7-26 19:55
同学，改好勒。

感谢修改！

林有德UID: 3457306

茶园葱绿 发表于 2013-7-27 16:37
7.26已改！

感谢修改！
多谢提醒，看了下范文，果然在写作方向上有偏差。。

星尘想去看极光UID: 3457009

感觉语法没有大问题，加强论证

林有德UID: 3457306

星尘想去看极光 发表于 2013-7-30 12:15
感觉语法没有大问题，加强论证

感谢修改！

wangrui1008UID: 3457988

7.29 修改来了。感觉楼主功底扎实，写作用词和用句都不错。但需要注意例子的使用，感觉你用的例子都没能很好的证明论点。我们可以继续就这点讨论。

林有德UID: 3457306

wangrui1008 发表于 2013-7-31 00:17
7.29 修改来了。感觉楼主功底扎实，写作用词和用句都不错。但需要注意例子的使用，感觉你用的例子都没能很好 ...

感谢修改！
的确例子的积累不够，只能编一些故事，有时候编到后面就偏题了:L

欣儿7777777UID: 3424144

7.30 其实综合写作真没啥好改的哈哈，加油哦

贰大山人UID: 3458058

句子的使用没有什么大问题，有些词的词性要分清楚一点，然后要提高的就是中间段，三段三个观点辨析度要高然后最好是分清楚，不然的话观点不足很容易扣分的。