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发表于 2013-8-10 21:45:32 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Alexins 于 2013-9-6 16:59 编辑

0906TPO25
0906TPO25.doc (13 KB, 下载次数: 8)


0905 Do you agree or disagree: It is important to know about what is happening around the world, even
if it doesn't affect your personal lives.
0905world,even,not,bother.doc (15 KB, 下载次数: 4)

0903 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays, neighbors depend on each
other less than people in the past
0903nei,no,clos,befor.doc (16 KB, 下载次数: 4)

0902 TPO03综合写作
0902TPO03综合写作.doc (14 KB, 下载次数: 6)

0901 Disagree or agree :It is impossible to be completely honest with your friend.

0901true, honesty.doc (15.5 KB, 下载次数: 13)

0831 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays it is easier to maintain good
health than in the past

0831health,toda,better,yesterday.doc (15 KB, 下载次数: 3)

0830 Do you agree or disagree? people would be happier if they had fewer possessions.

0830 hapier,fewer, profes.doc (15.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

0829 TPO04综合写作

0829TPO4.doc (12.5 KB, 下载次数: 6)

0828 the parents spend too much time on determining future things of children. children can make
choices by their own

0828parent,choice,child.doc (16 KB, 下载次数: 3)


0827 Is the most important characteristic of a good political or business leader is the ability to take
responsibility for mistakes?

0827most,imp,take,respon,mista.doc (16.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

0826 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions should always show
audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished

0826tel,show,good,than,bad.doc (16.5 KB, 下载次数: 5)


0825 TPO05

0825 TPO5.doc (12 KB, 下载次数: 4)


0823 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Talented people's leadership is inborn and can't be learned by people



0821 TPO06综合写作



0820 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth,
government can neglect environmental concerns.



0819 Do you agree or disagree: All high school students should take basic economics courses.



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8.13 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else.



0814 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems in the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.



0815 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who have learned many different skills are more likely to succeed than those who focus on learning only one skill.



0816 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should take time to relax with
hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.



0817 TPO7 综合写作



0818 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for the
government to spend money on improving Internet access than on public transportation.



同学费心啦~

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发表于 2013-8-11 13:00:39 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Winnie千山明月 于 2013-8-11 13:01 编辑

buy,own country,expensive.doc (19.5 KB, 下载次数: 6) 楼主请过目啊, 改好了

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发表于 2013-8-11 23:14:55 |显示全部楼层
来晚了,不好意思哈~~
改得有点多,Alexins耐心看一下哈,总的来说,文章思路清晰,流畅,只是语法上面有些问题,楼主写的时候可以多加注意~~
有不同意修改的地方,欢迎讨论!
加油!

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发表于 2013-8-12 21:15:52 |显示全部楼层
看了很久,加油!!

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发表于 2013-8-12 23:42:14 |显示全部楼层
稍晚改好,抱歉啊

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发表于 2013-8-14 12:33:31 |显示全部楼层
8.13改好啦 LZ写得真是非常棒! 0813Alex revised by necromancy.doc (27.5 KB, 下载次数: 4)

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发表于 2013-8-14 13:04:41 |显示全部楼层
楼主的论证还是很不错的但语法上要注意加强啊,尽量少犯些小错误,把句子说通顺说完整,毕竟toefl首先还是一个语言考试嘛~
加油哈!

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发表于 2013-8-14 20:25:51 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Alexins 于 2013-8-14 20:31 编辑
necromancy 发表于 2013-8-14 12:33
8.13改好啦 LZ写得真是非常棒!


多谢鼓励啦~一起继续加油吧!

另外关于码字的问题,其实这篇作为有点点超时了呃,大概花了35分钟的样子。

其实,我准备要考GRE了,GRE要求30分钟写600词,所以一直在追求比较快速地打字,这个多多注意和练习应该就可以提高。

一句话吧。。。我这也是被逼的。。。

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发表于 2013-8-14 20:26:58 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 Alexins 于 2013-8-14 20:36 编辑
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楼主的论证还是很不错的但语法上要注意加强啊,尽量少犯些小错误,把句子说通顺说完整,毕竟toefl首先还是一 ...


恩恩,我想尽量写到400字以上,所以有时候打字都有点着急,有时候甚至句子写了一半就放下了。。。

文章里面是出现好多低级错误,看完自己都忍俊不禁,哈哈

修改得确实好仔细,多谢你的建议了哈!

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发表于 2013-8-15 13:10:31 |显示全部楼层
8.14的~ lz写得不错,举的例子也让文章很生动~
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发表于 2013-8-15 13:35:37 |显示全部楼层
亲~改0814来啦~~
有什么问题我们可以讨论一下哈~~
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发表于 2013-8-15 23:21:33 |显示全部楼层
游离猫咪119 发表于 2013-8-15 13:10
8.14的~ lz写得不错,举的例子也让文章很生动~

四两拨千斤哇~这个评价好高端大气上档次~多谢指教啦

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发表于 2013-8-16 23:19:52 |显示全部楼层
改好了哈~

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发表于 2013-8-17 16:05:01 |显示全部楼层
改好啦

我的在这里
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1619525-1-1.html

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发表于 2013-8-17 17:00:25 |显示全部楼层
08.16

文章的整体架构和论点的联系方面你肯定比我了解得多,我就不点评了……

例子用得很合适,我修改了一些句子间和细节方面的错误

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