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永远的乌托邦UID: 3412995

再排个队，请点评12.9的作业，多谢！https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... xtra=#pid1776711477(2L)
已经集齐了五个版主的点评了！

oceanflying2013UID: 3486877

可否帮忙修改，谢谢啦！！！

今年夏天换了一个国家生活，开始准备托福考试。没想到国内在家门口就可以考的试，跑到这里需要飞机火车的倒腾。。还是自己家里好。。

很久没有学英文了，上次考托福还是05年呢，623。但这次准备考试，，明显变难了的感觉。

作文和口语都是弱项，考试还剩下一个月，打算每天作一篇作文。希望发上来大家监督。也请大牛们指正！

谢谢啦！



Young people enjoy life more than older people do


It’s widely believed that young people would enjoy life more than older people. Is it really the case?

As we all know that nowadays, young people facing much severe competence than old days. If young people want to have a bright future, they must study hard and work hard. Friends at my age, who had been graduated from university for 9 years, are always working late on working days. In the weekends, they often sleep late to get some energy and go to libraries to so some self-studies. At the same time, many of them are preparing to get married or having a child, to buy their own house is another stress they are facing with. During last 10 years, the house price in China has been roared to a price that without young people can hardly afford.

On the contrary, older people, who had already retired, no need to go to work. They have a lot of time to design their retirement life. I know there is a very famous couple in China who are already 60 years old. They travel around the world for half a year! Though they don’t know much English, still they found ways to communicate with the local people and many interesting things happened. They even published a book about their travel experience.

For older people, their financial status makes them can enjoy more life than young people. Most of the older people already own their own house and no need to worry about the loans or rents. And also they have pensions and a life time savings. They are much richer than young people which makes them can enjoy more delicious food, appreciate art shows and other entertainments.

Finally, after a life time struggle, they experienced a lot of things, good or bad. They can live a much more peaceful life than young people. They won’t have very extreme moods. They don’t easily go depressed or loosing temper.

Based on the above, I think older people can enjoy a better life than young people.

逃逸945UID: 3462816

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永远的乌托邦UID: 3412995

顺便再排个，12.21考前最后一次，望见谅！
求版主修改12.12的作业，多谢！https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... xtra=#pid1776711477（2L）

夜小猫猫UID: 3375749

我也排个队，12月21日考试，https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1690014-2-1.html  作文在25楼。谢谢了，关键是审题方面求指导下，有时候拿到题目不知道应该怎么写

夜小猫猫UID: 3375749

永远的乌托邦 发表于 2013-12-9 14:57
再排个队，请点评12.9的作业，多谢！https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1498929&page=1&ex ...

哈哈，你好好玩，跟集齐七龙珠一样，祝你考试的时候也能大发，我也21号耶，跑去瞄下斑竹们给你改的

永远的乌托邦UID: 3412995

夜小猫猫 发表于 2013-12-10 11:29
哈哈，你好好玩，跟集齐七龙珠一样，祝你考试的时候也能大发，我也21号耶，跑去瞄下斑竹们给你改的

哈哈，同好运！看了你的帖子，求问你口语有提高么？很捉急啊。。。

夜小猫猫UID: 3375749

永远的乌托邦 发表于 2013-12-10 12:03
哈哈，同好运！看了你的帖子，求问你口语有提高么？很捉急啊。。。

我反正就是跟着口语小组做作业，刚开始不怕你笑，一个题目要说20到30分钟才能把点说全啊之类的，要反复说很多遍，做6个题目要花好久的时间，练了一段时间后明显做题时间短了，现在说个3-5遍就可以了，我还会继续练下去，争取以后一遍就能过，还有楼主心态要放轻松，尽自己最大的努力就好了，不求结果，想了也没用，做最好的准备，最坏的打算，加油吧，有什么问题大家可以讨论的，互相学习，你写了这么多作文肯定进步了很多

Haruhi瞳UID: 3483350

排队 新一周
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... xtra=#pid1777700931
12.10独立写作求改~作文在一楼~谢谢斑竹

sodapengUID: 3242849

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-9 18:19
可否帮忙修改，谢谢啦！！！

今年夏天换了一个国家生活，开始准备托福考试。没想到国内在家门口就可以考 ...

不好意思丫 参加3次作文小组才能被修改哦~~
要不先参加下作文小组？

sodapengUID: 3242849

永远的乌托邦 发表于 2013-12-10 00:09
顺便再排个，12.21考前最后一次，望见谅！即日上传。

加油加油！！

oceanflying2013UID: 3486877

sodapeng 发表于 2013-12-11 23:45
不好意思丫 参加3次作文小组才能被修改哦~~
要不先参加下作文小组？

请问那个要怎么参加啊？？

sodapengUID: 3242849

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-12 01:28
请问那个要怎么参加啊？？

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1607631-1-1.html

teenylUID: 3459749

楼主，这个一般多久会有回复呢？
我12月6日排到了，现在木有收到修改好的作文。能够体谅批改作业同学的辛苦，希望能有个期限。非常感谢！

另外为自己的另一篇还没有小伙伴批改的作文排队。
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1618297-1-1.html
麻烦修改，12月10日独立写作

永远的乌托邦UID: 3412995

咳咳，我又来了~（太贪心了。。。）如果周五有人的话就排到下周吧，多谢！
12.19的作业 https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... xtra=#pid1776711477(2L)