2013年10月学习小组"雅思写作互改小组"打卡帖

Nouvel_zfUID：3408042

写完心里十分没底。。。求赐教：）

我在 2013-10-10 17:35完成打卡，是本组当天第7个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

占座！

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L-learner 发表于 2013-10-9 00:18
打卡占座。

仍需加大力度练习小作文，欢迎讨论。建议大家可以下载来看看，参考意见。

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liqlt 发表于 2013-10-9 14:55
这次字数有点多，感觉主体一段写得过于详细了

记得改我的，在180楼..你改我，我改L，L改你

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我在 2013-10-10 15:49完成打卡，是本组当天第6个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

10号不写，12号要上战场了...9号作业完成..

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我在 2013-10-10 15:46完成打卡，是本组当天第5个打卡的组员

先占座

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我在 2013-10-10 12:53完成打卡，是本组当天第4个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

打卡。今天不写。

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谷底你好 发表于 2013-10-9 19:22
有一点点，不过还好，帮你改了啊

不好意思，昨天因为这事那事的没改成作文，今天才改。
你写的真好。。。

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我在 2013-10-10 11:07完成打卡，是本组当天第3个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

来加油~~~争取早日回归小组~~

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我在 2013-10-10 01:00完成打卡，是本组当天第1个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

first time.


也可以多给我改几篇：我也多给你改几篇。谢谢
Some people think students should be allowed to evaluate their teachers’ job
performance. Others believe that will lead to loss of respect and discipline. Discuss and
give your own opinion.
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The given topic is widely existed in the education system. Traditional opinions supported the preservation of teachers’ previlage and the educational regulations. Nevertheless, I strongly supported the convention of evaluation of teachers’ job performance.
I have a handful of reasons to solidify the argument.
First, the roles of educators in schools or universities are extremely very important. For pupils, the[y] received fundamental education and will explore the world with [of] guidance of the teachers. For postgraduates in universities, professors help them to investigate the world scientifically and accurately. Therefore, the influence of teachers is unavoidable. In other words, teachers’ powers are essentially significant in the process of education. Thus, the power should be supervised and restricted. As a result, education evaluation by the students will be one of effected solutions.
Second, as Confucius said, teaching and learning interplayed positively during the education. Then it is easily accepted that students’ evaluation about teachers; lectures, person al characteristics and other things happened in their working performance are necessary, or even indispensable in modern education.
Third, the opposed viewpoints would argue that there might be some seditions against good teachers. For example, students who get low scores in exams, or punished by teachers might plot to take revenge against teachers and slander in the evaluation. My reply to this concern is that , as Chinese saying goes, people should not refrain from dining because of the possibility of choking .  We will not know whether the problems initiate in the evaluations are slandering or teaching misbehaviours. Thus, positive and negative evaluations on teachers are both important . Even if there are unreal or exaggerating evaluations from students, education institutes could investigate and find out the truth.
Fourth, on extension of the third point, I have to mention that the students evaluation belong to the modern democracy and human rights system, which is a useful method to muzzle the hegemony of educators. To put it differently, to cultivate innovative students, it is highly important to affiliate the evaluation system with education.

To conclude, I have to highlight that evaluating teachers’ job performance is totally necessary. With the evaluation, the education quality and students’ human right could be well guaranteed.

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雪国90 发表于 2013-10-8 10:07
占座~~~今天一定早点完成作业

雪国，你改了我8号的作文吗？在120楼哦...

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doris_0213 发表于 2013-10-9 11:46
不好意思，改完了，很认真的看完了，写的非常好，值得我好好学习！
也有一点疑问，你看完后我们可以讨论 ...

我认为你提出的最后一点让我意识到自己写作结构不够清晰，谢谢。以后尽量会把观点分得明确些，这样比较好写。当然，也不是说观点在一段里进行对比是错误的，只是这样需要更强的逻辑。我自认为自己没有把握这个的能力，所以以后会采取观点分清的写法。anyway，谢谢修改~

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miranda包 发表于 2013-10-9 13:37
改得比較狠~~~

別介意哈~

没什么，这样更好，真心

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liqlt 发表于 2013-10-8 15:30
感觉自己有点写偏题了

有一点点，不过还好，帮你改了啊

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252132618 发表于 2013-10-8 22:54
这个是要占座的意思吗？？？我没帮你分组，如果以后要占座就清楚的写占座

好的，麻烦楼主费心了，下次一定注意！

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我在 2013-10-09 18:01完成打卡，是本组当天第8个打卡的组员,获得奖励 寄托币 1

很想学好英语