issue174 我的第5篇issue， 感觉从第三篇起就一样了，大家指点一下吧！

mkathyUID: 149800

issue 174: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, time, and places.

Laws, ever since the coming into being of systematic societies,  have been an indispensable guarantee for its effecuality to enable safety and order for a society. So, as far as the purpose and function of laws are concerned, it seems  indisputable to arrive at the conclusion that laws, if they are supposed to serve the society effectively, should  by all means remain flexible,  growing and developing to best fit the need of the new circumstances, time, and places. But an important and inneglectable point that parallels this idea is that there are certain criteria that will never be altered in the laws, such as justice, disinterest, and equalness.

In the first place, laws, just as any other policy system, should adjust themselves to best fit the  never-ceasing development  of the society for which they serve. There exist many reasons for the justification of this point. Take the Constitution of the United States as an example first. Ever since it was brought to light in 1787, the Federal Constitution, though the main notion remains unaltered, has adopted many amendments, the first one of which occurred as early as in 1891. It has been highly venerated both because it is the main express of the American ideal and because of its success in translating that ideal into practice. Though its value is significant worldwide, it would still be unimaginable if it remained intact for these some 200 years. Even the predecessors, such as Franklin and James Madison who drafted the American Constitution, were wise enough as to allow amendments to the Constitution, how can we insist to be stubborn as not to alter our laws according to the actual circumstances.

Secondly, without flexible laws, a society might struggle to survive but will never thrive. Throughout history, thriving societies may differ in many ways, but they must be alike in one point--that is their opening to flexibility of laws, for  undoubtedly, the doomed destiny for a society with rigid laws will invariably be suffering.  A retrospect on the history of humanity will clearly demonstrate this. For instance, before 1980, the law in China allowed no free development of economy, thus any creative ideas in economic field would be regarded as breaking the law. But China paid for this rigid law system--the price was its  backward position in the
economic world in the world. And later on, the alteration of it in 1980's led to immediate surprising development of its economy. From this living example it is safe to draw the conclusion that flexibility in law system is really essential to the prosperity of a society.

By what is presented above, it is not meant to say that laws should change unconditionally I that there are certain criteria in the laws in any society, wherever they exist, should remain unaltered forever, and even it is not exaggerated to say that they would be a ever-lasting accompany for humanity, such the essence of it to be impartial, to protect its well-being, to punish the evil, and to ensure its safety.     

To sum up, laws, serving as the representation of fairness, right and obligation in a society,   have far-reaching influences on the stability and prosperity of a society, so its flexibility appears not only necessary, but more importantly, essential. Bearing in mind that rigidness will lead to mere backward development, national poverty, inability to compete, and even worse--collapse, a society must timely adjust its laws according to the actual necessity in order to share a chance to remain powerful and competitive.

paisleyUID: 64183

麻烦你看看这个好吗？
https://bbs.gter.net/announcement.php?s=&forumid=23
请按大家约定的规则发文，好吗？多谢！

mingiUID: 152314

issue 174: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. Instead, they should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances, time, and places.

Laws, ever since (the) coming into being of systematic societies, have been an indispensable guarantee for its effecuality (effectuality) to enable safety and order for a society. So, as far as the purpose and function of laws are concerned, it seems indisputable to arrive at the conclusion that laws, if they are supposed to serve the society effectively, should by all means remain flexible, growing and developing to best fit the need of the new circumstances, time, and places. But an important and inneglectable point that parallels this idea is that there are certain criteria that will never be altered in the laws, such as justice, disinterest, and equalness (equality).

In the first place, laws, just as any other policy system (这个词组怎样理解？), should adjust themselves to best fit the never-ceasing development of the society for which they serve. There exist many reasons for the justification of this point. Take the Constitution of the United States as an example first. Ever since it was brought to light in 1787, the Federal Constitution, though the main notion remains unaltered, has adopted many amendments, the first one of which occurred as early as in 1891. It has been highly venerated both because of it is the main express of the American ideal and (because of) its success in translating that/such/certain ideal into practice. Though its value is significant worldwide, it would still be unimaginable if it remained intact for these some 200 years. Even the predecessors, such as Franklin and James Madison who drafted the American Constitution, were wise enough (as) 可以这样加as用吗？to allow amendments to the Constitution, how can we insist to be stubborn as not to alter our laws according to the actual circumstances?

Secondly, without flexible laws, a society might struggle to survive but (will) never thrive(牛). Throughout history, thriving(刚出现，不好再用)blooming/prosperous societies may differ in many ways/from many aspects, but they must be alike in one point--that is their opening to flexibility of laws, for undoubtedly, the doomed destiny for a society with rigid laws will invariably be suffering. (这句话觉得别扭) A retrospect on the history of humanity will clearly demonstrate this. For instance, before 1980, the law in China allowed no free development of economy, thus any creative ideas in economic field would be regarded as breaking the law. But China paid for this rigid law system--the price was its backward position in the
economic world in the world. And later on, the alteration of it in 1980's led to immediate surprising development of its economy (两个it指代不同,混乱) Later in 1980s, an alteration of law system in China resulted in an immediate surprising development of its economy. From this living example it is safe to draw the conclusion that flexibility in law system is really essential to the prosperity of a society. /essential to…… indeed.

By what is presented above, it is not meant to say that laws should change unconditionally I that there are certain criteria in the laws in any society, wherever they exist, should remain unaltered forever, and even it is not exaggerated to say that they would be a ever-lasting accompany for humanity, such the essence of it to be impartial, to protect its well-being, to punish the evil, and to ensure its safety. (这段的大意我看懂了,但是好像比较混乱,不知如何下手改.)

To sum up, laws, serving as the representation of fairness, right and obligation in a society, have far-reaching influences on the stability and prosperity of a society, so its flexibility appears not only necessary, (but) more importantly, but also essential. Bearing in mind that rigidness(rigidity) will lead to (mere) backward development, national poverty, inability to compete, and even worse--collapse, a society must timely adjust its laws according to the actual necessity in order to share/gain a chance to remain powerful and competitive.
我水平有限,又是第一次改,只是凭自己的语感标出觉得有误或者可以改进的地方,有出入的地方大家探讨一下.

文章结构方面，第一段可以指出法律本身即使对于设立时的情况也不可能尽善尽美，美国宪法最初承认奴隶制，第二段说明由于情况的不断出现，更要实时修正。这样给人感觉明朗一些。

我觉得第五篇能够达到这个水平真不简单,作者的功底一定很深厚. 你是在规定时间内完成的吗? 拼写和语法错误基本没有, 句子也都很棒, 这是我望尘莫及的.

mkathyUID: 149800

还有，谢谢你的鼓励， 我从第一篇起就一直是50分钟， 到现在都没有长进，郁闷呀，3月就要考了！
敢问象这样的文章能有几分？

mingiUID: 152314

不敢对分数乱下断言，听说gre.org上有查分软件-score it now，要VISA卡的。正式改卷时的机改也用那个。

我也是三月的，现在感觉不知道如何提高。重点应该放在句型上还是多准备提纲，很头痛。

另外，建议你改改发表主题的格式。

mkathyUID: 149800

谢了！