【独立写作】oceanflying作业贴 20140111

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感冒了一周，考试剩下时间不多，打算每天练一篇，发表上来以监督自己


12.16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school.

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12.18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contests.

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12.19
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In a team, those who do not accept others’ criticism cannot succeed.
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12.20
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform.

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12.22
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Competition between friends always has a negative effect on their friendship.

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12.23
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only study or play and don’t have to do household chores.

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12.24 平安夜，在哼哧哼哧憋作文。。。

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that the whole society today expect young people to follow are too strict.

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13.12.16
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should give school-age children money as a reward for getting a high mark (grade) in school

写了很长时间，例子想不出来。但为了养成习惯，强迫自己写完了。。参考一下其他朋友写的吧。

Nowadays, exam results play an important role in getting into a good high school and university which at the same time draws much more attention from parents than ever before. In order to encourage their children to study hard, parents would give some presents or make promises to realize wishes to them if they get a high mark in school, like buying some books or going to Disney land together. Some parents may even give money according to different score levels to their children as a reward. For me, I think it’s a good idea that killing two birds with one stone.

Firstly, we all know that studying is not easy. There are too many subjects to be learned, bundles of books to be read and countless exams to be taken. Children are under big pressure while studying and may feel tedious or lose patience during the process of studying. Making them keeps the enthusiasm in studying with some gifts when they have done well in exams is very important. Obviously, giving some rewards when they get a high mark is a positive sign which implies working hard will get some harvest in the end. The reward, as a triumph mark will make the children be more interested in study.

We are living in a world which emphasize economic than ever before. It’s a basic rule that should be known well by everyone. Giving money instead of other kinds of gifts to school-age children can help them to get some basic concepts of the money. They can learn how to deal with limited resources – money to satisfy their different aims just as how to deal with the limited time on study and play. I do believe that if they can use money wisely they would also be good at budgeting their time on study. In this way, children may also be able to foster a good money habit which is very essential in modern society when they live independently.

To summarize, giving money as reward to school-age children would cast their interest in study and encourage them study hard and also help them to have a basic concept of money and foster a good money habit from their little age.

teenylUID：3459749

同学，你16号的作业呢？

ヤ.魔ポ☆.UID：3381952

teenyl 发表于 2013-12-17 13:12
同学，你16号的作业呢？

呃。。就在楼上啊

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

12.18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contests.

As our society developed, people’s physical and psychological health has become a heated issue as ever being. Children, who are the hope of our future, are the main group which is asked to do exercise and play sport every day. In order to foster future athletes, some children are even send to compete with other youth athletes. Should children be involved in fierce contest or should they only play sports for fun? For me, it depends on the real situations.

I totally agree that children should play sports for fun. But, it does not mean that they should play sports only for fun. Playing sports, besides for fun, also has many other advantages. Children can get necessary exercises and it will do good to their bodies which are under growing. What’s more, while playing sports with friends, their friendship can be enhanced and also they can get some basic ideas of team –work. Other from get amusement, children can get many other harvest from playing sports.

If the child is a talented athlete that he or she is very interest in sports competition, then why not let the child do it? Not everyone can be a great athlete, why waste the talent others would dreamed of. Some people may concern that the sport competition would be too tough or crucial for little children, but people are very different. For someone it’s pain but for others it can be fun. If the child likes the competition and enjoy it, then why not let him or her do it. There is nothing to lose. As far as I know, many Chinese athletes, who won gold medals in international competition such as Olympics or world championship, are trained from very little. The competition teaches them to face failures and gives them the courage to confront with it. The motto of the world greatest sports competition is faster, higher and stronger which is also much needed in everyone’s personal life. Children who play sports for competition will also learn these sprits.

Someone may argue that children who play sports in competition may have no time for learning knowledge in schools or play with other children. But if it’s the children’s own idea, there is no reason to say no.

As a conclusion, play sports can help children learn a lot of things as well as having fun. Whatever the purpose is, let the children themselves to decide it.

完全没有考虑模板，按照自己的想法写了一篇。不知道写的如何啊。。。

teenylUID：3459749

ヤ.魔ポ☆. 发表于 2013-12-18 00:01
呃。。就在楼上啊

。。。呃。。。可是我昨天留言时候真心没看到。。。

teenylUID：3459749

楼主，我改完啦！

ヤ.魔ポ☆.UID：3381952

teenyl 发表于 2013-12-18 08:30
。。。呃。。。可是我昨天留言时候真心没看到。。。

╮(￣▽￣")╭。。这位同学直接把作文贴上来了你可能就没注意到哈

ヤ.魔ポ☆.UID：3381952

lz以后最好把doc或者docx文件贴在一楼哈，论坛出现大段英文的楼容易被系统自动删除。。

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ヤ.魔ポ☆. 发表于 2013-12-18 11:43
lz以后最好把doc或者docx文件贴在一楼哈，论坛出现大段英文的楼容易被系统自动删除。。

好的。。我因为刚开始用。。不是很熟悉。。想着这样方便点。。

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teenyl 发表于 2013-12-18 09:25
楼主，我改完啦！

谢谢。。但是有和你的帖子一样的问题。。不知道为什么。。我下载不了

可否用你新弄的网盘的方式，你那篇文章我下载了。。。

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

ヤ.魔ポ☆. 发表于 2013-12-18 11:43
lz以后最好把doc或者docx文件贴在一楼哈，论坛出现大段英文的楼容易被系统自动删除。。

呵呵，第一次互改已经相互改好。也已经按照要求添加附件。

麻烦魔术君安排第二次互改哈~~

谢谢啦~~

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

今天折腾了一上午，终于完成了teenyl的修改，也是本人的第一次。。

然后花了更长时间研究怎么上传文件。。不能下载的文件在我忙乱的折腾的时候又突然莫名其妙出现在我眼前，只能说，我是电脑盲啊。。。

这两天慢慢写，貌似有点感觉了。。昨天自己做了官方Guide里面的一篇综合作文，发现还是有很多细节需要弄清楚。语言组织与表达，是一件很艺术的事情，不能完全把它当做考试来对待。

看到论坛里有一位考试作文30分的同学的作文，真的是很让人羡慕。不过那么大的词汇量以及繁复的句式应该不是一朝一夕练成的。还需继续努力。

本来是一个人哼哧哼哧准备，在这里有找到组织的感觉，更好地实现了自我监督。

考完托福不到一个月还有Gmat,不知道是否可行，还好是脱产。

继续加油！

teenylUID：3459749

oceanflying2013 发表于 2013-12-18 17:50
今天折腾了一上午，终于完成了teenyl的修改，也是本人的第一次。。

然后花了更长时间研究怎么上传文件。 ...

http://pan.baidu.com/s/1Cc6fP

木有问题我把修改放到网盘了。加油！

oceanflying2013UID：3486877

想来，把这里作为准备考试的记录用以激励自己也不错，不然总是孤军奋战的感觉。

今天找到了网络上的TPO，早知道我就不背6公斤的考试书跑这么远了。。可以多带多少东西啊。。现在后悔也没用。

前两天做了一篇OG上的综合作文，发现有点没摸清脉络，今天重新看了一下例文，稍微有了点感觉。结果没想到TPO6的听力太难了点，那个encyclopedia,明明是很熟悉的词，却没想起来，听力听了好几遍，最重要的read only以及prejudice都没有听出来。。。真是让人发慌。

OG上的听力做下来，一般都错3-5个，可没想到到综合，难度明显增加。。

这两天先让综合过关，再保持联系独立作文的pace,同时要开始攻克最弱项，口语了。。。

加油！