Issue130 孩子的社会化问题, [请求]

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Issue130
  How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.

To analyze the trend that the world or say the society we growing everyday, it is the irrefragable facts that the educational system of the household and school, even so the socialization, will no doubt determined the direction of the society we live. Some people complain that the current children are incapable to dominate their life——such as the addicted to the PC games and cyber love even say nothing of the occupation the whole society. However, as far as I am concerned, we optimistically aware the new merit exert in the new era children such as honesty, dignity, kindness, cooperation and so on.

In the modern society, children are suffering more pressure than any time in the history. With the fast pace growing rhythm of the society and the more fierce competition no matter in pursuing the further education and the job hunting, the patriarch gradually take emphasis to inculcate their children not only in the fundamental knowledge and technique qualification, but also the principles, such as the probity, morality, which is the intrinsical standard to live in the world and serve the other people.

To the other slant in the same point of view, the capacity of children, in adapting in the world, improved and enhanced. For instance, with the Informational Technology immersed in our daily life, more and more whiz kid come into being, using their talent in their specific way in a early time. With the improvement of the educational system, children could have more opportunity to perform their amazing potential. Such as the Indian cyber hero Tiber, who obtained his two PhD in Computer Science in the Ivy School when he just twenty years old, become increasingly dominated in the Internet and accumulate more fortune in a young age which would be hard to image even ten years ago.

Admittedly, as a matter of fact, the society still suffering some severe fallacies that handicapped the development of children, such as the envy, sloth and the excessive differences in their inborn background of their household. It is no doubt that as long as the existence of the society, the bias and prejudice were inevitable. Notwithstanding, the differences not come from their individual being, the inferior one sometimes become pessimistic, introverted and the self-abasement compare with the others. To my point of view, it will also result in the social problems such as the commit suicide and the assassination that bid defiance to the impartiality possesses solely cutaneous profundity. Although we engage in building a world with justice and opportunity, there still a long way yet to travel.

Certainly, it is hard for us to conclude an agreement in balance the individual interest of children and the future development of the society. To grasp the mainstream destiny of a society, what we should do is to point the flaws out about the current stubborn education encountered, inspire children do what they adulterated love, direct them to be better melted into the society and with a cooperative idealism, make the world more harmonious, in order to assure a superlative degree of next generation.

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Issue130
How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.

To analyze the trend that the world or say the society we growing everyday, it is the irrefragable facts that the educational system of the household and school, even so the socialization, will no doubt determined 可不可以帮我解释一下这个will no doubt determined的结构 我不懂 the direction of the society we live. Some people complain that the current不带用这个修饰children的吧 children are incapable to dominate their life——such as the addicted to the PC games and cyber love even say nothing of the occupation the whole society. However, as far as I am concerned, we optimistically aware of the new merit exert in the new era children such as honesty, dignity, kindness, cooperation and so on.

In the modern society, children are suffering more pressure than they were doing at any time in the history. With the fast pace growing rhythm什么意思啊 不懂咧? of the society and the more fierce competition no matter这个no matter怎么回事?! in pursuing the further education and the job hunting, the patriarch gradually take emphasis to inculcate their children not only in the fundamental knowledge and technique qualification, but also in the principles, such as the probity, morality, which is the intrinsical standard to live in the world and to serve the去了 other people.

To the other slant in the same point of view, the capacity of children, in adapting into the world, improved and enhanced. For instance, with the Informational Technology有必要大写吗?! immersed in our daily life, more and more whiz kids come into being, using their talent in their specific way in aan early time. With the improvement of the educational system, children could have more opportunity to perform their amazing potential. Such as the Indian cyber hero Tiber, who obtained his two PhD in Computer Science in the Ivy School when he 谓语!!!!! just twenty years old, becomes increasingly dominated in the Internet and accumulates more fortune in a young age which would be hard to image even ten years ago.

Admittedly, as a matter of fact, the society still 谓语呢 suffering some severe fallacies that handicapped the development of children, such as the envy, sloth and the excessive differences in their inborn background of their household. It is no doubt that as long as the existence of the society, the bias and prejudice were inevitable. Notwithstanding, the differences not come from their individual being, the inferior one sometimes become pessimistic, introverted and the self-abasement compare with the others. To my point of view, it will also result in the social problems such as the commit这是动词! suicide and the assassination that bid defiance to the impartiality possesses solely cutaneous profundity. Although we engage in building a world with justice and opportunity, there still 又是没有谓语 是对的吗 a long way yet to travel.

Certainly, it is hard for us to conclude an agreement不带这么搭配吧 conclude agreement 第一次听说咧 in balance动词这里就用ing形式 名词后面差一个between 或者是of the individual interest of children and the future development of the society. To grasp the mainstream destiny of a society, what we should do is to point the flaws out about the current stubborn education encountered, inspire children to do what they adulterated love, direct them to be better melted过去式?! into the society and with a cooperative idealism, make the world more harmonious, in order to assure a superlative degree of next generation.
关于逻辑我就有一个问题 你的body3里面 整段连一个child 的词都没有 自己怎么感觉呢?!

PS: 签名档的tales of two cities的话很经典~~

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Thesis有问题，这片issue的重点在于raise children, educate children, 看看你的thesis有没有提到阿?

body1也跟着跑了

body2总是以children为主语，要么就是被动，显然没有强调“we"和教育孩子的关系。

body3 同意猫

结尾看不出来是在总结，引申了很多前文没说的内容。

问题比较多，语法so猫给你指出来了，看样子也不少，放到word里检查了吗？ 加油啊老兄， :)

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even so the socialization, will no doubt determined 可不可以帮我解释一下这个will no doubt determined的结构 我不懂 the direction of the society we live.

这里我想说的就是will determine the direction of the society without question. 这样可以了吗？

Some people complain that the current不带用这个修饰children的吧 children are incapable to dominate their life——such as the addicted to the PC games and cyber love even say nothing of the occupation the whole society.

那用comtemporary呢，当时有点脑热，没想什么更好的了！
其实我第一段的主要观点还是想把重点放在however后面的内容，不过好象点的不够，补充一下怎么利用现在孩子的美德发展社会这个角度，是吗？However, as far as I am concerned, we should also optimistically aware of the new merit exert in the new era children such as honesty, dignity, kindness, cooperation and guild them better used in building a socirty.

In the modern society, children are suffering more pressure than they were doing at any time in the history. With the fast pace growing rhythm什么意思啊 不懂咧? of the society and the more fierce competition no matter这个no matter怎么回事?! in pursuing the further education and the job hunting, the patriarch gradually take emphasis to inculcate their children not only in the fundamental knowledge and technique qualification, but also in the principles, such as the probity, morality, which is the intrinsical standard to live in the world and to serve the去了 other people.

搜了一下google, 应该是with the society growing at a fast pace
这段主要想说家长在raise children的过程中已经做出的努力和孩子所处的一个两难的局面，但这个好象应该放在后面写没能学会建设社会的客观因素中，这里我都混在一起了，实在是不应该！

To the other slant in the same point of view, the capacity of children, in adapting into the world, improved and enhanced. For instance, with the Informational Technology有必要大写吗?! immersed in our daily life, more and more whiz kids come into being, using their talent in their specific way in aan early time. With the improvement of the educational system, children could have more opportunity to perform their amazing potential. Such as the Indian cyber hero Tiber, who obtained his second PhD in Computer Science in the Ivy School when he 谓语!!!!! just twenty years old, becomes increasingly dominated in the Internet and accumulates more fortune in a young age which would be hard to image even ten years ago.
IT大概怎么写都行吧！
谓语的问题我一定注意！
这里想进一步说明一部分孩子，能力很强，已经可以造福于社会了。而其中的一部分可能并不是我们教的，而是自己领悟到的或者是在生活中吸取的等。但是从这个角度说的时候很自然就把children做主语了，那应该怎样写关系呢？

Admittedly, as a matter of fact, the society still 谓语呢 suffering some severe fallacies that handicapped the development of children, such as the envy, sloth and the excessive differences in their inborn background of their household. It is no doubt that as long as the existence of the society, the bias and prejudice were inevitable. Notwithstanding, the differences not come from their individual being, the inferior one sometimes become pessimistic, introverted and the self-abasement compare with the others. To my point of view, it will also result in the social problems such as the commit这是动词! suicide and the assassination that bid defiance to the impartiality possesses solely cutaneous profundity. Although we engage in building a world with justice and opportunity, there still 又是没有谓语 是对的吗 a long way yet to travel.
commit suicide好象是有这样用的，可能是分开的时候commit才当动词。
后面的应该是there still have a long way yet to travel, 这个是照搬W.Bush的Inaugural Address中，对美国225年发展历程的一个小的负评价后的总结。
写作为我们社会在对待孩子上的一些缺陷，和现在的这种社会制度下给孩子带来的弊病，包括产生了一些过激的行为什么的。

Certainly, it is hard for us to conclude an agreement不带这么搭配吧 conclude agreement 第一次听说咧 in balance动词这里就用ing形式 名词后面差一个between 或者是of the individual interest of children and the future development of the society. To grasp the mainstream destiny of a society, what we should do is to point the flaws out about the current stubborn education encountered, inspire children to do what they adulterated love, direct them to be better melted过去式?! into the society and with a cooperative idealism, make the world more harmonious, in order to assure a superlative degree of next generation.
关于逻辑我就有一个问题 你的body3里面 整段连一个child 的词都没有 自己怎么感觉呢?!

conclude an agreement 是我自己编的，字典上的只有draw a protocol的时候才用到，这里的确重要！
melt我想用的是过去分词melten,


这一段结尾好象跑到指责教育体制上去了，可能是当时没词说了！呵呵~~重点应该放在尽管孩子正在努力建设社会，we should also pay more attention on the process on educating  children about how to arise them，比如教孩子的手段和培养他们的自信心上，这样可以了吗？


多谢so猫和pooh的指点，发现有的时候中文和英文的思路有点衔接不上，对结构的把握不是很好！我以后会尽量注意这方面的内容的

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[B][QUOTE]这一段结尾好象跑到指责教育体制上去了，可能是当时没词说了！呵呵~~重点应该放在尽管孩子正在努力建设社会，we should also pay more attention on the process on educating children about how to arise them，比如教孩子的手段和培养他们的自信心上，这样可以了吗？[/B]

还是不对吧 那socialize又跑到哪里去了呢?!

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那立足点应该是什么呢~~冥思呀！~~
那socialize的途径是什么呢？~~