issue84 大家多批,我现在还是要写3个小时:(

mjkUID: 127590

一写就又是3个小时,而且写得还不好,我真得是没办法了^^
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84."In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field."

在任何领域，如果没有受到该领域已有成就的强烈影响， 就不可能在这个领域做出杰出的贡献。

中文提纲：
1，过去的成就是该领域发展的基础
2，过去的成就给现在的研究者激励和经验教训,(自己编了一个例子)
3，但是，不能完全依靠过去的成就，必须要有自己的努力和创新

What is the essential condition for people to make significant contribution in their fields? This is a widespread issue, concerning which some claim that it is impossible for people to attain success and make meaningful contributions if they are not strongly influenced by the achievements of past people in this field. I agree that people must learn from the past achievements which have been the base for further researches, whereas, in my view, people can not neglect endeavors and innovations by themselves.

To begin with, the achievements which have been attained by past people are the absolutely necessary bases of research for people subsequently in the field. The advancements of any field always come into being step by step, and any progress is often made by effort of many people for a long time, even hundreds years. Therefore, any person, whether famous or not, can not independently attain success, and any research must base on the past achievements. To illustrate the point clearly, here is a persuasive example. There exist many nuclear power plants in the world now, and they supply the majority of electric power in many countries such as Japan and France. The development of the new type of power plant owe to Einstein Albert who formed a theoretical base for the exploitation of atomic. And the contribution of Einstein also base on the research of earlier people such as Bohr who won Nobel Prize for investigating atomic structure and radiations. Without the knowledge attained by every progress as the base of study, nobody can make a significant contribution.

Moreover, people can be inspired and learn many experiences from the process of attaining achievements. No only the knowledge but also the experiences, whether inspiring or not, which attained from the past achievements are important for people to have further research. To get the achievements, people often go through a long and treacherous process. The great spirits that people conquer the difficulties which once are regarded as impassable will inspire the people who are in the face of problems. Also, learning from the past achievements, people will not make the same mistakes which at one time lead the researchers astray in the process of study. A doctor in my school who win a national prize often says (and I paraphrase):"It is very important for us researchers to learn from the past successes of others in the field to get the inspirations and experiences which will benefit our study very much."

However, in order to make significant contribution, people must have endeavors and innovations in the study, and it is wrong to only rely on the past achievements. There is an old Chinese sentence- only dawdler will sleep lying on the achievements of others. This means that any person should not only be influenced by past achievements but also be creative and have efforts. Without the innovations, the new progresses which advance the world in its field can not be made, without the efforts, the problems unceasingly arising will not be solved and encumber the study.

To sum up, people must have a right attitude towards past achievements. When people want to have some further researches in the field, it is very important to learn from the past achievements which has been the base of the study and can bring people meaningful inspirations and experiences. Nevertheless, people should have their endeavors and innovations, not only rely on the past achievements. In this way, it is possible for people to make significant contributions, and thus the world will advance ceaselessly.

hxfUID: 155815

What is the essential condition for people to make significant contribution in their fields? This is a widespread issue, concerning which some claim that it is impossible for people to attain success and make meaningful contributions if they are not strongly influenced by the achievements of past people in this field. I agree that people must learn from the past achievements which （好像作主语用that）have been the base for further researches, whereas, in my view, people can not neglect endeavors and innovations by themselves.

To begin with, the achievements which have been attained by past people are the absolutely necessary bases of research for people subsequently(subsequently 是副词，这里用的有问题) in the field. The advancements of any field（复数） always come into being step by step, and any progress（复数） is often made by effort（复数） of many people for a long time, even hundreds（of） years. Therefore, any person, whether famous or not, can not independently attain success, and any research must base on the past achievements. To illustrate the point clearly, here is a persuasive example. There exist(are) many nuclear power plants in the world now, and they supply the majority of electric power in many countries such as Japan and France. The development of the new type of power plant(s) owe to (should be attributed to)Einstein Albert who formed a theoretical base for the exploitation of atomic(atom). And the contribution of Einstein also base on(sb base sth on sth 或者sth be based on sth 这里应该用被动语态) the research of earlier people such as Bohr who won Nobel Prize for investigating atomic structure and radiations. Without the knowledge attained by every progress as the base of study, nobody can make a significant contribution.

Moreover, people can be inspired and learn many experiences from the process of attaining achievements. No only the knowledge but also the experiences, whether inspiring or not, (whether这个插入语有问题)which attained from the past achievements are important for people to have(have 用得不太好，不如用make) further research. To get the achievements, people often go through a long and treacherous process. The great spirits that （by which）people conquer the difficulties which once are regarded as impassable(impossible mission) will inspire the people who are in the face of(in face of) problems. Also, learning from the past achievements, people will not make the same mistakes which at one time lead the researchers astray in the process of study. A doctor in my school who win a national prize often says (and I paraphrase):"It is very important for us researchers to learn from the past successes of others in the field(什么领域？)to get the inspirations and experiences which will benefit our study very much."（这段例子不太好）

However, in order to make significant contribution, people must have endeavors and innovations in the study, and it is wrong to only rely on the past achievements. There is an old Chinese sentence- only dawdler will sleep lying on the achievements of others. This means that any person should not only be influenced by past achievements but also be creative and have（take） efforts. Without the innovations, the new progresses which advance the world in its field can not be made, without the efforts, the problems unceasingly arising will not be solved and encumber the study.

To sum up, people must have a right attitude towards past achievements. When people want to have some further researches in the field, it is very important to learn from the past achievements which has been the base of the study and can bring people meaningful inspirations and experiences. Nevertheless, people should have their endeavors and innovations, not only rely on the past achievements. In this way, it is possible for people to make significant contributions, and thus the world will advance ceaselessly.
结构不错，提出的分论点很合理。但论证深度不够，缺乏有说服力的例子。有些句子需要斟酌。

mjkUID: 127590

万分感谢楼上的兄弟！！！

mjkUID: 127590

我现在确实就是在论证有力上太欠缺了
大家的方法和体会是什么啊？？？？
谢谢指教！！！