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发表于 2014-3-7 21:58:06 来自手机 |只看该作者

实在抱歉，今天有事，只能用手机帮你改作文了……排版无力，望见谅
（总的来说，似乎忘记everyday了，虽然托福不要求那么苛刻的扣题，但还是说一下everyday比较合适）
Judged from my past experience, I think that teacher should assign homework for students because homework can help students apply what they had learned to solve real-world problems. Besides, homework also provides students opportunities to practice their interpersonal skills which are important for their future. My detailed reasons are listed below.

First, the target of our education is to make students able to use theories and conecpets to solve the real world problems. Homework is a good practice for students to reach the target. Things we learn from our classes are concepts and theories. And we need a chance to find out whether we can use those concepts and theories to solve real-world problems. Through doing homework, our ability of solving real world probelm is tested. For example, as a MBA student, the content of my problem set are from many real-world cases. Each time I do a homework, I try to use my knowledge to solve those cases. Thus I practiced my ability to solve real-world problems.（例子可以再细化一些，比如老师布置一个什么实例让我们分析） Without homework, I will never have chance to practice and in the long run, （这里需要连词，要不这句话看起来很突兀）I failed to reach the target of education.

Second, homework also provides students a chance to practice their interpersonal skills, which are very important for their future. （感觉和首段一样啊……换一个句型嘛）Some kinds of homework, such as group project, requires students to work together to solve problems. This homework needs all the students to work together, communicate among （with）other groupmates to know their thoughts and finally reach an agreement. They may meet conflict and quarral during the process, then students need to use interpersonal skills to settle disrupts and unite people together to complete the homework. I had worked for 2 years since I graduate and things I meet during completing my company's group project are just as the same as what I met when I was doing group projects with my undergraduate classmates. （可以细化一下在college的group，可能比work experience更有说服力）Thanks to those group homeworks, I did my job well.
In sum, I think it is necessary for teachers to assign daily homework to students. Because homework helps student to reach the target of education, and provide （s）them a chance to practice their interpersonal skill which is important for their future.

文章结构很严谨，不过firstsecond似乎太严肃了，可以换一换什么moreover，another之类的。再次抱歉爪机无力……

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