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fanghuaUID: 157619

i want to take part in  CET4  this year.
from now on,  i will paractise one exercise every day.
hope you everone here can helpe me.
thank you!

Good heath (100 words)
1．        身体健康的重要性。
2．保持健康的途径。
3．我自己的实践。

Good Health
It is important that we have a good health. If you were ill, first, you would feel very bad. Second, your work or jobs would been affected, furthermore, your life would be threaten.
Last year, when SARS was coming, we could do nothing but keep good healthful habits. Open the windows, wash our hands, avoid going to the public, take necessary exercises, keep away the from wild animals. But whether we ask ourselves the reason why SARS that hardly happens for a hundred year bursted into. Of course, the bird cold, recently. As we known, that is we destroyed the ecosystem.
If fact, I am not very strong since I was born, so, my mother asks me to canter every morning. When I get up , the first thing I must do is open my windows, wash my teeth and face, then eat my breakfast on schedule. I need wash my hands before eating. So, I have a good health, now. Hope everyone ,too.

chicagochenUID: 116575

Good Health
It is important that we have a good health. If you were ill, first, you would feel very bad. Second, your work or jobs would been affected, furthermore, your life would be threaten.
modification: [it is of great importance to keep good health because we would suffer bad feeling, affect our normal job or even threaten our life if our health turn against us.]

Last year, when SARS was coming [overwhelmed the whole world], we could do nothing but keep good healthful [healthy] habits. [+i.e.]Open the windows, wash our hands, avoid going to the public[:this is not a habit, take necessary exercises, keep away the from wild animals!]. But whether we ask ourselves the reason why SARS that hardly happens for a hundred year bursted into[came about]. Of course, the bird cold[the same with aviation flu], recently. As we known[know], that is we destroyed the ecosystem.[this point has nothing to do with your topic; what you should cite as an example is one that illustrate why good health is important and what is the result of bad health]
If fact[In fact], I am[was] not very strong since[when] I was born, so, my mother asks me to canter every morniing. When I get up , the first thing I must do is [to]open my windows, wash my teeth and face, then eat my breakfast on schedule. I need wash my hands before eating. So, I have a good health, now. Hope everyone ,too.


suggestion: Even for attending CET4, you would have to read more sample articles; and you are not writing an convincing issue but let your pen go as your thinking change.
p.s: do i know you?

fanghuaUID: 157619

Passage　1.　ADVERTISEMENTS　

Direction:　You are required to write a composition in no less 100 words about "ADVERTISEMENTS".　You are adivised to arrange your idea in three paragraphs with key words for　each paragraph given.

The following are the key words and expressions you may use in your composition: advertise, depent on, consumer, manufacturer, salesman, product, to some extent, success, failure;　different, newspaper, TV, radio, billboard, agency, service; however, truthful, misrepresent,　exaggerate, benefit, fall victim, satisfied.


Advertisements
When you were passing by train one deserted place, you suddenly discovered a billboard of Coca Cola. You should impress deeply. Yes, it is the importance of advertisements and it also is a successful one.
Recently, if some manufacturer or salesman wants to launch his new products, at first, he considers to advertise to introduce to the consumers all around the world .When we watch the teleplays, we are bound to meet ads. We can meet ads in the newspapers, too. If you listen music by radio, you can also do. They assure that they have faithful agency and good service. However, it is truthful that they misrepresent to exaggerate their functions.
Of course, ad has become a part of our life. As manufacturers , hope to benefit via ads, but as consumers, hope to but good and cheap things by ads.

fanghuaUID: 157619

thx for your help, chicago.

I will take your advice to  recite  smaples , but also i want to  practise my writing.  

from now on,  i try to write one , hope you can help me modify them.

thank you!

I think you two don't know me as I don't.  hope you have a good day!

chicagochenUID: 116575

it is good to practice.so carry on!
i will have to help modify your article later.

fanghuaUID: 157619

Part V                   Writing              (30 minutes)
Directions:  For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write an eye-witness account of a traffic accident. You should write at least 120 words according to the outline given below in Chinese:
假设你在某日某时某地目击一起车祸，就此写一份见证书。见证书须包括以下几点：
1．  车祸发生的时间及地点
2．  你所见到的车祸情况
3．  你对车祸原因的分析

It’s bout five o’clock PM when I was on my way home, in the Renming Road, nearby Hua Di Square.
When I wanted to cross the road, the light became yellow, so I stopped to wait, but some people still are passing straight to the opposite, furthermore, the other traffics allowed to move was starting to. Soon, the night became red, one person injured run to the opposite, the red car had to stop, then the white and blue car kissed the former one. Worse, the passerby want to return then was run down by the NO 1 bus.
I think the passerby need to be charged with the most responsibilities, and may she was scared by the current conditions and don’t know what to do. Meanwhile the white and blue one need keep away from the others for some more distance.

chicagochenUID: 116575

Advertisements
When you were passing by train one deserted place, you suddenly discovered a billboard of Coca Cola. You should impress deeply.

modification:When passing a deserted place by train,you may suddenly see a billboard of Coke Cola which surely would impress you much.

Yes, it is the importance of advertisements and it also is a successful one.

modificaition: This is a simple example how could a successful advertisement can attract his customers.

Recently, if some manufacturer or salesman wants to launch his new products, at first, he [would consider] considers to [consult advertising] advertise to introduce [it] to the consumers all around the world .When we watch the teleplays, we are bound to meet ads. We can meet ads in the newspapers, too. If you listen music by radio, you can also do[encounster many]. They assure that they have faithful agency and good service. However, it is truthful [it is true that] that they misrepresent to exaggerate their[their  product's]  functions[sometimes].
Of course, ad has become a part of our life. As [deletete as] manufacturers may hope to benefit via[from] ads, but consumers would hope to but[look forward to]  good and cheap things by ads.

fanghuaUID: 157619

hello, chicago.

according to  the requiremet of the article, "truthful" must be used in it.  May modify that?

" ...They are not so truthful, however, they misrepresent to exaggerate their product’s functions, sometimes."

chicagochenUID: 116575

yes. you will have to use truthful but it is not right to say "it is truthful that..."
it is ok to say"They are not so truthful..." here they represents the ads.

fanghuaUID: 157619

Directions: In this section you are required to write a letter in reply to a friend’s inquiry about applying for admission to your college or university. You should write at least 120 words and base your composition on the outline given in Chinese below:
1．建议报考的专业及理由；
2．报考该专业的基本条件；
3．应当如何备考。


A Letter of Reply to a Friend
December 27, 2003
Dear
I am glad to receive your letter, thank you for your regards.

In your letters, you asked which profession would you apply in my university. I think the account and computer are very good. The account is one of the best specialties here. We are famous for it. We have many wonderful professors and I will apply for it. As you known, the other one is pop, this year, many teachers who master  computer come to our school and buy many the newer computers and instruments.
If you want to enter yourself for the examination, you should fill in the requisition which I have been send together with my letter and hand in * dollars for the examinations. You should take part in the four courses tests, including Chinese, English, math, and one professional course. Oh, I will tell you a good news, you needn’t take the English test, because you have passed CET4.


Then you just prepare for three courses, if possible, you can come to my school very weekend, we have the trains for the test by our teachers. It is very useful for yours. Of course, please tell me which one will you apply as soon as possible so that I can send some materials which our teachers prepare for us.
Hope you everything goes well.

Faithfully, Judy

fanghuaUID: 157619

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes t o write a composition on the topic My View on Fake Commodities. You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1. 假冒伪劣商品的危害
2. 怎样杜绝假冒伪劣商品
My view on Fake Commodities
Every day, many tragedies happen because of the fake commodities around us. bought chicken injected water, bought a dalmatian just printed and bought a pair of famous shoes leather which were worn two hours. ect.
If the patients take the phony medicine, they not only can’t been cured, instead, maybe suffer the threat of death. If someone has bought a fake car, I don’t know how does he feel when he wants to brake the car but the brake seizes up. If someone takes his fake education certification to apply the manager of a company and he is hired, what will happen the company soon. How dangerous the fake commodities!
That the fake commodities are full of the market suggests our economic order should be rectified more. We should set up the relative laws and regulations. So, there must be laws to go by, the laws must be observed and strictly enforced, and lawbreakers must be prosecuted. The mass must accuse positively and rise the sense of cracking down the fake products, the State Bureau of Quality and Technical Supervision and the Industrial and commercial Bureau take useful measures to block it in the bud.

fanghuaUID: 157619

Haste Makes Waste
We all hope what we do will finish as well as quickly. Some things may be, but the others can’t. If there is no enough time left or suitable condition, we can’t complete successfully. If we break the natural rules, me must get halt the result with twice effort or even be beaten.
As we know, learning English is a long run in the countries where our mother language is not English. There are many training institutions which claim that everyone entered will master English in three moths. If we would get the result three moths later, but then whether will we assure that we can really master it? The answer is no. If we won’t persist in study and practice as often as possible, we will forget them as before we don’t train. But we have cost much money. in our childhood, we had hear the proverb of “ Spoil Things by Excessive Enthusiasm”. It does tell us haste makes waste.

fanghuaUID: 157619

Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes t o write a composition on the topic Haste Makes Waste. You should write at least 120 words and you should base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1. 为什么说"欲速则不达"。
2. 试举例说明。

fanghuaUID: 157619

首先谢谢版主能帮我批! 非常感谢!

有人说过,关于四级作文, 写的人自我感觉良好,看的人不知所云. 一看您批了后的作文, 我才真正体会到. 所以非常感激版主能在百忙中帮我批作文.

其次, 我有一个小小请求, 能不能对所批文章, 谈一下我需要改进地方, 这样使我明确,我应该在哪里下功夫, 这样做的话,我觉得会事半功倍.

我会努力提高自己的作文水平,也请版主多多照应.

谢谢版主!

祝版主工作顺利,学习进步,身体健康`````````````(溜须拍马之嫌???!!!!!!)