[独立写作]小馒头的作业贴

AnnaCrystalUID: 3340877

2011年1月8日
题目是：In the past people ate food that was better for their health than people today.

我写的：（麻烦大虾挑错修改～～～）
It can’t be denied that people nowadays are burdened with health problems that they won’t experience in the past. These problems, especially as obesity and high blood pressure, are mainly caused by their eating habits, and it’s reasonable for us to believe that the food people ate in the past are healthier than people do today. It’s understandable that some may hold the opposite opinion and argue that today we have much advancer hygienic system, however, healthy food are not necessarily the result of food safety.   
First of all, in the modern society, people tend to eat fast food rather than normal meals that people do in past may have. This phenomenon resulted from the fast-paced life of people nowadays, but it leads to their obesity as well. Take my lawyer friend as an example, a Hamburg bought from McDonald’s are what he always has as a meal, since time is precious to them as lawyers are charged by hours. It was not last long that before I heard from his infortune to be send to hospital as a result of stomachache and when I visited him, he turned out to be a big fat.

Secondly, the dietary structure now consists of much more meat than it did in the past due to the improvement of people’s life quality. It’s true that people are much more affluent and can afford to buy luxurious food, but what we should keep clear is that the more money we spend on food doesn’t mean the healthier we gain become. It’s evident by doctors’ research on the disease caused by over-nutrition, which indicates that eating too much meat and fish will lead to diseases like podagra and sugar diabetes.  
Even though the foods we eat today are entitled with higher quality and hygienic standard, owing to the economy and technologies development, however, the benefits it brings are largely eliminated by people’s eating preference as well as their dietary structure we mentioned above. Comparing the health condition of the people in the past and the people nowadays, the conclusion is obvious, that is the people’s subjective initiatives are the more important factor determines the people’s health.
The conclusion, which is quite obvious, is that the people’s subjective initiatives are the more important factor determining the people’s health. That is to say, never should we attend to trifles and neglect the essentials.

In conclusion, people now have food that is worse for their health when compared  in comparison with the food in the past. Not only for their eating preference have changed, but also for their improper eating structure as well. We shall never attend to trifles and neglect the essentials, that is in other words , eat a lot of expensive foods blindly without thinking what we really need for health.

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