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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-28 10:39
19) Governments should focus on solving the immediate problems of today rather than on trying to ...

思路好棒!赞!!!

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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-2-23 16:03
issue部分的excel在此。抱歉这里面没有太多原创内容,我犹豫了一阵子到底要不要上传,怕玷污了大家的眼。思 ...

谢谢分享啊!!!我7-10号考试只考了个3,因为没有系统准备后悔不已!但是这几天准备看5.5和拯救,也发现没多大收获。这下子终于找到宝藏啦!!!特别感谢!!

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-8-16 23:43
几个假设不是主要问题
关键是要梳理好原题中的逻辑链 找到切入点 然后分成3部分来讨论 这3部分里可能会 ...

谢谢老师。开始看作文了,通过看您的帖子,肯定对我的作文有帮助。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-1-9 10:50
Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study ...

老师我第一次写Issue的提纲,先写了一个版本的, 然后看了您的范文, 觉得自己的提纲条理不够清晰, 内容也很空泛, 所以重写了一遍。 因为我跟您的观点不一样,您的是赞成的, 我的是反对的, 所以希望老师能看一下我的论点论据有没有跑题。
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老师您好,给您点个赞。感谢有这么好的经验分享。
我今年三月第一次考了GRE,v157 q167, aw3. 典型的三分党,其实也是当时时间都拿去背单词了,作文只是靠感觉准备了些提纲。但是后面看了您的帖子之后觉得肯定是不切题了。
上月的托福作文得了29,那次准备和自我批改感觉积累了很多经验。我这月29号会再考GRE,时间紧迫,秉承您说的天下文章一大抄,很想知道您有没有整合的您的范文资料,因为现在的issue和argu都分散在各个楼层...我习惯打印出来看所以如果您有整合的资料能否下载呢?
非常感谢!

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guanjingyu 发表于 2015-8-18 22:38
老师您好,给您点个赞。感谢有这么好的经验分享。
我今年三月第一次考了GRE,v157 q167, aw3. 典型的三分党 ...

暂时没有整合的版本 博客二楼有链接到目录 列出范文及提纲的楼层 目前只能靠手动整理了

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-5-3 09:50
好久没更新了  
互改平台估计短期内很难实现 略感失望 不过还是会坚持在这里做辅导  


老师 我写了一篇 argument

不知道能否让你指点一二呢


In any profession—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.  


Authorities and leadership can be quite significant in any institutions since they are in charge to make decisions that would have profound influence in their areas. Every institution has their own rules on how long should be the appropriate tenure for their leader. If the tenure is too short, the leader may not have enough time to do reform or make any progress. However, if the tenure is unlimited, it would also lead to autocracy which can basically block the corporate ladder. I think the reappointment after every five years can be beneficial for the professions such as politics and government. However, five-year tenure may not be enough for business and education since both of them require long-term and constant devotion.

Firstly, government officials and political leaders should be reelected after every five years. If given them unlimited tenure, government officials who should serve the society as public servant would possibly corrupt and harm the public interest. To illustrate this, since tenure for officials in China last more than 20 years, official become so obsessed with power and there are more than 20 reported corruption cases in China not to mention the unreported ones. If the tenure limit to five years, the officials would be inspired to do more reform in order to be elected again in five years. Additionally, political leaders should be required to resign after five years since they are so powerful that they may easily become autocratic which would lead to unwise decision making.  For example, Mao Zedong, the first Chairman of People’s Republic of China became dictator due to the unlimited tenure and made a lot of serious mistakes such as Cultural Revolution and Anti-Right Wings Movement which were significant harmful for the civilians.

Secondly, business leaders should not resign after five year since five-year-tenure would be insufficient for a business to develop.  Starting a business can be quite time-consuming and frequent change in business leadership can lead the whole corporation into perplexity. For instance, Steve Jobs worked as the CEO of Apple for over 15 years, during this period, he made a series farsighted and unified decisions including developing MAC operation system, developing iPad and so on. Apple’s success is originated from Job’s consistent leadership and cannot be achieved by a series of leaders even if every one of them could be as brilliant as Job is.

Moreover, it is unwise to require a principle to step down from the leadership after every five years because developing a school especially a university requires a long-term devotion, in some cases, even life time. To illustrate this, developing a university involves not only hiring staff members and recruiting students, but also building a brand name. Shenzhen University, which starts only 20 years ago, takes over 10 years to make itself known. If the principle of Shenzhen University is asked to be reappointed every 5 years as other profession do, their developing plan might be significantly interrupt.
In general, some professions should apply five-year tenure such as politics and government officials. However, it is not suitable for all the professions. Education and business may demand a longer tenure.
  

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-21 00:11
80) Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizen ...

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-16 23:19
今天开了小组帖讨论issue 74
74) Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important dec ...

题133中,结论和74一样,原因是:未来比过去更复杂。 那么可以完全按74的论据来写吗?  就是中心段的3个段落都是讲‘结论是错的’(如您74的三个中心段),而 不写原因如何对或错。

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supersam 发表于 2015-8-20 07:53
题133中,结论和74一样,原因是:未来比过去更复杂。 那么可以完全按74的论据来写吗?  就是中心段的3个段 ...

这里需要根据reason-claim的题型来调整
你可以指出reason是不对的 因为尽管细节可能更复杂 但是背后的原理是相似的  因此可以通过过去事件反映的规律来预测将来的事情 这个可以在中间第一段专门写 也可以在中间三段的例子里解释

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-10-24 18:52
GRE写作题库的issue部分149道真题有6种写作要求,包括是否同意命题及不同情况下是否正确(54题), ...

谢谢楼主,帮我了解到一些GRE写作的思路,希望在考前能把楼主的帖子看完:lol

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