GRE作文6分教学博客

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渣渣3.5，但是必须来感谢六分博客！！！就看了三个半天整理了一下argument不同题型，没想到有3.5！下次好好准备！再接再厉加油！

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带着症状去生活 发表于 2015-11-25 19:37
渣渣3.5，但是必须来感谢六分博客！！！就看了三个半天整理了一下argument不同题型，没想到有3.5！下次好好 ...

恭喜！

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sabayon12345 发表于 2015-11-25 14:19
第一次练习~按照老师的分类法写的，求老师指导~谢谢！
ISSUE 15. Educational institutions should active ...

promote the study for well-paid jobs, 这个同意转换做得不到位啊 原题意思没体现出来
who longing for 语法错误

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-11-25 22:54
promote the study for well-paid jobs, 这个同意转换做得不到位啊 原题意思没体现出来
who longing for ...

好的！因为当时想不到合适的同义词来代替，还想请问一下这个文章结构和想法还可以吗？谢谢老师指点~

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竟然被刷屏了 没时间人工删帖 先把自己的帖子顶起来再说

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看了王老师的博客真的收获很多！~
第一次写argument 希望王老师能指导一下~ 谢谢您！

Argument 7
The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

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According to the argument, the Board of Directors of Monarch Books recommends that it is necessary to open a cafe in the bookstore. To justify the argument, several reasons have been listed. On the one hand, since the bookstore has a considerable customer base, it would attract more customers by opening a cafe. On the other hand, considering the most recent national census which manifests a decline in the percentage of population of children, the space for children's book section could be saved for the new cafe. What's more, it could possibly be an advantage in the competition with Regal Books with the help of the new cafe. However, we need to ask a number of questions related to the different aspects of the arguments to evaluate the soundness of the recommendation.

Firstly, investigation should be conducted to figure out why people have affection for Monarch Books. It is beyond doubt that Monarch Books has earned a wide customer base by its broad selection of books on all subjects. It is possible that some customers may also enjoy the cafe with pleasure. However, a number of customers may become disgusted of new cafe since it brings about the dirty and noisy environment caused by food and drinks. Thus, they wouldn't come to Monarch Books again for it cannot provide a peaceful and pleasant reading atmosphere. If so, the recommendation for opening a new cafe could make the bookstore suffer a loss of customers.

Secondly, the actual number of customers in terms of different ages should be investigated thoroughly. Although the result of the most recent national census shows a decrease in the percent of population of young children, it doesn't mean the actual number of children has declined. For example, in recent years, the population of the whole city is increasing at a noticeable speed. Therefore, the number of children indeed increases instead of falling as the recommendation postulates. In this way, the recommendation may not seem that reasonable.

Finally, it is essential to inquire into the factors which make Regal Books more popular in order to gain advantages in the competition. It sounds plausible that it is the opening of a new cafe that attracts more customers for Regal Books. Yet, perhaps other factors may contribute to this success. For instance, Regal Books may make adjustments in the layout of the bookstore to provide a more comfortable reading environment. Or perhaps, the manager of the Regal Books have require the staff to participate in training courses to be more polite and efficient in the service. Without figuring out real reasons for the success of Regal Books, it is not wise to open a new cafe to attract more customers.

To sum up, the recommendation of opening a new cafe is not as reasonable as it seems. Several questions should be answered in regard to the reasons why people prefer Monarch Books, the actual number of customers in different ages and the factors promote the success of Regal Books. Having   conduct all this investigations, Monarch Books could be likely to attract more customers.

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苏去疾 发表于 2015-11-28 22:05
看了王老师的博客真的收获很多！~
第一次写argument 希望王老师能指导一下~ 谢谢您！

开头段太长了  这样你的时间可能不够

may become disgusted of new cafe since it brings about the dirty and noisy environment caused by food and drinks  
不要用天朝二三线城市的眼光看问题

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-2-24 16:13
好久没写了  
从issue 第一道开始

看了老师的作文真是叹为观止啊，再也不是那些用烂了的的例子，要坚持向老师学习！目标4.5+

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低调的来报道

没有辣椒不能活的粑粑草UID: 3653121

最近看了老师的博客和范文，再看作文书会有种他们在胡说什么的感觉。。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-11-30 07:33
开头段太长了  这样你的时间可能不够

may become disgusted of new cafe since it brings about the  ...

好的 谢谢王老师的指导~

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没有辣椒不能活的粑粑草 发表于 2015-11-30 17:21
最近看了老师的博客和范文，再看作文书会有种他们在胡说什么的感觉。。

我觉得工具箱是最大的忽悠 里面的内容跟题目一点关联都没有 把书整的厚厚的 骗钱！

tesolchinaUID: 2191404

今天有一位版友微信告诉我她拿了3.5
我觉得这个同学issue其实写的不理想，能拿到3.5，估计还是argument表现不错。可能在短时间内投入argument见效会比较快吧。
最近在考虑出版作文书的事情，出版社在无法保证销量的情况下需要作者自己出资大约30K。我打算先将完整的书稿以帖子的形式放在寄托论坛上，如果大家觉得有必要印出来的话，或许可以由寄托出面做众筹。其实，我对于正式出版虽然也有些向往，但绝不会为这个自己出钱的。正式出版的好处有两点：
一可以让寄托之外的同学学习我的材料；二印成纸质书看起来方便、不伤眼。所以，最终能否出版纸质书还是要由市场决定。

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看楼主的文章一礼拜了, 后悔没有早点看到, 我12月6号就考试了.
没有生词, 没有高级句型, 但是非常透彻. 感觉是可以企及的好文.
再次谢谢楼主.

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riaqn 发表于 2015-12-1 16:50
看楼主的文章一礼拜了, 后悔没有早点看到, 我12月6号就考试了.
没有生词, 没有高级句型, 但是非常透彻. 感 ...

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