GRE作文6分教学博客

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第一次写，求点评:hug:

  It is my personal conviction that educational institutions should not interfere students' choice on fields of study although these institutions are in hope of preparing students for lucrative career. Because on one hand,  giving freedom to students will benefit both the schools and students themselves. On the other hand, educational institutions may not correctly predict the trend of career development and every field can be lucrative by time.
  It is a truth of prevalent recognition that people especially students should be responsible for themselves especially when it  is decision-make time. For students, getting knowledge of finding their own interest and listening to  their mind means grown up. They need to learn to make choices for their own instead of always following other's guide, which is an act of escape. What they can obtain from school is not only the knowledge from the textbook, but also the spirit of an independent and complete person. Therefore, in hope of helping student develop in a better way, educational institution should not interfere students in choosing field of study.
  Another indispensable part of my argument is that encourage students to choose more profitable field of study may do harm to school in return. Common sense informs us that people will blame others on their misleading of choice-making. If a student take his school's advise to choose one study field he doesn't like or isn't good at. It is possible he won't reach some achievements a few years later, for which he may regret believing his school. As a push of the whole things, schools must take part of the responsibility. Those compliant from students will surely jeopardize the fame of schools.
  Admittedly, there is some true element in holding that more students influx into so-called promising field will move on the whole society's development. Conversely, to the extend of my observation, to say that lucrative field of study will benefit the whole society is logically unjustifiable. Nowadays, with the pace of the development is enhancing, every subject was considered more and more indispensible. People who are committed to some tiny and even non-mainstream area could succeed, So every field could make contribution to the whole society. To limit the scope is meaningless and even harmful to a balanced development of the society.
  In the final analysis, I firmly believe that educational institutions should not encourage students to choose  their fields of study.

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-3-6 23:38
5) The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
On Balmer Island, ...

膜拜！

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刚下载仔细看了前几页，感觉老师的课件很好，一开始就直接实例来教大家写作方式，比抽象讲概念实用的多。谢谢王老师

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请问想找老师帮批练习应该发到哪里呢

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-12-12 16:40
Argument 114 116 117

The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribu ...

您好，gay marriage在语气上还是有歧视的意味，用same-sex marriage更好一些。

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tesolchina 发表于 2015-1-7 22:26
28 The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, arti ...

老师，您举的北欧国家的例子不太合适，因为北欧国家福利高的原因更多是因为税收高，社会财富再分配的力度大。

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作文终于从3分到4分了，非常感谢王老师！因为自己不是大神级别的，所以只能下苦功夫：我把王老师issue和argument每一道题都过了一遍，先自己思考，然后再看老师的解析和提纲，最后自己整理提纲。虽然这样花了不少时间，但是感觉很值得。一方面，确实感觉自己的反应变快了（我是慢性子的人，打字思考都很慢。。。），语言的运用也更加灵活了；另一方面，分数也有了提高。再次感谢王老师，小伙伴们加油！： ）

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细胞皮 发表于 2018-10-21 11:12
您好，gay marriage在语气上还是有歧视的意味，用same-sex marriage更好一些。

哪一篇？ 我回头改一下 谢谢

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tesolchina 发表于 2014-11-2 22:44
在点评版友的提纲过程中发现经常有例子不切题的情况，这种情况会导致整篇文章的偏题，是需要避免的。为什么 ...

之前一直在考虑要怎么使用例子的事情，老师这个帮大忙了。

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guoguo100011 发表于 2015-2-23 16:03
issue部分的excel在此。抱歉这里面没有太多原创内容，我犹豫了一阵子到底要不要上传，怕玷污了大家的眼。思 ...

感谢分享

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顶！！

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感谢分享！！！

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感谢楼主

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王老师您好，我认真学习了您的issue和argument思路，感觉自己在行文的时候思路开阔了，下笔有东西可写，十分感谢！而针对argument部分，有个疑问，想和您交流探讨一下：

您提出新G的要求更多的不是去攻击argument的逻辑谬误，而是通过更多的解释增强/削弱作者的观点。那么想问一下您对于argument中出现的逻辑关系不明确时，是不怎么需要花时间、篇幅去讨论了吗？因为考场时间确实也比较有限。有两个例子：

Argument 6. "... the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea."作者认为deer的减少和global warming trends是符合的，因此两者有关联性。但是我觉得这不符合逻辑，如果GW是长期以来就有的现象，而最近才导致鹿的数量降低，产生矛盾。

Argument 7. "Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. "作者提议取代儿童书籍的区域来建新的cafe，因为全国的儿童数量比例在减少。我觉得作者对这个national census的分析有误，比例不能代表总数，有可能全国人口上涨，而儿童增速较低，导致了比例低，但是儿童总数也有可能是增多的。

以上两个例子中，作者通过论据推断论点的过程中，都出现了问题。那么在写作中是否需要把它们分析出来呢？因为这个过程其实是对argument的逻辑谬误的攻击。

非常感谢！



For reference:

6. Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

7. The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.
"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

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感谢王老师的分享。