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Issue241  第1篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧！
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作者：寄托家园作文版普通用户     共用时间：45分4秒     572 words
从2004年3月1日16时12分到2004年3月1日16时45分
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An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time.
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  There are many notable figures and great persons in history to whom both their contemporaries and later time people have an appraisement. Sometimes these appraisements conicide with each other, sometimes they differ greatly and even are contradictory and totally disparate. In my opinion, the later people's evaluation of historic figures has usually proved to be comprehensive and all-round, while the evaluation of their contemporaries is usually partial and incomplete.

  An individual's greatness in his comtemporary's eyes are always incomplete for several reasons. First of all,  an individual attracting much attention is sure to be influential or powerful in certain aspects which render them the ability to influence people's minds and opinions. Therefore, the judgment of their contemporary is more or less affected by his power of influence in their society. People will not be able to see clearly or does not have the courage to disclose the dark side of the individual and hence make an impartial evaluation of him. Otherwise, the individual's power and social influence will exert pressure on those who discolse his negative side and may jeopardize the disclosers. It is also possible that the fame and greatness of the individual has overshadowed his otherwise ugly side which people fail to discover, in fact, sometimes people are unwilling to reveal these unhappy matters to the public for the society has accepted the hero or heroine as an positive figure. Alternation of the individual's profile will render society as a whole the feeling of being cheated. Hence,  contemporary people's evaluation a historic figure is always not complete and unjustified, and sometimes, even misleading.

  In contrast to their contemporary's evalutaion, people in a later time will not have the psychological or practical burden to truely assess an individual's greatness. They will have much more freedom to better evaluate the individual from different aspects. One case in point is the evaluation of the founder of People's Republic of China-Chairman Mao. Mao is absolutely a great person in that he led the Chinese people for eight years in defending their country against Japanese invasion and won the fianl victory. He is deified after the founding of PRC due to the great contributions he made to Chinese revolution. However, in 1966, Mao lauched an unprecedented Cultural Revolution, which lasted for 10 years and many innocent people died during this ruthless social chaotic period. This fault was not pointed out until 1978 when China decided to adopt open-up policy to develop its industry and economy. It was due to historical reasons and people's mindset at that time that prevent the recognition and publicity of Mao's serious defect in internal policy. Now Chines people can have a comprehensive and impartial  judgment toward this historic figure that has changed Chinese fate and history.

  Overall, the greatness of an individual cannot be easily judged because of historical reasons and social mindset. As an old saying goes: time is the touchstone of any beliefs. With the collapse of time, the hidden facts of an individual unknown to people of their times will gradually come out of sea and it provide a solid basis for later people to have a complete understanding of the individual.

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轰吗密码密洪。。。。。还没人看呀？晕了

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Issue 241------题目------
An individual's greatness cannot be judged objectively by his or her contemporaries; the most objective evaluators of a person's greatness are people who belong to a later time.
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There are many notable figures and great persons(两取其一即可) in history to whom both their contemporaries and later time people have an appraisement. Sometimes these appraisements conicide with each other, sometimes they differ greatly and even are contradictory and totally disparate. In my opinion, the later people's evaluation of historic figures has usually proved to be comprehensive and all-round, while the evaluation of their contemporaries is usually partial and incomplete.

An individual's greatness in his comtemporary's(contemporary) eyes are always incomplete for several reasons. First of all, an individual attracting much attention is sure to be influential or powerful in certain aspects which render them the ability to influence people's minds and opinions.(有点罗嗦) Therefore, the judgment of their contemporary is more or less affected by his(指代不明) power of influence（influencing） in their society. People will not be able to see clearly or does not have the courage to disclose the dark side of the individual and hence make an impartial evaluation of him. Otherwise,（In the case that） the individual's power and social influence will exert pressure on those who discolse his negative side and may jeopardize the disclosers. It is also possible that the fame and greatness of the individual has overshadowed his otherwise ugly side which people fail to discover, in fact, sometimes people are unwilling to reveal these unhappy matters to the public for the society has accepted the hero or heroine as an positive figure. Alternation of the individual's profile will render society as a whole the feeling of being cheated. Hence, contemporary people's evaluation a historic figure is always not complete and unjustified, and sometimes, even misleading.

In contrast to their contemporary's evalutaion, people in a later time will not have (will不如改为may) the psychological or practical burden to truely assess an individual's greatness. They will have much more freedom to better evaluate the individual from different aspects. One case in point is the evaluation of the founder of People's Republic of China-Chairman Mao. Mao is absolutely a great person in that he led the Chinese people for eight years in defending their country against Japanese invasion and won the fianl(final) victory. He is deified after the founding of PRC due to the great contributions he made to Chinese revolution. However, in 1966, Mao lauched(launched) an unprecedented Cultural Revolution, which lasted for 10 years and many innocent people died（were persecuted to death如何？） during this ruthless social chaotic period. (前后句缺乏过渡 Although Mao ,in his senectitude,did make some detrimatal policies to chinese citizens,)  This fault was not pointed out（The arbitrary apotheosis was not stopped） until 1978 when China decided to adopt open-up policy to develop its industry and economy. It was due to historical reasons and people's mindset at that time that prevent the recognition and publicity of Mao's serious defect in internal policy. Now Chines(Chinese) people can have a comprehensive and impartial judgment toward this historic figure that has changed Chinese fate and history.

Overall, the greatness of an individual cannot be easily judged because of historical reasons and social mindset. As an old saying goes: time is the touchstone of any beliefs. With the collapse of time, the hidden facts of an individual unknown to people of their times will gradually come out of sea and it provide a solid basis for later people to have a complete understanding of the individual.
层次清晰，语言流畅，只是观点有点偏激，不该否定当代评论吧！（个人意见）
还有就是有些句子前后缺乏过渡性结构。
规定时间写到这样，很不错了，比我好多了，继续努力，加油（：

saltsberryUID: 156561

我就知道，这世上还是好人多
kisssummer真是菩萨心肠，让刚昏睡起来的偶一下子就激动不已。。。。。。。
多谢多谢， 读自己的文章总是象雾里看花，难分优劣。
其实kisssummer提到的论证问题是很多贴子里面都谈到的一个致命伤，没想到在自己身上照样出现。。。。。让我再次认识到：

结构问题至关重要！！！！！！！

感动于kisssummer的认真细致，让我汗颜。。。（可是我记得是在word里改过才拿过来的呀）。
再接再厉，同时解决向kisssummer 学习！！！

saltsberryUID: 156561

看来偶的菩萨保佑果然显灵了，searong大虾又让偶的心多跳了好多次
先表达感激之情！！！！！
语句运用一直是在下倍感极难克服的障碍，想写的更地道有味看来非十天半月之功，还有十天考试，小弟感觉只能在searong所指出的连接过渡方面重点下功夫了。。。。
书到用时方恨少，临近考试才觉得折磨自己不够。。。。。。
另外，两位大虾kisssummer和searong都提到语气绝对问题令小弟十分警觉，以前从未发现有这方面的偏向。。。。。而是一向感觉语气很委婉周到随和
自我感觉害人不浅呀

saltsberryUID: 156561

miss kisssummer 怎么突然考起单词来了？
想遍gre单词，只见过一个形近词  senescent  年老的， 但从未见过senectitude， 汗颜之际查阅字典，原来是senescent的名词：）
既然说到这里，sen-是个年老的前缀，如senile 也是年老之意；-escent是个时间后缀，如neoscent新生的, prescent出生前的,adolescent青春期的，evanescent短暂的, obsolesecent即将过时的；
嗬嗬，
有复习了一下单词：）

saltsberryUID: 156561

最初的文章反而感觉好一点？看来在复习的过程中很可能走火入魔的
看来要经常到这里寻找中肯的意见
马上考了，循规蹈矩吧