Issue150 传媒和旅游之冲突问题，限时完成，不过很写得肤浅

fishergirlUID: 152325

Issue150: 583à626 words
Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.

With the development of modern society, television and worldwide computer connections step into people's lives day by day, which makes some people worry that it will reduce people's interest of tourism. Is it the case? No. In my point of view, just because the mass media open such colorful scenery, people are more likely to go out to enjoy the beauty of our world.

To begin with, as known to all, television and worldwide computer connections, as modern communicating technology, have bring great change to people's life. For example, through television and Internet, people may known news all over the world, and may enjoy all kinds of landscape throughout the world without going out the door. But in fact, such information got by TV and Internet are not so lively as they are in reality because they have been processed and lost some natural characters. Hence, the television and computer connections are more likely the keys which arouse people's interest to go out and visit the places that they know from TV and Internet or where they have dreamed for a long time.

Furthermore, it is convenient for people planning their tourism to use television and Internet to collect information they need. A mature visitor should know enough information about his/her aim place before setting out, when TV and Internet can exhibit their functions and superiorities. On the one hand, as there are many websites about tourism, people may have the first glance about the place they plan to visit through Internet and make their decisions whether to go or not. On the other hand, they can learn some necessary knowledge about the place's history, culture, special customs and so on for fear to make some jokes there, with the help of some TV programs and websites. Here is a real story happened in my life, which is a good case in point to show the importance of some preparation before a tourism. Last summer holiday, my family joined a tourism group to Yunnan, a very beautiful place in the southwest of China, which has many strange plants there, and some of them are poisonous. Once I saw a very appealing flower and wanted to take it back home. Thanks to the guide's prevention, otherwise I would say goodbye to this world because of the flower's deadly poison. Thus with the assistance of television and Internet, people may enjoy their tourism more orderly and safely.

In addition, such television programs or introductions in the Internet about tourism can only reflect the understanding to the sceneries of others. To get more real and abundant experience, people should go everywhere they are interested in by themselves. It is easy to understand through such a story, in which there are three people, one is a painter, another is a philosopher, and the third is a sculptor. They saw a special tree living on the edge of a cliff at the same time. The painter thought that it should be painted down for its unique beauty. While the philosopher was thinking about the philosophy reflected in it and admired that it can live under such a difficult condition. As for the sculptor, he had decided to cut it down to sculpt it as his new art work. The story cited here is to show that people who want to have their own thought and gain of the sceneries should go out of door and enjoy them by themselves. That is, tourism should be proposed and also would be popular.

In conclusion, although television and worldwide connections can show many places people interested in or never visit, they will not take the place of tourism, because both of them have their own convenience, and people would enjoy both of the happiness.

改了一些拼写错误，把明显不通的句子理了一下。

呵呵，虽然很肤浅，不过居然能够按时完成，我已经很满足了 :o

请大家不要笑我哦 :p

dallowayUID: 156640

鼓励一下，不错哟，限时的，你还有时间，可以再继续模考联系

有个建议，i开头结尾最好能有一句固定的废话（考试时用），虽然对分数影响不大，但可以静下心来答题

fishergirlUID: 152325

好的，是要建立自己的模板了，不然每次都想开头结尾，很伤神啊。

你准备的怎样了？加油哦！！！

apolloxpUID: 156355

困~~~明天来看

benben429UID: 157778

fishergirl渐入佳境，向你学习！

fishergirlUID: 152325

承蒙夸奖，不过水平了了啦。

一起加油吧！

LSDUID: 157855

最初由 dalloway 发布
[B]鼓励一下，不错哟，限时的，你还有时间，可以再继续模考联系

有个建议，i开头结尾最好能有一句固定的废话（考试时用），虽然对分数影响不大，但可以静下心来答题 [/B]

不好意思地问： :p
你所指的“废话”及“模版”是什么样的句子呢？
ISSUE内容涉及广泛，建立模版似乎有点困难啊
请指教

LSDUID: 157855

占座
呵呵:p

LSDUID: 157855

Issue150: 583à626 words
Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.

With the development of modern society, television and worldwide computer connections step into(用完成时是不时要好点呢?呵呵,个人意见) people's lives day by day, which makes some people worry that it will reduce people's interest(in) of tourism. Is it the case? No. In my point of view, just because the mass media open such colorful scenery(用影像要更准些吧?), people are more likely to go out to enjoy the beauty of our world.

To begin with, as known to all, television and worldwide computer connections, as modern communicating technology, have bring great change(S) to people's life(复数?). For example, through television and Internet, people may known news all over the world, and may enjoy all kinds of landscape throughout the world without going out the door. But in fact, such information got by TV and Internet are not so lively as they are in reality because they have been processed and lost some natural characters(为什么不具体说一下呢?). Hence, the television and computer connections are more likely the keys which arouse people's interest to go out and visit the places that they(have known)know from TV and Internet or where they have dreamed for a long time.(这段到底说什么啊?前面似乎在讲television and worldwide computer connections的好处,后面又说了一个新的意思, such information got by TV and Internet are not so lively as they are in reality because they have been processed and lost some natural characters个人感觉有点乱,不如用一个让步)

Furthermore, it is convenient for people planning their tourism to use television and Internet to collect information they need. A mature visitor should know enough information about his/her aim place before setting out, when (有点问题吧?)TV and Internet can exhibit their functions and superiorities. On the one hand, as there are many websites about tourism, people may have the first glance about the place they plan to visit through Internet and make their decisions whether to go or not. On the other hand, they can learn some necessary knowledge about the place's (showplaces’) history, culture, special customs and so on, for fear to make some jokes there, with the help of some TV programs and websites. Here is a real story happened in my life, which is a good case in point to show the importance of some preparation before a tourism. Last summer holiday, my family joined a tourism group to Yunnan, a very beautiful place in the southwest of China, which has many strange plants there, and some of them are poisonous. Once I saw a very appealing flower and wanted to take it back home. Thanks to the guide's prevention, otherwise I would say goodbye to this world because of the 这flower's deadly poison. Thus with the assistance of television and Internet, people may enjoy their tourism more orderly and safely.(请问这段的论据和As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete.以及你的TS有什么关系啊?)

In addition, such television programs or introductions in the Internet about tourism can only reflect the understanding to the sceneries of others. To get more real and abundant experience, people should go everywhere they are interested in by themselves(???). It is easy to understand through such a story, in which there are three people, one is a painter, another is a philosopher, and the third is a sculptor. They saw a special tree living on the edge of a cliff at the same time. The painter thought that it should be painted down for its unique beauty. While the philosopher was thinking about the philosophy reflected in it and admired that it can live under such a difficult condition. As for the sculptor, he had decided to cut it down to sculpt it as his new art work. The story cited here is to show that people who want to have their own thought and gain of the sceneries should go out of door and enjoy them by themselves. That is, tourism should be proposed and also would be popular.

In conclusion, although television and worldwide connections can show  many places people interested in or(BUT) never visit, they will not take the place of tourism, because both of them have their own convenience, and people would enjoy both of the(their) happiness(benefits).

整篇文章比较流畅,但须注意例子的论证强度.加油加油
欢迎批改我的文章:p

九月爱上乒乓球UID: 151821

可以从另一个角度 就是说 我们和出去旅游往往是为了和另一个人分享快乐,交流感情之类,如果是处于这个目的话 旅游就很有必要咯

fishergirlUID: 152325

谢谢LSD的批阅，我当时脑子没想太多，点了题目就开始写了。其实感觉这几点都写的比较勉强，body1有点前后矛盾；body2是说电视和网络对于旅游的促进，不过的确没有正面反驳题目；body3稍稍扣题一点，不过还是没有说清楚。而且文中用的两个例子又臭又长，实在是有凑字数的感觉。

我还要继续努力，努力！！！

fishergirlUID: 152325

谢谢九月的提醒，很好的一个分论点。如果碰到这个题目，我一定会记得写上这一点：）