艾小卉的5月作文帖

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留楼补上一周作业

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2015/7/6   留楼补作业

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语言反馈汇总之四：指代不明或缺乏限定范围

日期	题号	原句	点评	修改	总结
语言反馈之四
6月11日	Issue 33	Whether the statement holds true or not depends on groups of people we are talking about	which groups …	whether the statement holds true or not depends on which groups of people we are discussing	限定范围的表达不准确
6月12日	Argument 28	To begin with, we need to know that whether salicylates have the same effect for headaches as aspirin and the extent of side effects	" that删掉  and the extent of side effects (of what?)"	To begin with, we need to know whether salicylates have the same effect for headaches as aspirin .（side effect由于不靠谱所以删去）	如果side effect保留的话，后面应说清楚是什么的副作用
6月16日	Arument 15	"According to the memorandum, Happy Pancke House restaurants has replaced butter with margarine and claimed that had little impact on customers"	注意claim的主语不是restaurant	"According to the memorandum, Happy Pancke House restaurants has replaced butter with margarine and the business manager claimed that had little impact on customers"	指代错误
6月4日	Argument 14	" Even if less sleep of executives can improve the management responsibility, this rule may not guarantee the higher profit.  "	这句解释有点奇怪 其实你直接跳到下句还好些呢,rule这里指代不明	原文中这一句删去更好。借鉴老师范文里的：  As we all know, correlation does not necessarily imply causation.  A host of other factors unrelated to sleep may have caused the success of the executives.	写作时指代不确定的地方尽量避开，换一种清楚地表达方式

                                                                           

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dingchenchen 发表于 2015-6-25 16:46
你的表格做得好乱啊，跟我之前的一样。你是不是用“高级模式”中的html语言进行编译表格的？这个太费力了 ...

谢谢啦，本来一直没试成功，后来发现改成复制到Word里就可以了

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你最近还参加同主题练习不？